Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOOSE THIS PIECE:I found your poem in the review area and the title caught my eye. I was told in a review yesterday that I had created an new oxymoron so the word was fresh in my head.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:I liked reading your poem. I will admit that I don't really understand it but you said it was for an assignment so that kind of makes sense then. It's hard to put a lot of emotion and feeling into something we are required to do.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:This poem made me feel like I was reading something different from what I am used to and stirred up curiosity for me.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:The poem appears to be well written. Again, I'm not sure what the assignment was, but what I read is understandable and works. Maybe a quick explanation of the assignment at the bottom of the poem to explain it.
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Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOOSE THIS PIECE:I found your poem when I was looking through the review section.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:I liked the story your poem told and I also liked the flow. They rhyming was well done and it made the read smooth from start to finish.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:I know what the butterfly effect is and the poem using the actually effects of freeing the butterfly to symbolize the butterfly effect was very nicely done. I felt that the thought behind the poem was complete when I got to the end.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:Overall I was impressed with this poem and very happy I took the time to read it. I'm partial to traditional poetry in the sense of rhyming verse so I took pleasure in reading your writing.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing. Feel free to stop by my Portfolio and read some of my work.
Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOSE THIS PIECE:I chose to read your poem because I came across it in the review area and the title caught my attention.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:I liked the rhyming style of your poem. It flowed well for me. I got from start to finish with only a little difficulty.
CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM: The first 2 lines in the fourth stanza tripped me up a little bit. When I backed up and re-read slowly I was able to find the pattern.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:This poem was tricky for me because I had a bit of difficulty figuring out what it was in regards to. I got a feeling of defiance from the writing.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:Overall I enjoyed reading your poem. When I finished, I felt satisfied. Good job.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing. Feel free to stop by my Portfolio and read some of my work.
Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOSE THIS PIECE:I saw your poem in the Newbie + review group and haven’t read your writing g before so I chose it to review.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:I liked the cadence your poem presented to me. It is written in a way that makes me want to read it at a quicker pace which helps to build the feeling of tension being conveyed.
CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:I have nothing to put here. Poetry is an art form of personal expression but even then, your poem was well written. I wouldn’t be able to make any suggestions for improvement.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:Reading your poem instilled in me a growing feeling of frustration and irritation. The word ‘bleating’ sets the tone right from the beginning. That word in itself sounds tense and irritating.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:Overall I really enjoyed reading your poem. I got from start to finish with no stumbling or having to re-read. I felt the emotion in the writing and it painted a picture in my mind. Good job.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing. Feel free to stop by my Portfolio and read some of my work.
Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOSE THIS PIECE:I was looking for items to review and your poem came up. The description is what drew me in.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:I enjoyed the flow of this poem. It was effortless. The rhyme scheme was easy to follow and it carried me from line to line, start to finish.
CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:I generally don’t off this for poems which are usually very personal expressions, but there is nothing I could say about your poem anyway.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:This poem made me feel sad for what we have done to the planet in such a short time. Mostly due to greed and consumption.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:Overall this was a wonderful well written poem that made me think and made me feel. Good job.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing. Feel free to stop by my Portfolio and read some of my work.
Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOSE THIS PIECE:I found your poem in the “Read a Newbie” area and the title caught my eye.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:I liked your poem. I liked it because it was full of honest emotion which is what a poem should be. You put what you were feeling on the paper and left nothing to question.
CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:I found nothing wrong with this. It is a person expression of how you feel and you did a good job at that.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:This poem made me feel nostalgic for that feeling you get when you fall in love. I could feel the butterflies in my stomach as I read your work.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:Overall I enjoyed reading your poem. It brought me back to when I was younger and anything that does that is good in my opinion. Good job.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing. Feel free to stop by my Portfolio and read some of my work.
Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOSE THIS PIECE:I found your poem in the “Read a Newbie” section and the picture with it caught my attention.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:I enjoyed reading your poem because it’s contentt are something I don’t get to read about very often. Specially from a first person point of view.
CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:I have nothing to say regarding this. Poetry is a personal expression and I saw no grammatical corrections.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:This poem showed me life from a different point of view. One that I’ve never experienced.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:My overall impression of your poem was one of unexpected optimism and happiness.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing. Feel free to stop by my Portfolio and read some of my work.
Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOSE THIS PIECE:I chose to read you work because I found it in the “Read a Newbie” section and the title caught my attention.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:The words you used painted a good picture for me. I could see what you were saying and almost feel the building heat and panic being in that situation could create.
CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:I have nothing to say in this regard. Poetry is a personal expression and grammatically I saw nothing wrong with it.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:This poem made me feel like a person trapped in a situation that I can’t get out of. The imagery it created for me helped me feel like I was in this persons shoes.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it to be well written.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing. Feel free to stop by my Portfolio and read some of my work.
Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOSE THIS PIECE:I choose this piece because I deal with depression on a daily basis and tend to be drawn towards other people’s stories.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:I like the way you describe your depths. The way you felt when you were at the bottom, ready to give up. I also like the way you described being able to grasp to the one thing that pulled you out from where you were.
CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:I have nothing I could ad to this. It is a personal piece of writing and it conveys your emotions well.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:I felt both sad for the way you were feeling and happy that you were able to find the light again.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:Depression is a horrible beast that has an amazing ability to hid in the open and jump on you when you are least expecting it. I’m happy you were able to pick yourself up.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing. Feel free to stop by my Portfolio and read some of my work.
Hi. I’m CJ and I’m reviewing your work in association with the Newbies + Poetry Group.
WHY I CHOSE THIS PIECE: I chose to read your work because I came across it in the “Read a Newbie” section.
WHAT I LIKED ABOUT IT:I enjoyed reading your work because it made me think about dreams I’ve had and dreams I’d like to see come true. You are right, dreams do come true and I truly believe that if you want something bad enough it will come to you.
CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM:I can’t think of anything to say in regards to this. It was a nice read and it told your story well.
HOW THIS PIECE MADE ME FEEL:This poem made me feel hopeful and nostalgic. It made me hope for current dreams to come true and got me reminiscing of dreams I’ve had in the past.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:Overall I think this is a nice poem. It made me think and feel and that’s exactly what you want a poem to do. Good job.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing. Feel free to stop by my Portfolio and read some of my work.
Hi, welcome to WDC. I found your poem in the “read a newbie” section. I like your work. It’s very descriptive and leaves nothing to interpretation. It expresses what you are trying to get across in a clear and concise manner. A real nice read. Thank you for sharing.
I like this. I couldn’t have said it much better myself. Cold, dark, heavy and dense. Like an impenetrable fog that takes over your heart mind and soul. Forcing all light out and letting none in. Stay strong. Keep writing. Thank you for sharing.
I enjoyed reading your poem. It’s a really nice first effort. The words you used helped me to share in what you were trying to express. I feel that poems are written to release something that is hard to put into regular words. It’s a powerful form of expression. Thank you for sharing this.
I like this poem. I think it is so important that people realize how necessary it is to love yourself and also accept yourself. As you said, you are your own saviour, as are we all for ourselves. Such an important message to send. Thank you for sharing this.
Hi. Welcome to WDC. I read you poem and thoroughly enjoyed it. I could feel the tension in the writing. It made me think of the sibling rivalry I’ve seen with some of my friends. I will read some more of your writing. Good job, and again, welcome to the site.
I enjoyed reading your work. It made me feel nostalgic thinking back to all those stages of my life.
The last line “To become something more.” Circles the piece back to the beginning “”Ever since we were kids we played pretend, dress up.” giving me a nice sense of closure.
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