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Review of Scars  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yes please.
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Review of The Reel King  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is absolutely beautiful and brilliant.
Well written and contained verses.

"Throwing images on the cosmic wall." Is my favorite line.
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Review of TIME  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
Time is but ours as we create it.

You have a beautiful perception and voice. I myself think of time and what it does to us and turns us into, whilst it stays the same. In the sense of how we perceive it and allow it to control us.
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Review of Saumya's slave  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I hope you don't take this the wrong way, but is English your first language?

Also I'm quite curious as to why this story, this subject?
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Review of My poem  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful and uncannily similar to how I feel everyday.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
....Will there be more?.... 😶
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Review of The Face of God  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful personal insight.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (3.5)
Interesting bit of writing although you kind of jumble the ending.

Just one question though, where does this story take place?
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Review of Small World  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (4.0)
If only it was that easy...
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
College sounds fun...(instant regret)
Its nice to read/hear/see a fresh perspective. (No pun intended)

I for one didn't go to college, something came up in my life and changed that option. Mentally.

Hope it gets better for you.

PS: I think you have a nice voice, so to speak/read.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful.
My favorite line is,
I cross the velvet lawn in a bare feet ballet
Feeling alive once again, like a child at play.
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Review of One Halloween Eve  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautifully written by a great voice
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I. can't. stop. reading...

I like Avron even more and I finally like Jenniah now.

Daren's now in the place worse than hell... the friend zone.
How could you be so cruel? lol.

As always can't wait to read more.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Again, great chapter. I like Firkus and is there going to be a romance between Burtrend and Darline? Or is it just me?

And once again the Mordloks are really likeable, it seems in this era of fantasy everyone makes the barbarians or Viking-like people or characters the bad guys for no other reason. But the Mordloks are really cool. I especially like Morak and now from what I read in this chapter I like his son as well.

Ma'am, that is one hell of an ending :o

Just wish there was more Burtrend. :{

Can't wait to see what happens next.

Also chapter 9 of my story is up, I hope you like it.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Oh my god this is so good! Your use of descriptive words or how you described the town really brought me into the story.

What is Burtrend? I can't wait... :(

As always I am hooked and can't wait for the next chapter.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
First off, really great introduction. Best one yet.

Now...
Okay, okay.
You said my world was built. Yours is (excuse my language) badass.

The Drieah, so badass and unique. Although I think you should use more godly/fantasy words other than "video and audio". Kind of took me out of the story. But then immediately was taken back in because of your awesome "way of the gods".

Your gods and how they live together is really unique and cool(despite being at war with one another). Its a way better version of the clash of titans(remake) and what they were going for.

And oh my god who or what is Burtrend? How can you do this to me!? Lol!

Can't wait to read more. I. Am. So. Hooked.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I love the Mordlok architecture and the belief behind it.

And I love Morak, very intimidating presence and could really feel the tension in the scene.

I also like Jenniah now. She reminds me of Talani.

Of course your writing is superb and very inviting.

Can not wait to see where this goes, but where's Burtrend.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Great new addition to your world and well written, although I'm not sure I like Jenniah just yet. But that's just because I don't like princesses :). then again I do feel sorry for her.

I did rather like Daren though, he's honest even if it upsets his princess.

I love the Mordlok and their culture, especially with the sacred forest.

Can't wait to see what happens with the treaty.
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Review of I Am My Enemy  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
Extremely relatable to me. I love it.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
Got to work on the grammar but it sounds cool, but I think you should change it to a super power so its like a phantom form that travels through time. That's if that is what you're getting at here.

Love to read more.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
I know how you feel.
Well written and very personal.
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Review of Parting  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow this is great and wonderfully written. I take its from personal experience, not that I'm trying to pry or anything.

Oh and my answer would be no, I'd keep her to the day I die.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
GROSS! But exciting and a great ending.

But just a small critique.
At the beginning I don't think you need to say his name since the reader would know who you're talking about.

But other than that its another great chapter and I can't wait for chapter 4.
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Review of Slumber  
Review by ArtBeast
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful.
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Review by ArtBeast
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Don't mess with Tres got it.

Another great chapter and the hooks go deeper.
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