Carolyn I liked your story because it reminds me of life. Imagining that something is going to be great then something happens that brings you back to reality. In your story, it's coffee. The last sentence of your story is the one that reminds the reader - been there, done that. Thanks for your story. Looked at your portfolio, liked the one - "Black and Grey." Hope the title is correct. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Thanks for your review of the book "On the Road." When attending book sales and the library I have seen the book, actually picked it up a few times but didn't get it. Your review gives me an idea of what to expect from the author. Your description of Sal's contemplation is something that interests me. Because of your article this book is on my to read list. Thanks! Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Thanks for you info on dental implants, I must admit the part about the screws going directly into the jaw bone made me squirm. You've written a very informative article with two paragraphs. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Matt - Thanks so much for your article. Our small school doesn't have a football team, my grandkids are involved in basketball. Even though I know very little about football I enjoyed reading your article - it got me to thinking how many things can happen that can change the outcome of the game. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Bridget - Thanks for your story, it's neat that you added the edit points. I'm an amateur writer so I can't really help with editing. My suggestion is to continue writing, if possible write daily, sometimes it may be one short paragraph. There is a lot of information on this site and it will be helpful to you. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Wallflower Thanks for your lovely poem. I like the last line of each stanza and the opening of each verse, using the stars- wind- sun. Very soothing and an enjoyable read. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
This is an interesting piece of writing. To me it comes across as mythological and begs the reader to look at it again and then find the gems that apply to their situation. The ending of your story is a surprise and gives the reader the additional information that can be used as they analyze the story. Thanks, Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Thanks for your poem, I looked at your portfolio and see this is your first entry. Maybe, there have been others but if it is your first, congratulations. My favorite line of your poem summarizes it well "going with the flow to catch the glimpse of the most unexpected things" I like that thought. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Thanks for your poem on writing. Focusing on the pencil as god is very creative. Also, your poem shows the power of story and the choices the writer can utilize. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Thanks for sharing your story. I'm thinking this is a fictional story, but if it's true I'm sorry for all you have experienced. Whether it's true or not its helped me to be grateful for my eyesight. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Hana Thanks for your poem "How Silent." It reminds me of a person's first love, how grand it is and time consuming. I like how you ended the poem, the silence of your world. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Displeased - Thanks for your "Metaphors." I'm seeing this as a love relationship where one is always giving and the other takes. Since metaphors can be interpreted differently here's my thoughts on your poem. Petals = all one's mental and physical capacities
Earth = the one who takes Flower = Essence of Life (Spirit). In a few sentences you have created a thought provoking reading. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Thanks for your thoughts about love. This is interesting as it gives the reader the opportunity to think about love in their life. Am I causing something to push it further away? While it drifts away is it impossible for me to retrieve it? The concept of "ropes" and their weight on you would be an interesting thought to develop into a story. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Rosie This is an interesting piece of writing. Your questions and what ifs in the story causes the reader to pause and become part of your story. I like to enter a story and be there too, and in this case asking the questions. If you decide, this story could be the basis for an expanded version. One of the thoughts I had was: Would the father's choices for the correct answer be different depending on his death or being alive? Thanks for your story. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Jadyne - Thanks for your words about how your day begins. I don't believe this is fiction writing and I sympathize with your feelings. School has changed so much since I was in
school but I still remember having some of the feelings you mentioned. My suggestion is to keep writing,expressing how you feel (that is if it makes you feel better) If yours words are fiction then you are able to put the reader in the story and make them believe it's real. I'm wondering about your dream - the same dream? Keep writing and enjoy the journey, I don't mean that all writing is enjoyable but the process of getting your thoughts down, especially if they help you is important and can be an enjoyable process.
AnxietyWritten Thanks for your poem, your description of a racing mind is good. You ended it perfectly - "AND I CAN'T SEEM TO... FOCUS!" Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Thanks for an unique look into the life of a bus. This is a creative bit of prose plus I like the line "till my wheels run..." Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Jkenley - Thanks for the information on Harriet Tubman. Currently, I am reading about the women (mainly Elizabeth Cady Stanton and Susan Anthony) who worked so hard to get the right to vote. In the future I will read about Harriet. I looked at your portfolio and read some of your entries. Your writing, besides being informational tends to be thought provoking and encourages the reader to learn more about your subject. Keep writing and enjoy the journey. When I say enjoy I don't mean that everything about writing is enjoyable but enjoy the outcome - expressing yourself and choosing the words that impact the reader.
Austin - I wanted to let you know that I enjoyed reading your prose. I read it several times and came up with the thought of the complexity of relationships. What I like about this piece is: it causes the reader to think about their relationships and all the twists and turns that occur. I especially like the last two sentences - "best to not know than know everything at once" and "knowing you changed me forever." Thanks for your thoughts. Keep writing and enjoy the journey.
Raven - Your poem showed up on the newbie sidebar and since it's titled Piano(I play the piano) I gave it look. Very Creative! I didn't catch what the notes spelled until the second reading. Thanks for the poem and for spelling out the words by using notes on the piano.
jimmar- Just read your story and I must tell you I didn't see it coming. I laughed out loud and I so glad that I checked the nonfiction section of this website. What a picture I got when I read about the ashes in the coffee cup. I am an amateur writer so I don't offer much advice, but I do know when a story is fun to read and leaves you wanting more. Thanks Again!
Rick - Thanks for the poem, I like it. I checked your portfolio and see this is your first entry. Congratulations! Keep Writing, Keep Creating, and Enjoy the Journey.
Thanks so much for your essay, I see the same thing going on with kids and the adults on their smartphones. Your last paragraph summarizes your article very well. I checked your portfolio and see this is your first entry. Congratulations! Keep Writing, Keep Creating, and Enjoy the Journey.
Laynie Thanks so much for your essay. I'm an amateur writer so my reviews usually don't contain comments on the mechanics of writing, but I did notice how well your sentences and paragraphs are put together (sentences error free, no typos). I especially like the last paragraph of your essay. I checked your portfolio and see this is your first entry. Congratulations! Keep Writing, Keep Creating, and Enjoy the Journey. (this is my normal tag line so if your essay is about you I'm using the word "enjoy" in reference to writing)
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