|This is a beautiful poem. It is very bitter-sweet and well written.
Personally, I would shrink your font so that your lines appear shorter. This will help your reader follow your flow. The flow of the poem and rhyme are good but would be easier read if the lines did not overlap.
In line 4: "bye" should be capitolized as it is the first word in quotation.
Other than these minor things, the poem is strong and touches the reader very well.
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