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Long sad stories.
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Review of Abilene  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)


I woke up.
Got out of bed.
Dragged a comb across my head.

3 lines. 13 words.

I'm not sure how to interpret your prose.
Is this a contest entry?
Some of your words are darker.
Is this a message?
The emotion is deliberated.
I get the feeling the character is strong
and focus.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Nice pic! Theoretically , there is no up or down in space.
Your picture of @Star Trek's Enterprise could up side down.
I've wondered why they didn't have seat belts. In every episode
they're being tossed about the bridge. I guess that's dramatic
license?

Strange, how the space program has taken to unmanned exploration.
I suppose its cheaper.

Bob

PS: Check out my port on "Intelligent Design."

=+=
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Review of Back to Black  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


She truly will be missed.
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)


This sounds a little too preachy. I think the narrative is solid, but the speech
makes too many flowery remarks: if the bear cannot defend its cubs, then it
will become extinct, to use an Aesop metaphor. What might work here is
a dialogue amongst parents as they decide which children they will keep and
which will be euthanized. Eugenics leads to mass euthanasia.

Unfortunately, the way world politics is crashing, all life is jeopardized.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.0)



There is a problem here with this retelling of Luis Carols' Alice in Wonderland.
You haven't put enough of your impressions in it. I like the black wolf addition.
Try to get more of your reactions into it. And remember this is your dream.
You can make up anything.

I'd shorten the falling sequence. My attitude is to get to Wonderland as
fast as possible. What would you do there?

Maybe, you could make Alice more aggressive.

Just a thought.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


I love this Bible thesis. I had to reread it.
You've hit the central point of Bible studies. What does it mean?
Have you read Grimm's Faery Tales? They're elaborate Faery tales
told for a moral. That is the importance of the Bible it's influence
of moral social issues. Does God exist? Do we need God?
What is the value of a person's life? These are questions of faith.

Fun topic!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


I love the banter. It has a Woody Alan jester flare.
Pst! Humans can't think outside the box.
In fact, we do not see God. God's existence is inferred.
God's mind is in dispute. Go ask a Jew, a Muslim and a Christian
for their opinion.
Miracles! After Mohamed died; he rode a white horse into Heaven.
Right?
It is more reasonable to assume that when someone desires a miracle,
and a miraculous seeming event occurs, it does so not because of God,
but because of the person did it themselves. God existence is imaginary.

I love the topic.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Adolf Hitler, believed in eugenics and race war. Non arians were an
enemy race. If you read the Old Testament you will find many examples
of the Jews committing genocide. There are no more Hitites or Amerities.
They were exterminated by Abraham.

It's strange how selective Jews can be about history.
My mother was Jewish, she never forgave the Christians,
who turned their backs on the Jews in NAZI Germany.
I, however, take a more pragmatic approach.
Kill only those, who would kill you.

I like the part about "the dead can only lead the blind."
The dead are a real part of our lives. They built the world we live in
with their blood.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Um... nice review pictures.
I really, should learn how to make them. I see lots of angels in the reviews.
I guess angels are judges? It's odd, but when I see a big picture by a reviewer;
I wonder if they're promoting their picture. The french king's would write poetry
for their subjects. It would be read to the illiterate peasants and then a trumpet
blown. Now, that's a fan fare.

:)
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Review of I SERVED THE ARMY  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)



When I watch Judgement at Nuremberg; I am impressed with Abby Mann's
fairness, representing the NAZI judges on trial accused of legalizing NAZI
atrocities. The Trial established universal human rights and the responsibility
of every citizen to resist brutalities. Discipline is honorable, but blind
obedience is not .

Very thought provoking prose.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)



"Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in wabe:
All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outrage."
(Lewis Carroll's Jabberwocky)

"On his airy perch among the branches
Master Crow was holding cheese in his beak."
(Marianee Moore's Master Crow)

Among the rules which govern poetry;
is to learn that prose sentences contain rhythms.
They come bundle loosely in phrases and clauses,
while poetry is packaged neatly in lines.

The iambic rhyme of this poem is pentameter
And ends on the second sentence letter.

I prefer free verse,
but this was terse.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)



I think the original series just can't be topped.



Bob
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Review of Mary-Ann  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)



A girls love is usually fantasy. She wants passion and drama.
A woman's love is permanent. She wants a man she can depend on.
This is another free verse poem I've read:

"Scarce did a lover e'er do as I did.

When his best girl to eternity slid.

I am Romeo, Romeo.

I am the darling that mashed Romeo.

I am Juliet, Juliet.

I up and stabbed myself right in the corset.

Locked in a tomb with no pickaxe to force it."

Fred Newton Scott(1880-1931)

Good luck with Mary Ann.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Lidia, Lidia. The tattooed lady.
Multiculturalism is wonderful as long as everyone plays nice.
Unfortunately, many childish impulses test the boundaries of good manners.
There was a girl in my grammar school, who liked to kick boys in their goodies.
My told me to never hit a girl. So, I ran from her.
Fight or flight was my first lesson at the Puberty School.

It's sad, but most folks just keep to themselves.
They don't want trouble.

My only criticism of this seamless work is the right side is cut off by the margin.
Also, you don't mention what a strong influence Lady Ga Ga has on girls.
Pop culture is the religion of the teens. What if Lady Ga Ga was a bad role model?
Could you stop your daughters from imitating her?

So many choices and so many loss lives.+


Vertago~~~
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Review by bob county
Rated: ASR | (4.5)



Are you old enough to remember Jimmy Carter?
He was homespun and funny and he beat out Gerald Ford.
All Sarah Palin needs is a hot spot, where she looks decisive.
Obama has bad poll numbers. Folks are blaming him for their
debt. Do you remember Jimmy Stewart's, Mr. Smith Goes to Washington?
I think Sarah Palin would make a strong Republican Presidential Candidate.
And I'm a Democrat. :)

Muzzy
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Review of I Hate Red  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



"Here lies a fool who went out of the world
without learning why he came into it."

An inscription on a cemetery marker in Lexington, Mass.
It's funny what some people want to be remembered for.

Bob
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Review of I See You  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


There is a chant to this: "I don't .. I still.. I want"
It is amazing how complicated people make love.
I'm guilty of it. I think people are two faced.
I'm rarely disappointed. But, this recital reads like a poem.
It has stanzas with a rhythm .. I like it.


No one writes about boredom.
Maybe, that's because it's boring.

Bob
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Review of It's Too Late  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Excellent moral dilemma. I had a professor, who became addicted to
antidepressant medication after hiis son drowned snorkeling. He had a
course on Mark Twain. I think he wanted it; to a get a grip on life.

Kevin, in your story, knows the world is going to end soon.
He decides to grope women and revel in casual sex.
That's fairly tame. You should read Casandra. She was cursed
with knowledge of the future. Her friends ignored her or sought
violent vengeance against her. Strangely, Casandra still prayed
to the Gods for mercy. .. I guess that's Greek.

As far as reading jazz goes: "once again" is repeated to often and unnecessary
as is the refrain, "In other words." These are your words and no others.
But, the story is original and thoughtful.

Keep writing!

Bob
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Review of Green Thumb  
Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Some people have a fear of nature. I guess they think it will eat them.
You use the pronoun he often. Is this intentional? It sounds choppy.
Have you read Jules Vern, LOST WORLD? He writes it like a diary
in the first person. This story reminds me of his style.

There are many ways to die. Some are swift and some are slow.
Recently, a woman in Australia had a spider nest removed from her
hip. She thought it was an infected spider bite. And there is a flesh eating
fungus. So, nature will devour us...

I like to keep my vitamin C up with oranges.
The Chinese government stopped the bird flue with injections of
vitamin C. .
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Review of TERRORISTS  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)


This is a good poem. Every fourth stanza rhymes.
Jesus said he came with a sword not to make peace with
the Jews and Romans, but to tell the Truth. The problem with
Islamic terrorism is it does not fear death. So, you have to kill
all of them or somehow convince them that they are wrong.
The Romans executed Jesus for sedition and they thought that
would solve the problem. . I think we know better.+


Love is fun!


Muzzy
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Review of C.I.A. tarnished  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)



Well, it's called the secret service, because they keep secrets.
Shhhhhhh! The CIA wants to do its work without any accountability.
Building 7 at ground zero at 9/11 fell straight down into its foot print.
But, it was never struck by a plane..... (explosives?) Building 7 housed
the offices of the CIA. . Hmmm. Conspiracy theorist are selling mountains
of books on this mystery.

Let's face the awful truth. This country is bankrupt and owes its soul to
the WORLD BANK. ... Think of all the money that's come out of Iraqi oil.
None materializing at the gas pumps. Nope, the tax payer is stuck with
trillion dollar debt. Oh, well or Orwellian?

Vertago~~~
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Wow! Great mystery and suspense!
I guess no good deed goes unpunished.
Strange the parents didn't call an ambulance.
Stranger still no one called the police.
But, I want to read more. Can the boy be saved?
Why are so many people interested in him?

I'll stay tuned!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)


Fun read. I'm reminded of a story about an Irish bachelor, who fell in love
with a mermaid. All was well during the night, but at dawn she had to return
to the sea. I prefer the plot twist: ending two in your tale. I should warn you
Fairies are reading the internet. They might come over for a visit. They like
sweets; leave a bowl of chocolate.

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Simply purrrr-fect! Music is the third greatest magic; words are the second.
The first is silence. In the beginning all was empty and void, then God spoke.
Something came from nothing. That's magic.

The flute is ancient: the pipes of Pam.
And every feast must have a ham.

Muzzy
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Review of Monday  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Free verse is perfectly sublime.
What can be said about moods?
At least we are not beset by the weather.
Tornadoes and floods and tsunamis ; what is next?
Some think we are do for increased meteor strikes.
The ozone is thinning, and more dangerous radiation is entering.
The polar caps are melting and raising the sea level and lowering the saline .
And the level of carbon dioxide is rising as the third world enters its industrial
growth. How many cars do the Chinese need?
Of course, the threat of total nuclear war is always with us.
And some nut could go ape on a plane.

But, your verse is sweet .
I feel like some coco.

Bob
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