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Review of Nine Circles  
Review by Kei-chan
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
It is a nice story :) I didn't find mistakes, well one or two.. The story is interesting but I personally think it develops a bit slow, my opinion only.. So it becomes to put it bluntly slightly boring, but the plot is good and nearly flawless..
Maybe shorten it a bit or give it a faster, slightly faster pace. If you do that for me would be an amazing story also i think you are trying a bit to much, using fancy (long, classy, difficult) words.. The best stories are those that can be understood by all but felt by some, i believe that those words should be used for the most critical moments. Please don't get me wrong the better the writers vocabulary the better the story.. But for this piece i felt the need to be simpler by a tone...
Keep writing the story is good
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Review of The Dark Ages  
Review by Kei-chan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Oh yes we are, we are living in the dark ages..
I like where you are going with this, i liked the idea and I didn't find any mistakes. Even if I did I was too engrossed into reading this that I didn't notice.. Good job again..


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Review by Kei-chan
Rated: E | (3.5)
Beautifully written.. Romantic 😍
You lost rhyme at some paragraphs and found it back at some others..
There were some mistakes in there like you could have used simpler words that would rhyme and go with the flow..
Keep writing


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Review of Cleansing Tears  
Review by Kei-chan
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was amazing :) well written and felt ..
I really enjoyed reading it , and there were no mistakes in the poem :D
Have a nice one


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Review by Kei-chan
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
It was good :) some little mistakes along the way but the ending was good... Thought you could have written about the way you left him so people can get into it more... And maybe another girl can find similarities in your words and take strength from them :) anyway nice piece
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Review by Kei-chan
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
It was great and i really gad a great time reading it
It was interesting and correct...


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Review of Telling  
Review by Kei-chan
Rated: E | (4.0)
That's a nice way of putting it , thought I don't completely agree to some things, anyway it was nicely written..
A wise person speaks wisely but not always , you make it sound like the wise man is a perfectionist always on top.
But he isn't he can make mistakes , its what humans do... But i get where you are going , i enjoyed it a lot .. An interesting aspect the way you saw it ..
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Review of Darkness  
Review by Kei-chan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Dark and beautiful :)
You had some mistakes but it was nicely done..
Keep writing :)


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Review of Triskaidekaphobia  
Review by Kei-chan
Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved it :) Its was off the hook ..
Good job


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