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I look to be entertained, informed, and connected in some way. It may be wrong but if the first few lines or paragraphs don't hook me in some way, I will leave without even reading the rest. Also, I will notify you if I run into errors.
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I do not mean to toot my own horn but I am awesome at limericks. I've helped so many people with limericks. I've even thought about opening up a class here on limericks.
Favorite Genres
In no particular order: humor, horror, biography. I'll read any genre but those are my main favorites!
Least Favorite Genres
I'm not sure. Maybe legal or finance but if done in the right voice, even that can be good.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, short stories, bios, essays,fiction, and nonfiction
Least Favorite Item Types
pros, books
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Something that is LONG like 100 kbs or something. I will only review long pieces if someone requests it of me but nothing that's 100 kb. Let's not get crazy or anything.
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello Adrian,

I have read "Black Friday; A Christmas Story"  and I offer you my thoughts.

First of all *Laugh*This was great to read. I can relate. I wouldn't be caught dead at Wal mart at that time on that day.

There are a few things you can do to make the story even better. surrounded by a thousand rednecks, probably armed and ready to fight over ANYthing, and I'm going to try for an X-Box? This would appear better if "anything" was in italics.
c:red}softly muttering to each other like a huge flock of vultures waiting for their chosen target to finally breathe it's last, when suddenly, there before me, in all it's plastic and paper clad glory, was the pallet upon which were neatly stacked the X-Box 360's. I think maybe you meant to put breath after last? It would flow better if you did. There are too many commas in this. I know commas are as evil as crazy rednecks on black friday.

My favorite part other than the not being a morning person was when you wanted to beat the lady, but yelled at her in redneck in stead. *Laugh*

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Mel,

I have read "Prayers Be With You"  and I offer you my thoughts.

I thought this was well written and I think it will make Judy a bit happy. Well done. *thumbup*

Write on!

Jenny
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Review of Trick or Treat  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jaye,

I have read {item:1485020 } and I offer you my thoughts and opinions.

Technically, I didn't see any gammar errors.

Story wise, it was okay. I would have liked to have known how Jack died. I really would have liked to also know who was actually right. Was it just a ghost playing a prank on his widow?

I think you could have told just a little more to make it slightly better. Of course that is just my opinion.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
Cubby,

This was a very good question. Never gave it much thought at all. I chose I'm here for enjoyment and love the feedback. When actually I think i have more than one answer. I love to write and I'd rather write than do almost anything else. The reason I came here in the first place was to buckle down and write a book. Well lol I've only wrote a ton of other things in stead.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of No Treasure Here  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Beck,

Congrats on third place. This was very good and had no errors. You fit all the titles in nicely.

I hope to see another entry from you. It won't always take so long to get to judge.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Mike,

Congrats on first place. This was a fantastic story with no errors. I absolutely loved it.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Mike,

I have read "A Nation Moves Forth"  and I offer you my thoughts.

I loved reading this. This was very well written and shared your opinions of this horrendous trajedy. Most people share this opinion as well. I know I do.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Snowsuit Gone Bad  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Stickwalker,

I have read "Snowsuit Gone Bad"  and I offer you my thoughts.

I absolutely loved this! This was great and very imaginative. It kept my interest and I didn't run into any errors.

My favorite part was when the genie said “Where did you get THAT idea,” the genie said; “Giving three wishes went out ages ago, right after computers were invented. Now you want my magic gift or not?” Creative!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Amber,

I have read "Why I won't climb trees"  and I offer you my thoughts and suggestions.

This was a bit humorous as the guy is laying there. It was good because I can really imagine that scenario happening for real. *Laugh*

I did happen to catch a few minor errors. You would think that wouldn’t take too long, right. after right there should be a question mark in stead of a period.

I also think I broke my let, last I checked legs were not meant to bend that way. let is a minor typo that was supposed to be leg.

“Well this is a fine mess you have gotten yourself into, what happened.” That looks like it was meant to be a question.

I hope i have been at least a bit helpful.

Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Beck,

This was very good. I wanted to give you first place, but the reason you didn't win was there were some mistakes. Just mispelled words or typos.

Here are some gift points though for a good story.

Hope to see you enter again.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Tea and Sympathy  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Coruruc,

Congrats on first place. Everything fit in nicely and it helped that my name was in there. lol Coincidentally, my grandpa's wife's (not my grandma) is named Georgia. Giving you any less than first place was not an option. *Laugh*

I hope to see you enter again.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Erotica  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello Ashie,

I have read "Erotica"  and I offer you my opinions.

This was good and I couldn't agree more. I see so much of the same kinds of things you mentioned. You just gotta weed through the weird and bad stuff to get to the good stuff.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Travel-Uppity  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hello Mike,

Congrats on third place. This was a great story and you made the titles fit in quite nicely.

I hope to see you there again.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Beck!

Congrats on first place! Excellent job with this. First place goes to you for good use of the titles and making me laugh more than a few times.


My fave parts are “Did you hear what Billy Madison told me?” Irene turned down the radio. Not waiting for an answer, she blurted out, “You know Mary? The Employee of the Month? She’s Knocked Up… by The Cable Guy!”

It didn’t surprise me. Nothing did anymore. “I knew there was Something About Mary,” I muttered, looking out the window at the traffic creeping along next to us. My dreams of a quick trip home were going Up In Smoke. My cell rang. {/b} Funny stuff!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Delamar Ash,

I have read "A Man and his Beard"  and I offer you my comments.

I enjoyed reading about the beard. Very good story of a never ending cycle.

There's problems with comma placement in here at times. Some sentences could be made into two. That's the only error I think I encountered reading this.

I hope this has been of somme help.

Write on,

Jenny




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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Robin,

This was awesome. I've never seen a poem about cigarettes. I quit smoking earlier this year, but I still want one all the time. Right now as a matter of fact.

Technically, I thought this poem flowed great and I thought it was funny and clever.

Write on,

Jenny


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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello demonlord,

This had great potential. Easter Bunny in HEll. Who would have thought.

This would be better if you rated it higher and took out the asteriks.

Write on,

Jenny


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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Robyn,

This was definitely interesting. A few parts made me chuckle.

One thing that didn't read too great was this sentence. It takes a special kind of retard to interview his or herself. change his to him and you should be good to go.

Write on,

Jenny




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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Rufus,

I thought this was great. Very funny stuff, as usual.

One thing though that just wasn't reading right for me was Yes, I know, parents who host lose the most. I get it now. Maybe it's just me. All in all, good stuff.

Write on,

Jenny



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Review of The lost child  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Beck,

Congrats on second place. I loved this. Had a great rhythm and the titles fit in nicely.

I hope to see you enter this contest in the future. Well done!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of The Gross Factor  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Honey! I have read "The Gross Factor"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: At first I thought you were a guy that was thinking of a girlfriend or something.


What I liked most: You talked about all the "gross" factors and guys aren't the only ones who do these things. Although females don't brag about it as much.







Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Murphy!
I have read "My Review of the Bible"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: I was surprised to see this. Having never read The Bible, I couldn't wait to read this review.


What I liked most: I liked how you told all about the bible and wasn't boring at all, like I think the good book may be to me. This was well written with no errors that I could see.






Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Robin,

I love Spongebob. So, where do I get a Spongebob mug from? I would love that. It's been forever since I played Spongebob collapse. When you mentioned Red Lobster, I thought for sure you were going to mention something about Larry. The direction you went was still funy. By the way, the thing I use from Spongebob all the time is "sentence enhancers". They called it sentence enhancers, but I call them "vocabulary enhancers".

Write on,

Jenny



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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello rampartace!
I have read "Gaming for the Win!"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: Having a love for video games myself, I couldn't wait to see your viewpoint.


What I liked most: I liked how you went through every possible "bad" thing about video games. I've always said that it's great for hand eye cordination. However, I hate the wii though. Hate it. Like the games, but if I want to jump around I'd break out the power pad.





Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling::you said the word relives a couple of times. That means to live again. I think you meant relieves.
Then this sentence Or have or friends play too and destroy them instead! just does'n sound right. Try re-wording it.





Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Last Gift  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Hyperiongate!
I have read "Last Gift"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: I thought it was a bit strange that a reindeer was walking down the hallway. Actually, I thought he fell from the roof or something.


What I liked most:This was a great story. Very touching and I'm sure it would brighten a kid's day. Well, especially if it was a kid in the hospital.






Write on,

Jenny
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