|There is something to be said for imagery based freestyle poems. No meter, no rhyme scheme, nothing but words weaving pictures in ones mind. (Sorry for my failed attempt to be poetic there)However, I happen to dislike it in general, especially because without format, it's so easy to slip up and turn a poem into an indecipherable mess of ideas - but the few poems that get it right
can be incredibly powerful.I believe yours is one of them.
This may be because of your incredible way with words. Just the imagery the word choice provokes is incredible, but when added with the symbolism, the metaphors, the personification, and alliteration - particularly in the line "Spoke of spring's sluggish begging" it becomes not just an image, but an interpretation of it.
This poem - from what I can tell, is not just about spring, but about who is responsible for all the beauty and mystery around us. It addresses one of the most commonly asked questions on the planet - but does so creatively and subtly, something I envy in poetry and applaud you for achieving.
Now, with all these compliments you are probably wondering why I didn't give you a perfect rating, but I do have a reason - your decisions on punctuation. Some sentences are punctuated, while others are not, for no reason I can comprehend. My advice in general is either punctuate completely, or don't at all - a mix leaves the reader feeling rather confused, and I extend that advice to you. Perhaps putting a period after 'begging' in the fourth line, 'mirror' in the sixth, and 'face' in the tenth would help.
Thank you so much for sharing your poem. Reading it was a joy, and I have a feeling I will be doing so more than once.
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