The short setup effectively made way for the surprise (and gut wrenching) ending. It leaves a questioning half mystery unresolved but sure is there. Thanks for sharing this intriguing bit of mind play in written form.
Love the imagery, so descriptive and powerful. It brings out the poetic form with a hard emotional embrace of what narcissistic love is. Thanks for sharing.
Found this by clicking on the Read and Review button. Glad I did. A good late night sober reflection on life and death. My wife recently passed away. Your words reflect the honest truth of how once true love is caught it never flies away. thanks for sharing.
Hit the Read & Review button and your poem showed up. Easy to read attractive format drew me in. Nice word flow with simple wording and fun images kept my attention. No distracting changes from short to long wording, problems with sentence structure or grammar.
The message is spot on. Why worry about what the cause of bad weather may be. When you're in it, that's what counts above all else.
I came over to visit after receiving a review from you. This entry caught my eye. I read it in the comfortable silence of my mind, enjoying the tapestry of your thoughts left here for others to explore. Thanks for sharing.
Read your 300 word contest entry. Had to come back for more. This called out a memory of an earlier English version of Sharp, a tv series I enjoyed in the same dramatic genre.
My favorite line - like a blade catching light. Vivid, original, you have a true writer's imagination. Thanks for sharing. Hope to see more of you around in the land of WDC.
brought here by reading a recent review, tempted and longing for a worthwhile late night read. The muse attending this poem stirred feelings strong and tender. The poet's hand turned them into unforgettable words. Thanks for sharing.
had to look up this ninth century old Welsh poetry form to find out what it was. A crooked four line 30 syllable variation of another Welsh creation. Interesting background for such a simple result. It is too bad poetry has fallen from grace in most popular publishers minds.
I also recently read that even major publishers for written fiction are nook players in financial circles. The good news is that books have a dedicated following who won't be going away soon, if at all. Write on.
Clear and concise wording made reading flow. Enough interest through dialogue to keep me reading. I like the idea of writing a thousand word scene a day in a standard sci Fi anchored rendition. Things like using bugs to clean engines adds details that came across as practical and necessary. It didn't bother me that there was no description of the main character. This was just a mind picture flung out there into public view. Thanks for sharing.
Tantalizing reading drew me in and kept me there until reaching the end. I was abruptly torn back into reality. Writing like writing should be done, emersing the reader into a a previously unseen world.
I read up on Samhain for a contest I entered, so enjoyed revisiting its acquaintance. Thanks for sharing your tale.
A joy to read more of your work. Great ending. I don't know how you have the 300 word contest down like you do, but I'd like to learn. I do enjoy playing with the prompts. Take care, and write on.
Good story. Kept my interest from word one to the end. No errors distracted me. Clear and concise wording kept the flow going. Knowing this came from personal experience added interest. The climax, knowing the main character was putting one over, offered just enough satisfaction to make the ending satisfying. Thanks for sharing.
<Applause> <stomping of feet> <wild and crazy cheers> "Wait a sec, think I fogged up my glasses."
Admiring the well oiled machine that is your short story. "Reads smooth as a baby's behind. Great delivery. Nary a nick in grammar or spelling. Well polished buildup. What's not to admire."
<pause> "Only thing I'd change is the envy I feel for not being able to do it myself."
I happened on this faith promoting true life journal like entry in the WDC Read and Review section. It takes courage to reveal one's inner core to others. Personal trials depend on faith to strengthen spiritual bonds. that testimony was clear and center point. I got a hint of where the author's writing is going while journeying through this work.
What I enjoyed most was the personal examples, struggles, and hope being felt at this time in the author's life. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for the reminder to be grateful. I make it a daily (almost) practice to write one such thing in my journal. Welcome to the disability channel. I was surprised how large the community is. I like the online contact through back and forth email since my hearing loss prevents good phone conversations or physical visits. I lack the money for hearing aid add on's so am grateful for this website for its social contacts as well as getting feedback on writing.
Take care, and I look forward to reading more of your posts.
It is fun seeing a creative mind juggle picture words into being. A kind of magic that feeds the soul, has just done so with mine. When this world becomes wearing, visiting another world is a freedom much sought for. Thanks for sharing.
Congrats on the ribbon attached to the poem. I easily attached myself to the poem as well, being old, pale, and frail myself. Thank goodness you kept it to four short lines. I'm hale and hearty for my age, but anything longer than one deep breath is a little wearing.
I've outlasted most others I know, so it was nice of you to write this poem. Now I have a new best friend.
A brave revelation in these perilous times. Such a loss, what is being forced on the military. The poem brought back memories of two women I worked with. I was impressed by how they talked with, not to the mentally handicapped men in the group home.
When I asked to share lunch, it surprised me how shy and careful they were, keeping their distance as we ate. What broke the ice was my writing a letter of admiration put in each of their work files, when someone else had just written bad things about them I thought were wrong.
I was living at work in a warehouse at the time, unable to afford any rent. They brought over food without my asking, and we became good friends.
I hit the brakes here at the Read and Review. It was a real gas checking out the custom built humor. You snailed it.
You can never be too car-full when driving your point home. The detailed journey showcasing each vehicle of interest added knowledge I hadn't gotten before. You took no backseat to fitting it all in.
A simple lilting cadence underscores the offering of emotional healing we all need from time to time. What I enjoyed most was how each means of doing so doesn't cost a penny, just a little emotional maturity and recognition. Each stanza is short and sweet which increases its impact. Thanks for sharing. Have a great day.
Caught this in another review and had to go see what all the excitement was about. Plus, there was mention of comedy and I wanted to feel a smile. I got one, thanks. Funny ending. Good buildup. As noted in the other review, no spelling or grammar issues distracted from reading. Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed the read.
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