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I look to be entertained, informed, and connected in some way. It may be wrong but if the first few lines or paragraphs don't hook me in some way, I will leave without even reading the rest. Also, I will notify you if I run into errors.
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I do not mean to toot my own horn but I am awesome at limericks. I've helped so many people with limericks. I've even thought about opening up a class here on limericks.
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In no particular order: humor, horror, biography. I'll read any genre but those are my main favorites!
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I'm not sure. Maybe legal or finance but if done in the right voice, even that can be good.
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Poetry, short stories, bios, essays,fiction, and nonfiction
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pros, books
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Something that is LONG like 100 kbs or something. I will only review long pieces if someone requests it of me but nothing that's 100 kb. Let's not get crazy or anything.
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello daggro,

This was absolutely brilliant! A truly fantastic read. Personally, I think everything dealing with zombies is funny. Even if it isn't meant to be. Example: Night of The Living Dead.... hillarious! So naturally, it's even better if it's actually meant to be funny, like this.

One tiny spec of an error I encountered was I suppose you have a point - however its not all bad, we may yet one day find a cure for zombification and rebuild civilisation. It is supposed to actually be civiliZation.

One part that I thought was really funny was My penis fell off two weeks ago. *Laugh*

Write on!

Jenny
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Review of Quitting Coffee  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Oneofmany,

As I was reading this, it was like reading something from a Dr. Suess book. That's my opinion anyway.

It flowed really great, didn't have any grammatical errors in it, and best of all I loved the subject. I really love the end result! Fabulous poem!

Write on!

Jenny
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Review of A Weighty Issue  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello Mary,

I have read "A Weighty Issue"  and I offer you my help and suggestions.

You said but I think my attitude to weight is better than most peoples peoples should have an apostrophe s to show posession. It should read as "people's".

You said Seeing Angelina Jolie and Victoria Beckham starve theirselves, "theirselves should be "themselves"

You said I just want to give them a sunday dinner and large slice of cake,to feed them up a bit there should be a space after the comma.

You said The 'super fatties' who are a force of nature all by theirselves. Once again, that should be "themselves".

I love the topic and I completely agree. I had a peice about obesity in America. I can't believe it's so out of control.

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Winnie,

I have read "Typographical Terror"  and I offer you my input. Do with it what you will.

Whew! What a character she is! I really enjoyed reading this and the little twist.

I did encounter a couple of mistakes:

jammed the key in the lock With practiced, choreographic movements the w in with should not be capitolized.

Ignoring his human’s greeting, Max began to groom his tail You missed a letter in igNoring. Simple typing mistakes, that's all.

I hope I have been of some help!

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Arakun,

I have read "The Unworthy Bride"  and I offer you my opinions and perhaps some tips on how to make this better.

First of all, there is absolutely nothing in here to fix. I thought this was a terrific story. I absolutely loved the descriptions which made me picture it really well in my mind.

I wasn't expecting the twist at the end. That was a pleasant surprise!

Write on!

Jenny
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Review of Weird Book-Buying  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello John,

I have read "Weird Book-Buying"  and I offer you my input.

This is short, sweet, and to the point. I really liked that aspect of this,

What I didn't care for in particular was this part in orange Surely, if a buyer had the choice of both original and revised editions, you would expect the revised book to gradually overtake and then way outsell the original? The reason is because the sentence you have here is not a question so it doesn't need a question mark. If you want it to be a questin, you should reword it.

I hope this has been of some help to you.

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello ennazus,

I have read "This is my pet peeve. What's yours?"  and I offer you my thoughts.

This was very well written and I did not encounter any errors. Well done.

The entire time that I was reading this, I thought for sure that you were a guy because this is something for sure that a lot of guys would do. Then I found out that you have a husband. Just out of curiosity, is this based on truth or did you make it all up? Either way, great job!


Don't change a single thing!

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello Professor,

This was just amazing. Personally, I think this is very hard to do without repeating any words. I have only tried once though. It made perfect sense and you didn't repeat a word at all.

Sorry it's more like a praise in stead of a review.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of One Night a Year  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello Rose,

Congrats on 2nd place. The titles fit in there nicely and the story was really good. I did encounter a couple of small mistakes and that is the only reason you placed second.

*Bigsmile*

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Oldwarrior,

I have read "The Halloween Ghoul "  and I offer you my opinions on it.

This was just fabulous! Another great poem. It was sick and humorous. Just my style. I loved the rhythm of the poem. It was almost song like. I didn't encounter any errors. It was superb!

{e:smile{

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Oldwarrior,

I have read "The Werewolf of Halloween"  and I will share my thoughts.

As an adult, I still absolutely love halloween. I'm really into horror and such. This was an absolutely amazing poem! The flow was great and so whas the rhythm & rhyme. No errors at all and the story was excellent! Great job. I will definitely be sure to check out your other halloween items and then your non-halloween items.

*bighsmile*

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Sticktalker,

I feel like I know you a bit better now. This was very well written and you did a very well describing everything all throughout.

*Smile*

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Cyam,

I have read "You Are What You Drink"  and I offer you my opinions and thought.

I thought this was really great. Very funny. I would liked to read more of it. There are so many more possibilities with this, which is why I didn't give you the highest rating. It was indeed a good read though, with no mistakes.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello John,

I have just read "Smoking Out Obesity"  and I will be offering my thoughts on it.

I thought this was just great. I absolutely loved it and I even chuckled outloud a few times because I completely agree with everything in here. I myself, have been smoke free for 2 years now but I still want a cigarette on a daily basis. So I was completely able to see your point.

This was very well written and I did not encounter any errors. Great job!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Cinnamon,

Congrats on getting third place. I loved how you used all the titles throughout the story.

The only mistake I saw was Mark sniggered beside me. "Sniggered" is supposed to be "snickered". All in all though, good story.

I hope to see another entry from you in the future.

Write on!

Jenny
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Review of Rosie and Ray  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Beck,

Congrats on 1st place. It helps that you didn't have any competitors. *Laugh* This entry was very good and I loved how you didn't wait to long to throw in the titles. That's how I do it.

Hope to see another entry from you.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Summertime Blues  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Jamie,

Thanks for entering my contest. I absolutly loved your entry! I loved when you had The facts of life are me and these perfect strangers are living in a different world . This will be the longest two weeks of my so called Llfe .

New prompt will be up tomorrow.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Calling Me  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Sherri,

I just loved this poem. I was able to picture everything with the great imagery you provided.

Everything was just perfect in the poem. Nothing was spelled wrong nor was any punctuation wrong.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Just One Chance  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Sherri,

This story was great. You did a great job at having the reader (or at least me)rooting for Todd.

The only suggestion I have is with this line Todd could not believe his ears. “Y, y, yeah!” he stammered. “I’ll go get my glove!” When stammering or stuttering, it's always best to put it like this "Y-y-yeah".

I know I didn't give much help because there was no reason for a lot of feedback other than the stammering. I hope that bit was helpful.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Chained,

This was good, telling of why you like martial arts. Now I am going to offer you some tips to improve this.

You said Martial Arts is important to me because it teaches discipline and self control You should have "are" in stead of "is" because you are talking in plural form.

You put In class a student learns discipline through listening and focus. One way to learn discipline is through listening. This is too repetitive. Maybe you can say something like "One way to learn discipline is through listening and focus which is learned in class."


You had Focus is also needed, otherwise a student cannot progress. Focus is needed in the forums that students learn, Once again, too repetitive. The second sentence isn't really needed.

You have But when a student finally does complete it, he feels a sense of pride. Take out "But".

I hope this helps.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of LIGHT  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Natalie,

This poem had a good flow to it and good images through out. There didn't appear to be any sort of grammar mistakes.

This was a little too metaphorical for my taste. I like more literal poems. Just a personal preferance. What doesn't work for one person, works great for another.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Sex and the City  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
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Hello Jen,

First of all, it's not necessary to double space every line. It would be better to double space between paragraphs.

This had mistakes through it, but there were two that really stood out.

Sex and the City is coming to theatres tommrow. That would be "tomorrow".

although, her character also has a sensitive side to her friend's problems

I find that so moving to care for a friend, where you need a shoulder to cry

on to confess your feelings to. Capitolize the first letter of the sentence. And once again, double spacing only between paragraphs will make it look much better.

I hope this has been helpful.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Grooved Pavement  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Angie,

Interesting opinion piece. I didn't really catch any errors.

I listen to music a lot. When I write, is one of those times. The only way it affects me is I will type to the beat if a song comes on that I really like. Funny thing is, I can't stop typing to the beat. I've tried. lol

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Chlo,

I thought this was a very interested story. I love metal, but will never get in a pit. Maybe if I had floor seats....maybe.

At times, you switched from second person and third person. You should go through and make it all one POV.

The other errors I encountered will be in red.

It hits you that he just waved at you. He... Just... Waved... At... You... Jimmy... Waved... At... You... And (take out And) from that moment on, all common sense, all rational thinking, is lost from your mind. In stead of having just one sentence words, why don't you do this "It hits you that he just waved at you. He. Just. Waved. At. You. Jimmy. Waved. At. You. And from that moment on, all common sense,

I mean, your entire room is covered in posters with him.
your head is tick tick ticking with excitement It really would seem better to just have ticking. You cold say really ticking or just ticking.

And suddenly, you faint.

And that will always go down as the best 20 minutes of your life. In here, take out both Ands. It would also look better if you spelled out the number.

Hope I've helped.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Magoo,

I am gong to share my opinions about .

This was just great! There were no errors and it was a great story.

I do admit though the line Sure I get yelled at if I try to lick the tray. Puzzled and disgusted me. *Laugh* Then when I got to the end, boy was I relieved.

*Bigsmile*

write on,

Jenny
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