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Knowing what sells and Knowing what is good are my skills.
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Murder mysteries.
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Long sad stories.
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


Vampirism is everywhere. There are the sick, who need fresh blood.
There are those, who crave it. How much blood has been spilled?
This is a solid dialogue between lust and virtue.
The rules of engagement with Vampires are fantasy.
Vampires believe only in blood. Try waving a crucifix in front of a tiger.
Contrary wise, a tiger could kill Vampire.
The best way to kill a Vampire, according to Grimm's Fairy Tales,
is to cut them up and burn the pieces.
Maybe, a tiger could do the first part.

Fun topic,

Muzzy
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)


Adam lived 800 years.
How long could Jesus have lived?
Jesus was born in June sometime
during the tax census of Tiberius.
The wise men brought gifts.

Your X-mass tale is nice,
but tedious. A good story should have
conflict. Maybe, a little sibling rivalry.
Some dark family secret.

Nice just doesn't sell.
Just trying to give some pointers.

Bob
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)



Ah.. I guess humor is an acquired taste?
But, there is a lot of reverse psychology to it.
For instance if you say that the vacuum salesman is Puerto Rican.
The gag is his sauve pitch.

"Hey with this attachment you can have a lot fun." the Salesman smirks;
"And you don't have to wear a condom."

"That's disgusting. I'm going to be a teacher... maybe." Student checks
out the attachment, "This might make hot porn."

Vacuum Salesman gives a dirty laugh.

I'd tighten up the dialogue and use more action.
And space the lines out to make it easier to read.

Just my two cents..

Bob
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)


Wow. This reads like Gnosticism; "Is it better to commit evil and attempt
to balance it with an exalted act, than to live a resolutely neutral life?"
"Who knows the truth, knows everything and nothing." Zen in the art of
Archery by Eugen Herrigel. But, the arrow was must travel forward.
Did you hear the news on particle acceleration? A particle can move
faster than light. This means a rewrite of Einstein's theory of Relativity.
Maybe, the arrow can travel backwards? Imagine if Hitler was never born
or if someone turned him to a peaceful life. Would we have been born?
So, many choices and so many effects.

Vertago
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Review of Scramble me  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)



Who is Walking Eagle?
What if an eagle was raised by prairie chickens?
Would he be Walking Eagle?

Let Eagle fly!

I like my eggs sunny side up
with apple sauce and waffles.

Perhaps, you are being ironic,
but I value my eggs.


Bob
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Review of Broadside  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)


Circomloquacious. This is a round about way to get to the point.
My first impression is you were keeping the reader in suspense.
My second impression was to find the point to this introspection.

Recently, I saw a car accident .. The traffic slowed down to view
it. And as I sat in the grid lock of exhaust and honking horns, I
could see the geese flying over. I wondered at their V formation
and then I saw a body on a gurney. How many lives would be torn
by this tragedy? The traffic moved on and the sun still shined down.
It was a beautiful autumn day.

I think your essay would be clearer if you described the event first.

Write on!

Bob
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)



"She ambled over to him." you wrote.
Ambled is a bit saucy . It sounds like a western.
maybe she could shuffle sleeplessly to him?
Other than that, this is a good short story.

If you can find a copy of The Seven Golden Vampires(Hammer Film)
you'll see a lot of Vampire fighting. Some of the vampires are killed with
a bow and arrow.

It's a fun topic.
Why are Vampires sensitive to daylight and streams?
They are symbols of purification.
The Brides of Dracula(Hammer Film) is another example of natures
attack on the vampire. Dracula is caught in a thorn bush, symbolizing
the crown of thorns Jesus was forced to wear.+

Bob
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Review of Time To Get Real  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)



This reminds me of my blog (Vertago). It jumps all over the place.

107 Sweet Dream: "I just finished shotting a scene." did you mean shooting?
"Shotting" is a slang for poop. I might see The Help at the Red Box, but I just
don't see films worthy of paying $10,50 for. Have you noticed how shotting they've
become?

Calling Doctor Frued! When ever you have dreams about nudity that is a body
image issue. Are you worried about drooping? Look at Demi Moore she's posting
half naked picks and how old is she?

Don't be afraid to be honest. Most of the readers here are on heavy meds.
They'll love an enema bag story!

So good luck!
And happy pooping!

Vertago
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


"We must all forfeit our lives at the end of this game." Mark Twain.

Well, there are a lot of typos in this tragedy:

"With is sword" did you mean "(his) sword."?

"And how I should up his father." I think mayhaps you (showed) up dad?

"And my grave was dag" I don't think that's Elizabethan language for dug.

"The King want(ed) me to be his wife. He had fall(en) in love with me."
I drop letters all the time in my haste to create.

What I would like you to do is described the encounter with the King.
Did you know Castle Island in South Boston? There is a civil war lady ghost
there. She was hanged for helping her husband escape prison. She walks the
battlements and corridors moaning. That's it. She dosen't have anything to say.
Oh, don't touch her. She'll scratch you up.

Any Who,

Nice ghost story.

Bob
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Review of MOTHER AND CHILD  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)


A vertical anagram .. that's fun.
I think the whole piece is woven well.

Nice work

Bob
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


Very tantalizing. May I suggest you get a copy of Bell de Jour; Dairy of a Call Girl?
It's about how a college student got herself into the British call girl service.
She liked the casual sex and adventure and of course the money.
Elie sounds a lot like her.

I most confess after reading your erotic mystery I was disappointed that
Elie did not pursue her fantasy more. Out in here-yah, there are girls that hit
on guys for "a little lovin." They're not prostitutes, they just like to cut loose
on the weekends.

It doesn't always have to be about marriage.

Sweet tale.

Bob
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Review of Light  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)


Peace is a lost art.
This poem evokes the need for love.
I really hope the powers that be
are still human....



Bob+
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Review of Dark Peace  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)


A dark poem. When you have taken away every kind of good thing
there is nothing left, but death.
War is bloody, but there are just wars.
This is my reservation about this poem.
Never have so many died for what they did not know.

The symbolizism is reflective of the Greek poet Homer,
"Consider the river of darkness and all the inhabitants there in."

Keep writing!

Bob
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Review of Declaration  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)


"Wilts thou" I think went with "Me thinks."
Is this in Elizabethan language?
It comes on very flowery and over the top.
I don't think this is a good way to ask a girl out,
"How I long for such beauty to collapse my heart
and freeze my soul.." That's sounds like a heart attack.

Well, I enjoyed the imagery.
I think I heard this in a Woody Allen movie;
"I'm dead. What more do you want from me?"

Bob
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Review of ANOTHER TOMORROW  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


I would use more spacing to make it easier to read.
Computers can be hard on the eyes.
Is this a true story?

Very compelling.

Bob
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Review of Abilene  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)


I woke up.
Got out of bed.
Dragged a comb across my head.

3 lines. 13 words.

I'm not sure how to interpret your prose.
Is this a contest entry?
Some of your words are darker.
Is this a message?
The emotion is deliberated.
I get the feeling the character is strong
and focus.

Bob
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Nice pic! Theoretically , there is no up or down in space.
Your picture of @Star Trek's Enterprise could up side down.
I've wondered why they didn't have seat belts. In every episode
they're being tossed about the bridge. I guess that's dramatic
license?

Strange, how the space program has taken to unmanned exploration.
I suppose its cheaper.

Bob

PS: Check out my port on "Intelligent Design."

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Review of Back to Black  Open in new Window.
Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)


She truly will be missed.
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)


This sounds a little too preachy. I think the narrative is solid, but the speech
makes too many flowery remarks: if the bear cannot defend its cubs, then it
will become extinct, to use an Aesop metaphor. What might work here is
a dialogue amongst parents as they decide which children they will keep and
which will be euthanized. Eugenics leads to mass euthanasia.

Unfortunately, the way world politics is crashing, all life is jeopardized.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)



There is a problem here with this retelling of Luis Carols' Alice in Wonderland.
You haven't put enough of your impressions in it. I like the black wolf addition.
Try to get more of your reactions into it. And remember this is your dream.
You can make up anything.

I'd shorten the falling sequence. My attitude is to get to Wonderland as
fast as possible. What would you do there?

Maybe, you could make Alice more aggressive.

Just a thought.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)


I love this Bible thesis. I had to reread it.
You've hit the central point of Bible studies. What does it mean?
Have you read Grimm's Faery Tales? They're elaborate Faery tales
told for a moral. That is the importance of the Bible it's influence
of moral social issues. Does God exist? Do we need God?
What is the value of a person's life? These are questions of faith.

Fun topic!

Bob
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)


I love the banter. It has a Woody Alan jester flare.
Pst! Humans can't think outside the box.
In fact, we do not see God. God's existence is inferred.
God's mind is in dispute. Go ask a Jew, a Muslim and a Christian
for their opinion.
Miracles! After Mohamed died; he rode a white horse into Heaven.
Right?
It is more reasonable to assume that when someone desires a miracle,
and a miraculous seeming event occurs, it does so not because of God,
but because of the person did it themselves. God existence is imaginary.

I love the topic.

Bob
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Adolf Hitler, believed in eugenics and race war. Non arians were an
enemy race. If you read the Old Testament you will find many examples
of the Jews committing genocide. There are no more Hitites or Amerities.
They were exterminated by Abraham.

It's strange how selective Jews can be about history.
My mother was Jewish, she never forgave the Christians,
who turned their backs on the Jews in NAZI Germany.
I, however, take a more pragmatic approach.
Kill only those, who would kill you.

I like the part about "the dead can only lead the blind."
The dead are a real part of our lives. They built the world we live in
with their blood.

Bob
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)


Um... nice review pictures.
I really, should learn how to make them. I see lots of angels in the reviews.
I guess angels are judges? It's odd, but when I see a big picture by a reviewer;
I wonder if they're promoting their picture. The french king's would write poetry
for their subjects. It would be read to the illiterate peasants and then a trumpet
blown. Now, that's a fan fare.

:)
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Review by bob county Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)



"Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in wabe:
All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outrage."
(Lewis Carroll's Jabberwocky)

"On his airy perch among the branches
Master Crow was holding cheese in his beak."
(Marianee Moore's Master Crow)

Among the rules which govern poetry;
is to learn that prose sentences contain rhythms.
They come bundle loosely in phrases and clauses,
while poetry is packaged neatly in lines.

The iambic rhyme of this poem is pentameter
And ends on the second sentence letter.

I prefer free verse,
but this was terse.

Bob
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