|Kate, I must be honest with you. I did not read your poem to review, but to see a sample of free verse. (I'm working on my first piece of free verse.) After reading it, however, I could not hit the back button without leaving some comments and a rating. So...this comes from a very inexperienced person.
The subject of your poem, wishes, is one that all people can relate to.
I think your poem flows nicely from beginning to end. My favorite stanza was the last one.
"that each of my days be counted
not by hours, minutes, or lists;
but by deeds, thoughts, and laughter -
time spent in the company of friends."
I can easily identify with it, and I believe other readers would be able to as well. Thanks for sharing this piece. It was very enjoyable to read.