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Review of San Francisco  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Very nice descriptive writing of San Francisco!

It's been years since I've been there. I had a trade show there when I manufactured waterbed linens.
There was one really cool street, Lombard Street I believe. I remember we ate at Fisherman's Wharf.
The town was very unique and a memorable experience as you described.

Not sure if you meant this or if it was a typo: "phantom voice wanders through the blue streets ans let's "
If intentional, sorry.

Thank you for writing and welcome to WDC!
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Review of Ethereal Love  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Jack, you are a talented guy.

This is great! How many dreams I've had that I didn't want to wake from.

I recently did a study why we can remember the day's events and remember them for years, yet we can have an awesome dream that usually fades within minutes of waking. Some studies say dreaming uses different brain chemicals, another one says dreaming occurs on the sub-conscious side of the brain.
One of the reasons for my interest is I have something weird that happens now and then with dreams.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow, that was funny! Just what I needed. I'm in Arizona and I can't remember anyone around here wearing a coat like that. Sounds like city.

The imagery is great! A city, colder climate than Phoenix or LA. "Flasher coat", I like that. Senior discount. I'm 63 and I ask at Walmart when I buy beer, if they need to see my I.D.? The clerk just gives me a funny look.

Good job!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for your beautiful poem, well written and such a tribute to those that fought.

I can see in my mind's eye a World War II movie, it's in black and white, the young girl waving.
I can hear that music playing, the smoke from the train and the sound of the weight of the wheels on the tracks. Such a nice memory. Thank you.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This really, really nice.

I didn't read ahead and was thinking it was about a medieval army preparing for battle. You've done a great job building the story as it goes along and then surprise the reader with finding out it's the class heading into school.

I loved it!
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Review of Nocturne  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
It will be tough to leave a two-hundred fifty word review of a poem or Quinzaine that contains only 15 words.
I DO really like the thought that it brought to my mind which is . . . what if our life was really a dream? Then what would life really be, when we awoke from that dream? When I'm dreaming, I often think it is real.

Great job!
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Review of The Hierogram  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Well written although a little scary. I'm glad it's only 2:30 in the afternoon and not midnight. The images might interfere with my sleep.

Thank you for contributing and welcome to WDC!
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Review of Faith  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Good job and great words to live and pray by.

It reminds me of 1 Corinthians 10:13
No temptation has overtaken you except what is common to mankind. And God is faithful; he will not let you be tempted beyond what you can bear. But when you are tempted, he will also provide a way out so that you can endure it.

Thanks for all your words of encouragement.
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Review of The Better Me  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh Carolyn, so awesome!

A poem of hope, of light. An end to the sorrow, an end to the sadness.
You make my day a better day and my night a better night!

Thank you writing and sharing.
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Review of Smile  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Very nice sentiment and wording.

I did see several typos, although sometimes with poetry, writers intentionally enter them. I'll mention them and if it was your intent, please just ignore me.

that could changen my life around - change
that would have to be able to se - see
that would have to be able to seee you - see
smile when you think your lonely - you're

Thanks for being a part of WDC!
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Review of LOVE SERENE  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Beautiful poem of the love between two people.

I love the transition of "Your name sits on my lips" to the finish where you write "My name is on upon your lips".

So often people write of love that is one-sided, yours is mutual.

Great job, thanks for sharing!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is great! I love the accent as it falls somewhere between my accent and the locale where I live, Arizona. I was born and raised in New England and ever since moving here in 1977, I've been teased about my accent.

I see no errors in grammar or punctuation and the story is kinda cute.

I'd love to know why the men's bathroom required a code where the ladies room didn't. I do remember one time at the theater rushing in the bathroom and going past a long line of stalls trying to find the urinals. None, so I selected a stall and to my embarrassment, saw a pair of ladies shoes showing under the next stall. OMG, I was in the ladies room!
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Review of Dreams  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Well written and well rhymed. The little I know of poetry it sounds very good to me.

Conveys a message and nice to follow unlike much of the poetry I've read. You've done a great job of rhyming the first and third word as well as the second and fourth word.

Thanks for sharing!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You're talking and writing about one of my favorite topics. I so seek His face and ask what He wants me to or where to go. Keep the faith for His promises are true.


You had two typos I believe.
The second line you might capitalize the "y" in your face.
"and satin is on the attack" Satan?

Thanks for sharing.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This is the first bulletin I've ever read. I don't believe I saw this on my news page and thank you for sharing!
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Review of Anyone  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Welcome to WDC!

I like the sentiment and the contrasts. You can be strong, you can be weak. In a good relationship, you need allow yourself some flexibility and that's what I take from your piece. I am not trained in poetry, I just like to read what others express.

I'm not sure it was your intent, but there were two places where an "I" by itself was not capitalized.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Very nice.

I've seen this myself in racing motocross. Although I never made the expert class, I became better and better. When I first started, I'd be flailing all over the track, crashing 3-4 times a race and couldn't figure out the guys in front could go so fast. Then, as I got better, some of my competitors would ask me "How can you ride so fast through that section?". It was all relative to each rider's ability.

Also, in getting older. At 64 years old I am more relaxed and things don't stress me as much. I appreciate the world and what I have more. Whether it's possessions or people.

Thanks for writing and your insight.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good job.

First thing... one sentence feels like it needs (my opinion) "it". "Took, and tossed in the bin"...tossed "it" in the bin?

I've been going through some tough stuff lately. I'm trying to write more positive because I've just read (Dr. Amen) if you say positive things and think positive things, your brain creates chemicals which make you feel good. Just the opposite when you're negative.

Most times, things aren't other's faults, they're our own. In psychiatry a person with a character disorder blames the world for everything and believe the world needs to change for them to be happy. Neurotics or people with neuroses are much more common, they assume themselves to be the problem or the source of the problem.

Often when we don't forgive, we hurt ourselves more than the person whom we aren't forgiving. Many times that person doesn't even have an idea that you believe they've wronged you.

I believe your poem says all these things and I love it.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
One of my favorite topics...love. It doesn't sound like this love turned out well.

The 2nd line, was that intentional? "Can I take back everything I given". I was thinking "gave" sounded better. And 6 lines up from the bottom "Love can’t be undo". Undone instead of "undo"?

Welcome to WDC and thanks for your contribution to the site.
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Review of Can You Love Me?  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice emotion. Be confident, be bold. There is no greater gift or emotion than love.
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Review of Questions  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You belong, you're beautiful and God loves you!
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In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like it...cute and funny. Good job!
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Review of Secret Love  
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
I'm not sure I understand the By 16LTwardzik???
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Review of Stationary Bike  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The flowers die but so does everything else and like everything else living, the flowers are beautiful and so are you. Watch a video while you ride. Ride with the current, not against it. Pedal faster, you can win! Enjoy the ride.
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Review of Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'd prefer you had some happy thoughts about life.
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