Wow! This is such excellent poetry writing! Each line says enough to really pack up a punch, especially when you mention that it is a result of child abuse. Definitely one excellent example of where less is more.
Is that the requirements of the form? This is one I'd like to try.
This story captures just how difficult it is to be the new kid in a classroom. I think the reluctance Sally felt about raising her hand illustrated this perfectly. I always felt out of place at school and could really relate. And what a great way to end this.
What an unusual thing to find a poetry form where the first words of each line in a stanza must all rhyme. I don't think I've come across this before. Autumn is my favorite season, and you managed to incorporate a lot of Fall elements in this piece.
Very nice.
Wow. Well, that was a pretty horrific thing for someone to be put through, no matter what they had done in the past. And there are plenty of thankless jobs out there. Hospitals must be a special case when it comes to being assessed, for there is far more than profitability to take into account.
Excellent story-telling!
This is really quite a beautiful piece of poetry. I like the way you likened the ice and frost to glass and crystal. There is a moment when the trees really do seem to be waiting for a thaw and for Spring to renew their leaves, and you caught that so well here. A beautiful pic to go with it too.
This was a very cool character bio. Did you go on to use the character, I wonder? He certainly sounds like a man who is true to himself, also one that is quite happy to show kindness towards others that share similar interests. The family history was very well thought out - this is not something that I'd have thought about for my own characters but I can see how it would lead to greater all-round development.
There is something very powerful about this piece of writing. There are times, often after going through some kind of trauma, that everything appears different, that what we thought we knew was wrong. I loved the conclusion; those final three sentences say it all.
This is a story that really fits in with the strange times that we are living in. I've got to admit that I really liked the color combination of purple and green, in fact I had a pair of boots once just like that cube. The other thing I thought was great was the way you showed how curiosity can so easily beat rationality.
Nice!
Well, it certainly sounds like Azarad is going to be in for a tough time. Not that it could ever have been easy for either. The responsibility must have been tough for both. It worked really well having the letter in a different color font to the rest of the piece.
What a lot of different fish species you had sitting in that classroom! I think I probably learned a few new ones. I liked how you incorporated the names into the attendance register responses especially the dog fish. I've got to admit I felt a bit sorry for Walter at the end. Thoroughly enjoyable.
This was such a cool use of the prompt. I knew right from the first line that I was going to really enjoy the read - awake with eyelids shut! The rhythm skipped along with a very bouncy feel, also great for a Wonderland piece, and the rhyming pattern was kept constant too.
There is a lot to think about in this piece of writing. I have to agree that the most common internal thoughts are ones that are negative and confidence crushing. It would be nice to be cheered on internally instead. Those thoughts can be very convincing, that's for sure.
Good work here.
Wow! This is such a fantastic piece of poetry. You make the message very clear but do so with a consistent rhyme and rhythm pattern. I don't think it slipped so much as once. And also you managed to deliver the whole thing while keeping a light, almost humorous tone.
I loved it!
I enjoyed reading this poem very much. I liked how the ghosts in this piece seem more playful than threatening or scary. Good use of the clock and of the mist that swirled right along with them. There is a definite feeling of melancholy, especially in the final verse.
Overall this had a very Gothic feel about it.
I came across this chapter in the 'Read and Review' section and I've got to say this made for a fantastic read. So I wasn't familiar with the characters or the story-line, but your descriptions were so good that didn't matter at all. Lots of high fantasy action too.
Very nice!
Haha! A good flow of back and forth dialogue you have here. I really loved the beginning with the father and son interchange, and when you introduced the policeman it threw me for a second. However, you did a great job of showing how cops and would-be robbers are all people who share certain similarities.
Nice work.
A really beautiful way to capture in words the changes that autumn brings. The most obvious one is the effect on the leaves and your descriptions of the changes they go through are perfect. As you point out, too, they will grow again, but autumn is my favorite season.
This short piece really is so wonderfully descriptive. Right from the start when you mentioned the curled edges to those firey colors I had a good idea that it was about leaves, but the mention of the rake decided it. A lovely fun way to end the piece too!
This was really quite beautiful, and so well-written. You did an excellent job of describing Lee and his solitary state, and your descriptions of the first Daphne definitely made me think of some kind of goddess. I found myself really happy that you let Lee meet up with someone that seemed to suit him so well.
Perfect writing.
A great job with the descriptions of the unexpected and rather forceful landing. Having Sylvia swear when you made it clear that was something she didn't normally do was a clever way of showing how dire the situation was. David recording those messages drove it all the way home.
Nice work.
First off, I really like the font color you used for this poem. The red words seem so appropriate in describing something that really is a right pain. I don't suffer from it but my mother does, and I can clearly remember the times when migraine made it impossible to get out of bed.
Excellent work.
Haha! This story brought a welcome smile. I could just imagine the wreckage of the tomato plants and Shela's outrage. Gregory didn't seem to want to go in to too much detail, and it turned out to be very understandable why. It was a pleasure to read this well-written story.
There is certainly a lot of truth in this piece of writing. Things in life can change so suddenly, with no warning signs there to see at all.
One thing I noticed was in the second sentence and third you used 'your' when I think you wanted 'you're'. Other than that, it was a well-expressed piece.
This was a very hard-hitting story to read. I think the fact that you did not go into graphical detail made the story both more powerful and horrifying. You certainly showed how just a normal day can quickly be turned into a nightmare. Great character building.
Haha! This was a short piece of writing that brought a much needed smile, so I thank you for that. It was really impressive how you managed to fit in so many different titles without making the writing feel contrived or in any way false. My favorite part was at the hotel,but honestly, I enjoyed it all.
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