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Review of Misunderstood  
Review by Maineiac
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I was very impressed with this poem. It voices feelings of depression and frustration which are almost visceral. It contains a very memorable line: "Time goes so slow, when you've nowhere to go". This line can be applied to so many people, from the bedridden, to inmates. The pain and depression which are evoked, however, go to a whole different level. The writing, the format, is very simple and easy, but it is the juxtaposition of this simplicity with the complexity of the emotions expressed which make this such a disquieting piece. It's like getting punched by a butterfly! If emotion is the lifeblood of good poetry, then this piece has definitely made the grade.
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Review of Carry Me  
Review by Maineiac
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I have only read the first chapter thus far. I like the way that the writer has taken the typical story of a soldier dealing with the wounds of war, and introduced the twist of the injuries occurring to a female soldier. The new reality of female soldiers enduring combat, and its aftermath, is a void which needs to be explored. This story plunges into that void head first. It is well written, and comes at us in the difficult "first person" form. It is a sobering change from the more commonplace stories.
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Review of The Night Train  
Review by Maineiac
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a remarkable piece! I believe that it is the best Flash Fiction I have read. Normally, there is some area which could use improvement, but here I truly could not find one. To successfully achieve such a unique story within the 300 word limit of the contest is a remarkable accomplishment. I hope that you will continue to write such excellent pieces. Thank you for sharing your gift!
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Review of A Good Day  
Review by Maineiac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this story. You created a believable environment, and an accurate description of an employment situation many have experienced. The challenge in flash fiction is to tell your story within a brief window, and you succeeded quite well at this. Please continue to write! Find your stories, and tell them! Welcome to a great community!
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Review of A Dreams Reality  
Review by Maineiac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was an excellent piece. The story was nicely developed; the lead character had substance, and was easy to identify with. The conflict and unpredictable twist were nicely done. Making all of these elements effective, and yet remaining within the tight boundaries of a Flash Fiction format is difficult task, yet nicely handled here.
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Review of Sleeping Partner  
Review by Maineiac
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What an excellent story! One of the best flash fiction stories I have read. The blend of horror and comedy is a difficult task, but is masterfully done in this piece. Kudos to the author for a memorable tale! Please keep this type of stories coming!
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Review by Maineiac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a wonderful poem. As a great-grandfather myself, I can relate to the idea of a mission waiting for us when we leave this world, and I can think of no such mission more desirable than to be the Guardian Angel to one of the children for whom we have cared so much in life! Thank you for writing and sharing this piece!
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Review by Maineiac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really loved the poem. The allegory of hiding behind a protective beast, like the protection we find by being afraid to dare, or to take a chance, is brilliant. If we find comfort in the protective beast, as in the final lines of the poem, then we become doomed to the anger and loneliness that you predict.

It is very insightful to see that indulging the safety of walking behind the beast prevents us from choosing our own path, and that fear of a broken heart is crippling.

Of course, that's just my interpretation. If I've gotten it wrong, I apologize. Regardless, it is a memorable piece. Thank you for sharing it.
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Review of Sleepless Night  
Review by Maineiac
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A wonderfully entertaining story! A definite "must read" for anyone coming to grips with arachnophobia! I really enjoyed the flow of the story, and the fact that you seem very comfortable with your writing voice. Please keep writing!
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Review by Maineiac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful piece! I can feel the emotion in each scene. Very well done! The feel of the woods and the silence of the snow was eloquent.
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Review by Maineiac
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow! This is just excellent! Please keep it coming!
Sci-fi can sometimes use fantasy to avoid dealing with problems that can't be avoided with reality. In your piece I could feel the reality, such as the boy's warm breath exposing his position in the snow. I think that feeling of reality is a what makes exceptional sci-fi. I look forward to reading more of your story!
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Review of Oskie  
Review by Maineiac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I am a new member here, and I have only read a few pieces. I am very happy that this was one of those. I really enjoyed the story, and the way you took the time to develop the personalities of the characters. Many people do not know how rough life was is the logging camps. I think that you are also doing a service to all of those who lived that life. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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Review of Angels  
Review by Maineiac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful piece! You are asking for an honest critique, and input as to any suggested changes. I honestly feel that you should change nothing. Any such suggestion I would make would be of no use here, because I think this poem demonstrates talent beyond my own. The sentiment expressed here is very insightful: It is not that our loved ones have left us behind, it is that they are preparing our destination for our eventual arrival. I really enjoyed the way this came across.
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Review of Black Friday  
Review by Maineiac
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was an excellent piece! It describes a unique, American cultural phenomenon. To the rest of the world, this materialistic, consumer chaos probably seems like an advertising gimmick, but as the author has pointed out, the Black Friday madness has actually developed into type of psychological illness which can become a full blown obsession. He has captured the genesis of the phenomenon back in the 1980's. It survives to this day as an event which involves groups, usually family or friends, who "hunt" together, with the same zeal of ancient cultures who depended on good hunters for the group's survival. Thank you to the author for a memorable story and a peek inside the madness of pop culture.
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Review of Soon  
Review by Maineiac
Rated: E | (3.5)
I liked the concept, but I was really impressed by the second stanza. I read it, and immediately felt the need to read it a second time. It seems to suddenly jump up and confront the reader the way that reality suddenly jumps up and confronts a young person facing the end of childhood. More than just that, it could just as easily be a statement to anyone of any age, to capture the moment.

Thank you for sharing this.
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