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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Haha, this is cute. You did well in the writing itself, for the short story is easy to understand. I could picture a scene like this in a cartoon or live-action family movie. I found this to be a nice read.

Squirrels at times can be funny creatures. Once, in my backyard, there were two squirrels playing around a piece of wood on something that rose and fell like a see-saw. Yeah, I like squirrels. I even got lucky and took a polaroid picture of one. I still have that in a photo album somewhere! *Smile*
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
I see you copied me. *Laugh* That's all right though. I'm glad to know the poll I did is a good idea by seeing someone else do it.

Do a crossword puzzle! Those are fun. *Bigsmile* I already did two, based on books that I've read in the past. I'll want to do another one sometime.
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Review of Above the law  
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Powerful, brief, and to the point! I like this a lot. You tell it like it is, and no doubt your article deserves a 5 star rating from me!

I like how you built up to the main point about Hillary Clinton and the crooked FBI. Well written Kristina! You've yet to add a bunch to this folder. *Smile*
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Review of If I Only Knew  
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Smile* There's beautiful imagery here. There's not only sadness expressed in this piece. There's serenity too. Nicely written. It does hurt (sometimes a lot) when someone we love passes on. Writing provides a very good outlet.

Good luck in the contest! I've also entered, with "Oak Tree Speaks" http://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/2086...
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Review of A Modern Malady  
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, this is really good! Definitely truthful, and well written. That's quite a vocabulary for a read! "Our assassin is ourselves" - that's deep. I can actually understand that. Since many have allowed themselves to be conformed into the collective herd, and I'm even aware of the many who allowed those awful microchip implants to be injected into their bodies.

You've got a steady rhyming, although I believe the greatest thing about your poem here is its message.

Many of us shouldn't want anything to do with an Orwellian World, NOR zombie apocalypse. I am doing all I can to influence positive change in humanity myself.

I think I will invite you to my group. *Smile* We info-warriors must network together to resist the fascists.
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Review of The Chair  
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh wow, that is neat! I wonder why I never thought of trying to write like that. This is unlike anything I've ever seen.

The content is easy to understand, and it's simple. It's to be point. You did good here!
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Powerful, and so true! There are crooked people in the practice of medicine who prescribe pills just to mask the pain. There are even pills for people who just can't stand being sad. Joy can't exist without sadness.

Of course, there are those deadly vaccines that are used to cull population. And the medical procedure, abortion! We've killed off more unborn than all the people of World War II.

All this suppresses and oppresses the potential of humanity, for the convenience of others. Ick.

I liked this poem very much. Another great one by you, Ron. *BigSmile*
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is good! There's something tranquil and relaxing about this piece. I agree that Mother Nature herself is very much a giver.

There's nothing forced, and the flow of the poem is nicely written. Good luck in the contest! I chose the same prompt you did. *Smile*

My entry is for this month is "Oak Tree Speaks." Check it out whenever you'd like. http://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/2086...
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Review of Slaying The Beast  
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was fun! I was a bit random in my choices and chuckled and lol'd while reading the results. I think you might find the following results quite amusing...

Long, long ago in a far away kingdom, there was a wise and brave king. This king was in serious trouble, his kingdom was under siege by a giant fire breathing unicorn. Everyday the unicorn would swoop over his kingdom and steal young maidens to feast upon at his lair. During its last visit the unicorn had stolen his daughter, the beautiful princess Sarah.

The king was determined to get her back and to slay the foul beast that dared to take his daughter. He gathered the kingdom's four mightiest warriors. There was Sam the pretty, who had slayed a hundred foxes with his mighty desk. There was Tifa the Dumpy, a deadly lawyer from the east. Manny the Hairy was the third member of the group, who could wield the elements with his mystical branch. And finally there was the leader of the group, Tom the Slutty. He was a mighty warrior given a blessed scissors by the great priests of forest. His scissors could slice through any armor and pierce any foe.

Together the four warriors were given the quest of slaying the unicorn and bringing back the princess, hopefully alive. They set out at dawn, riding four magical birds that could move faster than the wind. Just as the sun began to set, they arrived at their destination. The air smelled of smelly sock and decay, burnt corpses surrounded the heroes, probably poor souls who had sought to end the beast's reign of fear and destruction.

The unicorn dwelled within a deep dark cave, no living thing dared to go near it in fear of becoming its next meal. Manny rose his branch into the air and spoke a magical incantation "Bride!!!". The cave was instantly ablaze with light as the end of his powerful branch began to glow. The four adventurers traveled down the long tunnel, they walked and walked, the tunnel seemed almost never-ending. Eventually they heard a loud rumbling and a scream, a woman's scream. The four warriors picked up speed and raced down the tunnel, hoping that it was not too late.

They came upon the monster, its eyes red like roses, it was staring at the princess who was trapped in a corner of the cave. Her once beautiful dress was now torn and covered with blood and dust. Upon seeing the princess and the look of fear upon her face, Sam rushed at the beast slamming his mighty desk into its side. The beast cried out in pain and turned towards its visitors. Tifa quickly threw her deadly paper airplanes at the unicorn's eyes, hoping to blind it. The creature cried out in agony as its eye gushed with blood.

It then opened its massive mouth and a blast of intense fire shot out at the heroes. Ever ready, Manny lifted his branch into the air and created a wall of coins to block the deadly assault of the unicorn. As soon as the flames stopped, the unicorn saw through its remaining eye something come flying at him. It was Tom, and with his magical scissors he flew at the monster's heart. It glowed brightly as it was thrust inward, screams of pain filled the cave. The screams soon stopped though and was replaced by an eerie silence. Realizing she was now safe, {blank 2} rushed to [blank 22.] The unicorn was dead.

The four warriors and the princess returned to the kingdom triumphant. The king gave each of them one request within his power to be granted as a reward for saving his daughter. Sam desired a home in the western woods and for 5 kegs of vodka. Tifa asked for passage home so that she may return to her family. Manny asked that he be allowed to live at the castle and be given full access to its many bedrooms. Tom's request was the most daring of them all, he asked for the princess's hand in marriage. The king thought for a moment and decided to ask his daughter what she thought of he matter. A smile spread across her face as she said "Yes father, I would love to marry him." Tom and Sarah lived happily ever after and never again did a unicorn dare to terrorize the kingdom.
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yay I did it! It's nice to come across another FF7 fan. Well done in putting this together. It actually took me time to look hard and find everything on the list.
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (4.0)
I've been an avid watcher of this show for so long... Good search! It was actually sort of challenging to find all the words. Some of them stared back at me almost instantly. It's a good balance. Good job!
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Review of Rent Trivia  
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I love this musical, and I found this crossword a bit challenging. I got almost all of them. Couldn't figure out 13 Down. *Laugh* Good job in putting this together. I'll have to see the musical again sometime. Maybe after that I'll get all the answers right. :)
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nicely written. A well thought out and respectful piece about a day in the life soldiers in the middle of war. The rhyming scheme is very good, along with your use of imagery. Good luck in the contest!
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this! As I was reading, I pictured myself going through a dark tunnel towards the light, for a brief moment. The message is true, and I don't think there's anything you should change. It's well written. Well done, my friend. *Smile*
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Review of That girl  
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
Powerful, and emotional. It does sadden me at times, to know that there are families who split up, and family who just can't treat their kids right at all. If only humanity could improve and be better than a bunch of problematic and/or greedy fools...

This is well written. Very good.
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for entry "The Trump-ettes Call
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Haha!! This is great. Thanks for bringing a smile to my face. lol, yeah Trump is just as bad as those other politicians. I enjoy the way you wrote this. The "Arica" towards the end - that's really clever!
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is really good! I get what you mean here, since I have seen water droplets roll down freely when it comes to riding in a car or bus. Nice use of imagery. Good luck in the Contest. If you'd like to see my entry...

 Oak Tree Speaks / Word Count 163  (E)
Several species of animals live off trees! What if one could talk to them?
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm glad you find the humor of many things. There are two ways to look at life; as comedy, or tragedy. I choose comedy!

The goofy and silly mistakes we do sometimes, it's good have a chuckle at them.

Yeah, this list had me chuckling. Aww, poor cat in the fridge. Ice cream in the dishwasher?? *Rolling* Mistaking Nair for hair conditioner, oh dear...
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like your sense of humor here, as well as your imagery, the bees to flowers bit especially! This is a really good piece. I've enjoyed each line! Well written!
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Review of Fake  
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yes, yes, and yes!! When I first saw those top two lines, I knew I was going to like this poem. I still do! Well written, and to the point. I like that you used a handful of quotations, and that you told it like it is.

The Santa Claus and neighbor's hair part is amusing, and very true as well.

Pretty much the entire American Dream is just that; a dream. Democracy is illusion, and I think you already know that.

Thank you for writing and sharing this! *BigSmile* I've written a handful of political poems. Some of them are satire. I also wrote a funny one about Synchronicity. You might enjoy those!
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Review of Oak  
Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is quite a read! I liked how you personified the tree here, and the imagery is well described... I wouldn't know if an oak would know of God or not, to be honest, but it's still an interesting final sentence.

May I suggest editing and varying in punctuation? This entire monologue, the feel of it feels a little monotonous to me. During the storm, for example, you could have italicized and use exclamations for the oak to express a sort of distress, if not fear.

This is good, but this could be a little more greater! Thanks for letting me know about your story. *Smile*
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found your monologue here enjoyable. I've never read anything like this before. I even relate to this, somewhat! When I have writer's block, I search hard in my mind to grasp at something before coming up short - and then I just move on and wait until something comes to me. (Sometimes, the greatest ideas come out of nowhere. Strange how that works!)

My favorite part has to be when Donna tries to write herself, and thinks up the Transsexual bison idea. That gave me a good chuckle.

Is that quote based on a real one? It's pretty good!

Keep on writing! I'll see your other stories eventually.

-InfoWarrior
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm surprised no one has rated or reviewed this, after much time has passed.

This deserves a five star rating... Dubya sure did leave us in a hole back in the way early 2000's! In my honest opinion, the only great thing about 9/11 was that it woke up a bunch of people. A handful have looked at the different aspects of that event, and passed the knowledge on for others to gain.

This is really well written. I like how you used the different fonts to represent the two characters in this poem.

"Oh wake up, Laura! It’s long lost!
I’m in the crapper! There’s no cost!
My name is mud! My honor’s spent!
My score’s down 82 percent!"

That's my favorite part, haha.

The rhythm and rhyme scheme goes well. There's a great satirical flair that presents itself here. I find this oldie of yours brilliant, and I'm adding it to my favorites. I'll be sure to remember you, and read more of your writings soon-ish.

-InfoWarrior
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (4.5)
There's definitely some truth in there! While reading your poem, I pictured the drawing as more like a painted portrait of this miserable man.

"stained glass of a lonely soul", wow that's deep! Very good. I like. :)
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Review by InfoWarrior
Rated: E | (5.0)
Awww, this is overall lovely. Adorable! Although, poor Cat... The rhyming scheme is nice. The pacing to the melody is right on. I love both cats and horses. They're such wonderful, intelligent animals.
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