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Review by jonblair
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thanks for the essay !

I believe we (most of us) know why this is happening. Certain Politicians are allowing it because it furthers their political interests more than it serves the interests of true citizens of the United States. (One) of the reasons contributing to the collapse of the Roman Empire was their failure to control their borders. The geniuses in Washington are using our Constitution and our Freedoms to DESTROY our Constitution and our Freedoms. And they are hell bent on succeeding.
The
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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
In reference to your questions, I believe I can answer for all the Chapters as follows:

1. There are some grammatical errors in each Chapter (but we ALL make those errors).
2. Every Chapter made sense. I viewed it as a combination of secular and spiritual (biblical)
counseling/teaching. Secular advice/teaching is confirmed by reference/application of relevant
biblical chapter and verse.
3. To me it's about surrendering yourself to the will of God and allowing him to guide and mold you in every
aspect of your life. Trusting (trust) God and believing (belief) his promises (faith) are the keys.
4. The last paragraph of the first Chapter really stood out for me. There's NO free lunch (even in one's walk
with God). As you correctly emphasize, "we MUST be willing to pay the price." There is NO secular (or)
spiritual growth without work, without sacrifice. This is a fundamental truism. Both are a CONTINUOUS
work in progress. You don't succeed or become proficient at anything on a secular OR spiritual plane
without putting in time and effort. A review of ALL the major players in the Bible is absolute proof of that !
5. God's Maxim's pertain to EVERYTHING - that includes our free will to make decisions. The Bible teaches
that exercising our free will to follow (his) will is the ultimate act of trust, faith, and belief.

What do think about condensing some of the Chapters so that you don't run the risk of redundancy ?
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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
I would like to add my own, "John Henry" to your lovely Guestbook !
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Review by jonblair
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Pastor Juan !

So sorry to read about your difficulties dealing with the shingles. I have read and heard so many horror stories regarding this affliction; symptoms ranging from simple annoyance to excruciatingly painful and debilitating. I have procrastinated for several years regarding this vaccination, and I don't know why (other than simple laziness) as I have been vaccinated against everything from influenza to anthrax. Thank you for reminding what I should have done a long time ago !
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Review of Alfred Adler  
Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (3.0)
Thank you for your submission. While I agree with the basic (forgiveness) premise of your essay, I view this as an 'oversimplified' analysis (and solution) of what could be and in many instances are 'wrong doings' inflicted on innocent parties that in many instances are much more egregious and complicated than spelled out in the essay - and that changes the entire narrative in my humble opinion.
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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Fabulous submission - I'll be adding the essence of your essay to my writer's tool belt !!
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Review of The Arena  
Review by jonblair
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Great story !

I have always enjoyed reading and watching anything related to Ancient Rome. I have visited both Italy and Sicily, to include visitations to several Amphitheaters used for chariot races, executions, and of course, gladiator combats, etc..., the largest in Rome known as the Colosseum, so it's incredibly interesting history ! In any event, my ONLY suggestion would be to 'rename' the opponent of Marius. The name 'Felix' does not seem "time era" appropriate, not to mention the fact it detracts from the 'ferocity' you have otherwise created in this character. Anytime I hear the name, 'Felix' it takes me back to my childhood and the cartoon, "Felix the Cat" hardly a ferocious gladiator trained killer ! Otherwise, I enjoyed the 'action' aspect of the story, and it kept my attention from beginning to end. GREAT JOB !!
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Review of A Good Friend  
Review by jonblair
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Greetings OOT !

Enjoyed your short essay titled, "A Good Friend." The word that comes to mind after reading (at least for me) is the word, 'unconditional,' begging the question, "should friendship (like love) be unequivocal?"
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Review of Life is Dukkha.  
Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed this short story, perhaps because it brought back memories in which I had similar disappointments; then again, don't we all? There is an episode (I do not recall the name) of Star Trek, the original series, where Spock shares a logical explanation regarding 'wants' which at the time made perfect sense.

Ironically, one of my favorite quotes is from another Star Trek episode. Does it relate to this story? I'll let you answer that question. I entered the quote in my biography.
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Review of The Trump Card  
Review by jonblair
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Excellent political satire about, 'the Donald' in which the main point of the story is a conflation of multiple issues, i.e., economics, politics, and racism. Other than some misspellings, I thought this story well constructed, amusing, and flowed in such a way as to build a curious tension and the desire to read the entire story.

And the word, 'Covfefe?' ha ha ha !!

Well, YOU AND I know what it means, but you know how others read/interpret what & how
they want, especially anything/everything 'the Donald' says ......., um-hum, LOL !!

Best,

Jon
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Review by jonblair
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Very funny !

Before reaching the end of the story, I thought to myself, "Mari's friend is very lucky to have Mari as a friend," as a LOT of people would probably be unable to deal with someone with such sever OCD, but as I continued reading and discovered you had made the decision to end the friendship, I could certainly understand your decision.

Enjoyed reading - thanks for posting !

Jon
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Review of Dear Me: contest  
Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Toni !

Words to set (writing) goals by - so true, and thanks for posting !!




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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, talk about words to live by !! Beautifully written, just perfect, I LOVED it !!!

Jon Blair Jacques
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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great Story, and thanks for posting !
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Review of A Fall Afternoon  
Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
That was a "relaxing" read. Enjoyed it very much - thanks for posting !
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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great Story! Making friends the way you do is a "Gift" that will be life fulfilling. Thanks for posting !!
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Review of Something Else  
Review by jonblair
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Someone (or something) that cannot be described in words. I liked it - thanks for writing and posting !

Jonblair
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Review of The Carnage  
Review by jonblair
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Interesting and enjoyable read - thanks for posting !
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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your story was very enlightening - thank you for sharing !
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Review of Rose  
Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dominique:

I have capitalized my suggested changes, and have deleted/changed any prepositions that were at the end of a sentence. Added a comma or two, and re-structured a few sentences, but I believe the revisions will meet with your general approval. You are the FINAL editor, so, if there's anything I have changed not to your liking,
you can revert back to your original script and/or change as you see fit.

Keep up the GREAT Writing !!

Jonblair


Nothing is more satisfying than coming home from a strenuous day of work to a gorgeous bouquet of flowers on the doorstep. Purple and teal roses sat awaiting Cassandra, her favorite colors. Smiling from ear to ear, she lets out an embarrassingly loud shriek and then looks around to make sure the neighbors aren't watching. Leaning her nose in towards the roses, the scent of pure heaven flows through her nostrils. The delicate velvet petals have an intoxicating fragrance of an early spring morning in the countryside. Immediately, she feels high on life. A single rose holds tremendous power in ITS very essence. It can turn a horrendous day into a glorious one. It will give an ill hospital patient something to smile ABOUT. A rose can give a couple hope in their failing relationship. Twiddling with the leaves, Cassandra's finger gets pricked with a sharp thorn from the stem of the flower, drawing blood. She's suddenly reminded that these are forgiveness flowers from her fight the previous night with her fiancé, Dan. Cassandra carries the flowers inside and places them on the kitchen table. The roses are in a beautiful, intricately designed porcelain vase. A tiny card peeks out that was nearly missed. Hearts and arrows cover the front with pink lettering, "LOVING YOU MEANS SO MUCH TO ME." Inside is a crooked personally typed note in Lucida Handwriting font. "I'LL SEE YOU SOON. BE READY DARLING." Dan must have forgotten to sign the card. On a Wednesday, it's unlikely he will be done with work anytime before midnight. Cassandra doesn't understand his love for show business but film making makes Dan happy. It keeps him busy which, in a sense, is good for him. Men need a life outside of their relationship. That's always been important to Cassandra who views clingy men as unattractive and needy. She may have pushed Dan away one too many times, leaving him with the wrong impression. That was never the intention. She loved Dan but craved her own identity in relationships. She wanted to be seen as Cassandra, not just Dan's fiance and vice versa. After four years of a codependent relationship, independence was something to treasure.
Cassandra stared at the flowers, pondering how he managed to find such unique dyed roses in a day's time. Considering NO FORTHCOMING HOLIDAYS, she assumed he was apologizing for their disagreement on the phone last night. SHE WANTED TO BELIEVE THEY WERE "just because" flowers, but Dan's NEVER BEEN MUCH OF A ROMANTIC, ALTHOUGH in the three years they've dated, MOST MEMORIES WERE OF BEING happy and very much in love. About a year ago their relationship SUSTAINED a negative transformation, gradually becoming emotionally abusive. Regardless of the fact Cassandra NEVER strayed, Dan WAS INCAPABLE OF TRUSTING HER OR the relationship. His ex-wife ruined his faith in women. She cheated so frequently that when she passed away, no ONE at the funeral knew who Dan was, aside from family. Cassandra understands where his lack of trust stems from which is why she's tolerated it as long as she has, but it HAS NOW become a serious problem. Daily fights are tearing them apart, ruining what was once a solid AND loving bond. The flowers are a sweet gesture, but they won't change things. Cassandra suggested couple's therapy, but Dan was too embarrassed to attend, allowing pride to stand in his way.

Cassandra reached into her Coach purse, WHICH SHE OFTEN HUMOROUSLY LABELED , "THE ENDLESS BLACK HOLE," to search for her cell phone. With a slight smile across her face, she dialed her fiance's number FROM memory.

"Hello," Dan yelled into the receiver "I'm still working."
"YES, I THOUGHT YOU MIGHT BE. I just wanted to thank you. They're beautiful."
"For what?"
"Oh come on, don't joke. THEY'RE perfect. How did you find them?"
"What are you talking about Cassandra?"
"Um… the flowers. I know you didn't forget about something as nice as them. Stop pulling my leg Danny!"
"So, who's buying you flowers Cassandra?"
"Oh, shut up! We're not doing this again, are we?"
"I don't know, Cass. You tell me. Obviously I was right last night. Be real with me."
"You gotta be f***ing kidding me, Danny. Yeah, you caught me! Is that what this is about? You sent me some f***ing flowers trying to catch me in a lie? What's wrong with you? You're f***ing sick! Why is it so hard for you to believe that I'm not cheating on you?"
"Well Cass, when you're thanking me for flowers that I didn't send, it starts speaking for itself."
"Danny! Did you hang up on me? Hello? s***!"

Cassandra slammed her hand on the counter, the bang echoing off the kitchen walls. Running her fingers through her chestnut curls, she pulled at the roots while releasing an exaggerated sigh. She shook her head violently, contemplating her relationship. How could she get someone to trust her when she's been nothing but faithful? Contrary to what he believes, she would never cheat on Dan. It's a shame that he can't see that for himself. Cassandra began to pace, her anxiety building as questions flooded her mind. If Dan didn't send the FLOWERS, THEN WHO DID? Was he messing with her? Could they have been left there by mistake? There were no names on the card. Cassandra slows to a stop in front of the flowers, evaluating them closely. They're perfect. Teal and purple roses, her absolute favorite colors. She rolls her eyes, considering the POSSIBILITY THEY WERE DELIVERED BY MISTAKE. It has to be him. Glancing at a family photograph hanging from the wall, she considers her mother. The last time her mom bought her flowers, she won a dance competition in the eighth grade.
Her fingers trembled as she dialed her MOTHER'S number, BOTCHING several digits AS SHE DIALED, TEARS forming in the corner of her eyes AS THEY PREPARED to spill OUT ANY moment. Cassandra threw her body down on the couch, a bit too rough causing it to bang against the wall. The living room was decorated in such a way that people were afraid to touch anything. She inherited her mother's style. Her home appeared as IF IT WERE A DISPLAY FROM a museum, gorgeous but mostly for show. Growing up, Cassandra WAS DETERMINED TO BE different from her mother. YET, WITH THE PASSAGE OF EACH YEAR, her personality EVOLVED TO REFLECT more of her MOTHER'S PERSONA than the year BEFORE.

"Cassandra, what a pleasant surprise. How have you been?"
"WE VISITED two days ago, Mom," I REMINDED HER.
"Was it just two? It feels longer. Why don't you come by and I'll fix you some tea."
"Mom, listen. Did you send me flowers?"
"Oh, sweetie no I didn't. AND I doubt Daniel would do anything resembling THAT OF A gentleman. Do you have a secret admirer?"
"No, I don't have a secret admirer, Mom."
"What about that fine fellow that always stops by your home. He's cute and has a decent enough job working for the postal service."
"Are you talking about my mailman? HE'S THE MAILMAN, Mom! HE DELVERS MY MAIL, AND THAT'S ALL !"
"Well, sure he is. He walks all the way up to your front door each time. He's trying to see you. A true gentleman. That Daniel character could use a lesson or two."
"I don't have a mailbox, SO he has no choice BUT TO WALK DIRECTLY TO MY DOOR.
"There ARE ALWAYS CHOICES in life, sweetheart."
"Okay. I HAVE to go, Mom. It was great talking to you. I'll call you tomorrow."
"Oh, do LET ME KNOW when you figure out who your admirer is."
"It was delivered by accident. I don't have an admirer. Bye Mom."
"Don't be such a pessimist. Goodbye dear."

Cassandra tossed the phone onto the floor and rolled her hazel eyes incessantly. She glanced at the clock, mentally calculating the REMAINING HOURS before Dan's arrival.

[to be continued]
ideas, advice, critique are wanted and welcomed.
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Review of Armani David  
Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, that was just SUPER !!

Amazing what the love of a child can do !!!

Jonblair

P.S. I couldn't write poetry if my life depended on it.
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Review of A Lost Christmas  
Review by jonblair
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another great story - thanks for posting!

P.S. Please let me know when the continuation of, 'Rose' has been posted.

Best,

Jon-Blair Jacques
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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
That was very interesting - thanks for posting !
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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Enjoyed the story - thanks for posting!
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Review by jonblair
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your story translates to: "Words To Live By."

Thanks for sharing !

Jon-Blair Jacques
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