You have a beautiful perception and voice. I myself think of time and what it does to us and turns us into, whilst it stays the same. In the sense of how we perceive it and allow it to control us.
Again, great chapter. I like Firkus and is there going to be a romance between Burtrend and Darline? Or is it just me?
And once again the Mordloks are really likeable, it seems in this era of fantasy everyone makes the barbarians or Viking-like people or characters the bad guys for no other reason. But the Mordloks are really cool. I especially like Morak and now from what I read in this chapter I like his son as well.
Ma'am, that is one hell of an ending :o
Just wish there was more Burtrend. :{
Can't wait to see what happens next.
Also chapter 9 of my story is up, I hope you like it.
First off, really great introduction. Best one yet.
Now...
Okay, okay.
You said my world was built. Yours is (excuse my language) badass.
The Drieah, so badass and unique. Although I think you should use more godly/fantasy words other than "video and audio". Kind of took me out of the story. But then immediately was taken back in because of your awesome "way of the gods".
Your gods and how they live together is really unique and cool(despite being at war with one another). Its a way better version of the clash of titans(remake) and what they were going for.
And oh my god who or what is Burtrend? How can you do this to me!? Lol!
Great new addition to your world and well written, although I'm not sure I like Jenniah just yet. But that's just because I don't like princesses :). then again I do feel sorry for her.
I did rather like Daren though, he's honest even if it upsets his princess.
I love the Mordlok and their culture, especially with the sacred forest.
Got to work on the grammar but it sounds cool, but I think you should change it to a super power so its like a phantom form that travels through time. That's if that is what you're getting at here.
Amazing concept, told with a great writing style, world building, and characters.
Really enjoyed the explanation for the technology and the wings. And so far no dumb love triangle or Y/A indications.
Would love to read more so I can read how Chorlan dies.
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