I don't know if my opinion counts as this is my first "review".
I was moved by the theme of the poem and can relate to it on a personal level, trying to maintain a relationship with own family. I have been so lucky to have my wife, Lynn in my life for the last 30 years.
But I can remember the last days before I broke up with my first girlfriend.
Your poem touches that emotion of knowing you're falling out of love and you just wish it was back to normal, even if "we are just pretending".
"Paint me a picture, to show me, Memories we still hold inside.
Paint the winding road we've traveled, And the way our hands were entwined" This was my favorite verse.
I remember always holding hands with Lynn. I'm 53 and tonight is date night. Maybe I'll grab her hand again and surprise her. Thank you for that.
On a personal note, I hope it works out for you as you seem like a wonderful girl.
If I were to make a suggestion, it would be this. The poem is so close to a natural rhythm except for 4 words that really aren't needed. What if you took out:
why, line 4
Baby, line 8
And, line 12
Baby, line 16 and change don't to can't. (I have this thing about repeating words)
Try it out and see if it flows better to you.
Plus, "Baby" makes me think it was written by a guy, for some reason.
That was fun. I hope I did some good.
Take care, mark
PS. Now,...... you have to give me a review on my review. Ha! jk