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14 Public Reviews Given
14 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I like to tell you how smooth and coherent your piece is, along with exactly what I think you could do better. My goal is not to bring you down at all, my goal is to help you improve for next time and what you can continue doing.
Favorite Genres
Romance/Love, Family, Fantasy, Dystopia, Realistic Fiction, Teen, Contest Entries
Least Favorite Genres
I'll review anything you like!
Favorite Item Types
I like longer form writing, but short stories are still good!
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't feel like I am the best at poetry, but I'll give it my best shot.
Public Reviews
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Review of Guardians  
Review by Moonstone
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow, I am very excited about this! The intro is so cool and very intriguing. The names of the spirits are very cool and sound just like something straight out of one of my favorite fantasy books! To be honest, I am kind of a sucker for a good fantasy, but this intro is amazing and I am waiting for what comes next!

The only thing is, I don't know if this is intentional, but capitalize the spirits' names. Then again, this could be a writer's choice, but I'd love to know.
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Review by Moonstone
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the fast-paced notion of this short story! It shares so many feelings and a full plot structure in a few paragraphs and that takes skill. I loved how you made Ian so sure of his decision but Seraphine(I love that name by the way) is very angry but also feels bad. The only thing I thought could be improved was her reaction to Ian telling her he was dating Cassius. It seemed a bit stereotypical, but otherwise, great short story!!
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Review by Moonstone
Rated: E | (4.0)
So sorry, I took a bit of a break and realized I had missed your review! I still want to review your piece, and I am sorry!

Overall, I liked the concept and your execution. Your similes and personification fit so smoothly into the story, and add another level to it. Your descriptions are good as well, and I enjoyed the feeling of hope in the poem(I don't know if that was what you were going for but that's what I got).

If I had to change a couple things I would add a little more spacing between the lines, only because it is a bit hard to read. Also, the line "Will be fragrance in the air. Nesting birds will sing." It didn't rhyme as smoothly as the others did. I know it was because it was the closest rhyme, and it does flow, but next time I would try to incorporate it a bit more smoothly.
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Review of I Can Hear You  
Review by Moonstone
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really liked how you showed the protagonist's emotions and how helpless she feels. The ending was really heartwarming, and I think your story moved along quickly and smoothly. You did well on making the short story really shine through and make a cohesive plot-line within a few paragraphs. There were a few typos, but everyone makes mistakes, so I don't care that much. I felt your character's emotions and they felt very real to me.
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Review of Magrev's Mistake  
Review by Moonstone
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Your story flowed nicely, I liked your choice of words and descriptors. There were maybe one or two typos, not enough to lose a star or a half, but I enjoyed your story and I liked the ending a lot.
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Review by Moonstone
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey, I'm new to Writing.com as of a week ago, and I have only written two stories but it is such a nice feeling to read a review. I really like your reviewing style and I hope when I get a few more GPs to have you read one of mine! I know this isn't really a review, but I like the way I can hear the emotion in your voice(even though I've never heard you) through your writing. It's hard to do that and you did it well.
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Review by Moonstone
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really liked your vocabulary you used, and how you made the whole poem very loving and very warm. I could feel the emotions you were trying to give, and I really enjoyed it. Overall, I think you did a great job rhyming and finding words to rhyme(occurrence and deterrence was really good) and this was a good poem!
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Review by Moonstone
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Overall, this story was very cool and I like the idea behind it. I only found a couple of errors, so that's why I took away half a star, but otherwise this tory ran along smoothly and I liked how you portrayed the characters!
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Review by Moonstone
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This story was very interesting! I liked the mix of Dutch and English you added, along with the cool mystery idea. And the ending was really good!
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Review by Moonstone
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This was such a cool concept! I like how detailed you went on how the humans were the price to pay and I really liked the vocabulary you used!
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Review by Moonstone
Rated: E | (5.0)
I myself had recently posted to the Tangerine Skies prompt and got an email for this and when I read this I couldn't help thinking wow! This is such a good interpretation of the song! I like how in-depth you go with the emotion he is feeling, and the whole idea is very intriguing.
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