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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hmmm, Well let me start with the fact that I do not mind guns, I mind idiots and criminals with guns, illegals with guns, teens and gangbangers with guns and unlicensed and untrained people with guns. I do not own nor have need for a gun but I am surrounded by sportsmen that actually hunt and really do eat their kills. I believe it is dangerous to have a paramilitary armed and not the citizens. Just my thoughts.
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Of all the gin joints in the world-----This is true female deviousness!
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Review of Cirque de Sad  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Oh my God, such teen angnst!
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Funny I should read this piece as I just posted a story called RIP AUdrie Potts which is in kind of the same vein as your write. Anyway, well done.
Taylor
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Review of Bogeyman Nights  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Good twist. Well written except one tiny mistake. Should be convince the peeper he wAs me.
Taylor
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I absolutely loved this piece. This is exactly where my mind wanders to very often. Nice work.
Taylor
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
I actually loved the new age vampires. Big fan of the Originals and even like the sappy series Vampire Diaries although the plot line gets old. These are a far cry from the original visions of vampires of the 30's. Keep enjoying.
Taylor
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Review of Ruins  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great Job
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well I liked that a lot. I do a lot of that kind of writing and have a deep appreciation of how good and just how awful we can be. We have never seen the best of man and unfortunately probably never will. Just read a paper, watch a news cast or listen to the radio. Unfortunately that is where we currently reside.
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Review of happy times  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (3.5)
What happened to the dog?
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Review of My Blog  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (4.0)
Now this should be interesting
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Review of Waiting For Snow  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well Lou, nice job. I personally hate snow but I get your poem.
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very creative. I would have liked to see more development of the siblings. As written there is no context of how old they are , what they do etc.
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (3.5)
I guess starting on the bottom of the rung and working your way up is a much better character building method leaving one with a confidence in their own abilities. The crash from the top down must be devastating.
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Fitting for a Rat Bastard huh? Might I suggest a bit more white space?
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Review of Little Red  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (3.5)
Now there's a twist for ya.

Taylor
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (4.0)
Wow, Now there is a name from the past! I believe we shared quite a bit of reading back at writers network? Good to see you again.

Taylor
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (5.0)
Funny I should find this to read. I took up the guitar a couple months ago. Not sure about Frank but my thoughts have been turning to Dylan and Baez! Has been on a constant loop and never tire of it. I used to listen to Dylan when I was a kid but not since and listening now I am in awe of his poetry.
Taylor
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Review of a quest  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Well I was there just last week, must have missed you! One suggestion enlarge your print a bit.

Taylor
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Well Jean Luc, or is it Kirk? Sure hope you brought Spock with you!
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Review of Election 2018  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (5.0)
You hear daily the gnashing of fangs and the consistent whining raised to a howl. It is breathtaking in scope. To even attempt to view a news cast other than Fox (which is bad enough) is like being subjected to 20 people with sharp claws scraping at a chalkboard. You move from one channel to the next and the words do not change one syllable. I really want to know the phone number they call at the DNC to get their marching orders in the early morning hours. Almost three years in and they still can't give up the ghost!
Aside from being FAKE NEWS it is depressing to realize that a portion of people actually believe their drivel. I have pretty much turned off the tv and the radio now plays music instead of talk. I can stand it no longer!
Be well
Taylor
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Review of Ugly  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (3.5)
Very fanciful indeed. Good imagery. Reading your bio---seems to me you should have plenty to say and share!
Cheers, Taylor
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Review of Mariposa  
Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, Well that certainly was lengthy. The most important thing I wish to say is that you need a lot more white space. It was difficult to keep track of with the lines so close. This has all the conjuring of Rod Serling and George Orwell as well as several movies i have seen. The trouble with this story is that it could be coming sooner rather than later!Two other things struck me. You used the word inject and actually should have been cap or cover, something like that.The other, I'm not sure dilapidations is a word? Needs to be something like dilapidated buildings posing as homes or whatever, like that.
Be Well,
Taylor
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: E | (4.0)
Seems a though you and i think a great deal alike. It seems that the older I get the worse the world around becomes. Everyday I see such arrogance and or the inability of people to reason as they commit just the most blatantly stupid and insipid behavior. And that is just the civilized among us. Take a visit to Chicago over a weekend and you get a taste of a new kind of world. A visit to San Francisco is yet another story.I used to live out there and it was beautiful, now the streets are filled with feces, drug paraphernalia, homeless living on sewer grates the worst part of that is these governments simply subsidize this behavior.
Rather than trying to correct these depraved behaviors they opted for a phone app that tells you where the piles of s*** are.
As i read your piece, it could well be about Kate Steinle, shot down on Pier 39 by an illegal.
Be well, Taylor
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Review by Taylor Twelve
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Your title caught my eye as I am in that type of business. I found that the story reads pretty smoothly until the very end. It is there it felt rushed, just like you wanted to be done with it? Also you need to correct the names on the 21rst line from the bottom.
All in all a pretty clever story.
Taylor
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