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Murder mysteries.
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Long sad stories.
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Murder She Wrote, Columbo and NCIS.
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Very well done. The brain is an electrical system and it broadcasts its
brain waves. It is possible to receive these broadcasts.
That's what remote viewing is dedicated to.
If you have a chance get a copy of Suspect Zero.
I'm sure were all in for more security checks in this brave new world.

Muzzy
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Review of Wonder Woman  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


I think you hit the nail on the head. Wonder Woman is not human.
She was made from the clay of Paradise Island. She was not born
of a woman, but rather Aphrodite's magic. But, she can be shot.
She can deflect bullets with her wrist bands. I have the original
series and inevitably she is disarmed with gas and then chained.
One must suspend disbelief that NAZI soldiers would not shoot her
while she was unconscious. It's a fun story.

Thanks for the trivia!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (3.5)


Ascetics can be obsessed with evil temptations:

Saint Jerome, who translated the Latin version of the Bible known as Vulgate
wrote that married couples should not partake of the Mass unless they had
refrained from intercourse for seven days, "I too, who ardently love his own wife
am an adulterer. My mind burns with the cravings of the flesh that flare up.
I fancy myself amongst bevies of dancing maidens."

Don't beat yourself up.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


It is especially poignant when the bully is a girl.
A boy expects a girl to gentle.
But, we are all capable of bullying.
The same part of the brain that provides a sex drive is also the
source of aggression.
My guess is that girl was trying to come to you, or she was psycho.
There is a film about a female serial killer: Monster.
You might find it informative.

There is always a motive behind bullying.

Good rhyme.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


I asked Mr. Deigi what his dreams are like, since he has was blind from
birth. He said they are noisy and there are bright colors. Mr. Deigi is a
sculptor and he has had his work exhibited at the Cambridge Museum of Arts.
He sculpted an exact miniature of the Statue of Liberty. It was 4 feet high.
He asked me to help him select the right color green for the weathered look.
I picked an aqua marine. With his knowledge of design, he can sculpt any
picture of a subject. His computer provides the measurements.

His freestyle art work is amazingly passionate and colorful.
I mention this, to make you understand that creativity is not just for the
sighted. It comes from within.

Keep Writing!

Bob
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Review of Haunted  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


Very true. If I only knew what I was thinking.
That conscience is so pesky. I like to remind myself
that no matter how bad things get, I can die only once.
That's my bucket of sunshine. I was expecting a ghost story.
I had a dream or maybe hallucination that I was haunted by
Jesus Christ. He was upset that after all his preaching and
sacrifice for sins I was still a jerk. God he just wouldn't stop
nagging. But, that's a conscience for yah.

Nice piece of muse...

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Catholics believe in invincible ignorance. So, you can be an asshole all your
life and still go to Heaven, because your stupid. Then, there is the death bed
reclamation. Adolf Hitler could be in Heaven, because of these loop holes.
One of the big tests in Heaven is to accept God's judgement.

That's theology. I saw one typo: "running we swoops down."
I think you meant (he swoops down).
Whenever, I start reading about "Guardians" I flash back to SHAZAM.
A little American boy is given superpowers by the Guardians of SHAZAM.
These Guardians are ancient pagan Arab Gods. Now, that's multicultural.

Digressing further, it is ironic that Islam, which is strongly influenced by
Jewish Talmud Law should now be used against Jews. Mohammed was
anointed by the Angel Gabriel. The Angel Gabriel told Mohammed to fulfill
the Law of Issac and Abraham and Moses and Jesus. Yes Muslims believe
Jesus is a Muslim Prophet. Arabs and Jews are brothers.

Oh, well.+

Very thought provoking story.

Bob

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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)



Who was that stalker that shot John Lennon?
I think stalking is pursuing someone with intent to do bodily harm
or make unwanted advances. A paparazzi is a stalker.
I like to read the tabloids while I'm shopping . I'll leave it on the bags
of kitty litter. They have some very intrusive pictures of celebrities.
I'm waiting for a snap shot of Miley Cyrus on the toilet. That I'll frame.

Your diatribe is funny, but I'd like to see more paragraphs. It's easier to
read on a computer screen.

You Face Book is part of Homeland Defense.
The FBI is watching you.
Those chat rooms are mostly Arabic.
I can't even read what their chatting.

Here's a career move; be a paparazzi.
You can stalk and get paid for it!


Tootles!

Vertago
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Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


Vampirism is everywhere. There are the sick, who need fresh blood.
There are those, who crave it. How much blood has been spilled?
This is a solid dialogue between lust and virtue.
The rules of engagement with Vampires are fantasy.
Vampires believe only in blood. Try waving a crucifix in front of a tiger.
Contrary wise, a tiger could kill Vampire.
The best way to kill a Vampire, according to Grimm's Fairy Tales,
is to cut them up and burn the pieces.
Maybe, a tiger could do the first part.

Fun topic,

Muzzy
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)


Adam lived 800 years.
How long could Jesus have lived?
Jesus was born in June sometime
during the tax census of Tiberius.
The wise men brought gifts.

Your X-mass tale is nice,
but tedious. A good story should have
conflict. Maybe, a little sibling rivalry.
Some dark family secret.

Nice just doesn't sell.
Just trying to give some pointers.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)



Ah.. I guess humor is an acquired taste?
But, there is a lot of reverse psychology to it.
For instance if you say that the vacuum salesman is Puerto Rican.
The gag is his sauve pitch.

"Hey with this attachment you can have a lot fun." the Salesman smirks;
"And you don't have to wear a condom."

"That's disgusting. I'm going to be a teacher... maybe." Student checks
out the attachment, "This might make hot porn."

Vacuum Salesman gives a dirty laugh.

I'd tighten up the dialogue and use more action.
And space the lines out to make it easier to read.

Just my two cents..

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


Wow. This reads like Gnosticism; "Is it better to commit evil and attempt
to balance it with an exalted act, than to live a resolutely neutral life?"
"Who knows the truth, knows everything and nothing." Zen in the art of
Archery by Eugen Herrigel. But, the arrow was must travel forward.
Did you hear the news on particle acceleration? A particle can move
faster than light. This means a rewrite of Einstein's theory of Relativity.
Maybe, the arrow can travel backwards? Imagine if Hitler was never born
or if someone turned him to a peaceful life. Would we have been born?
So, many choices and so many effects.

Vertago
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Review of Broadside  
Review by bob county
Rated: ASR | (4.0)


Circomloquacious. This is a round about way to get to the point.
My first impression is you were keeping the reader in suspense.
My second impression was to find the point to this introspection.

Recently, I saw a car accident .. The traffic slowed down to view
it. And as I sat in the grid lock of exhaust and honking horns, I
could see the geese flying over. I wondered at their V formation
and then I saw a body on a gurney. How many lives would be torn
by this tragedy? The traffic moved on and the sun still shined down.
It was a beautiful autumn day.

I think your essay would be clearer if you described the event first.

Write on!

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)



"She ambled over to him." you wrote.
Ambled is a bit saucy . It sounds like a western.
maybe she could shuffle sleeplessly to him?
Other than that, this is a good short story.

If you can find a copy of The Seven Golden Vampires(Hammer Film)
you'll see a lot of Vampire fighting. Some of the vampires are killed with
a bow and arrow.

It's a fun topic.
Why are Vampires sensitive to daylight and streams?
They are symbols of purification.
The Brides of Dracula(Hammer Film) is another example of natures
attack on the vampire. Dracula is caught in a thorn bush, symbolizing
the crown of thorns Jesus was forced to wear.+

Bob
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Review of Time To Get Real  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)



This reminds me of my blog (Vertago). It jumps all over the place.

107 Sweet Dream: "I just finished shotting a scene." did you mean shooting?
"Shotting" is a slang for poop. I might see The Help at the Red Box, but I just
don't see films worthy of paying $10,50 for. Have you noticed how shotting they've
become?

Calling Doctor Frued! When ever you have dreams about nudity that is a body
image issue. Are you worried about drooping? Look at Demi Moore she's posting
half naked picks and how old is she?

Don't be afraid to be honest. Most of the readers here are on heavy meds.
They'll love an enema bag story!

So good luck!
And happy pooping!

Vertago
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


"We must all forfeit our lives at the end of this game." Mark Twain.

Well, there are a lot of typos in this tragedy:

"With is sword" did you mean "(his) sword."?

"And how I should up his father." I think mayhaps you (showed) up dad?

"And my grave was dag" I don't think that's Elizabethan language for dug.

"The King want(ed) me to be his wife. He had fall(en) in love with me."
I drop letters all the time in my haste to create.

What I would like you to do is described the encounter with the King.
Did you know Castle Island in South Boston? There is a civil war lady ghost
there. She was hanged for helping her husband escape prison. She walks the
battlements and corridors moaning. That's it. She dosen't have anything to say.
Oh, don't touch her. She'll scratch you up.

Any Who,

Nice ghost story.

Bob
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Review of MOTHER AND CHILD  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)


A vertical anagram .. that's fun.
I think the whole piece is woven well.

Nice work

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


Very tantalizing. May I suggest you get a copy of Bell de Jour; Dairy of a Call Girl?
It's about how a college student got herself into the British call girl service.
She liked the casual sex and adventure and of course the money.
Elie sounds a lot like her.

I most confess after reading your erotic mystery I was disappointed that
Elie did not pursue her fantasy more. Out in here-yah, there are girls that hit
on guys for "a little lovin." They're not prostitutes, they just like to cut loose
on the weekends.

It doesn't always have to be about marriage.

Sweet tale.

Bob
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Review of Light  
Review by bob county
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)


Peace is a lost art.
This poem evokes the need for love.
I really hope the powers that be
are still human....



Bob+
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Review of Dark Peace  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.0)


A dark poem. When you have taken away every kind of good thing
there is nothing left, but death.
War is bloody, but there are just wars.
This is my reservation about this poem.
Never have so many died for what they did not know.

The symbolizism is reflective of the Greek poet Homer,
"Consider the river of darkness and all the inhabitants there in."

Keep writing!

Bob
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Review of Declaration  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)


"Wilts thou" I think went with "Me thinks."
Is this in Elizabethan language?
It comes on very flowery and over the top.
I don't think this is a good way to ask a girl out,
"How I long for such beauty to collapse my heart
and freeze my soul.." That's sounds like a heart attack.

Well, I enjoyed the imagery.
I think I heard this in a Woody Allen movie;
"I'm dead. What more do you want from me?"

Bob
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Review of ANOTHER TOMORROW  
Review by bob county
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


I would use more spacing to make it easier to read.
Computers can be hard on the eyes.
Is this a true story?

Very compelling.

Bob
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Review of Abilene  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (4.5)


I woke up.
Got out of bed.
Dragged a comb across my head.

3 lines. 13 words.

I'm not sure how to interpret your prose.
Is this a contest entry?
Some of your words are darker.
Is this a message?
The emotion is deliberated.
I get the feeling the character is strong
and focus.

Bob
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Review by bob county
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Nice pic! Theoretically , there is no up or down in space.
Your picture of @Star Trek's Enterprise could up side down.
I've wondered why they didn't have seat belts. In every episode
they're being tossed about the bridge. I guess that's dramatic
license?

Strange, how the space program has taken to unmanned exploration.
I suppose its cheaper.

Bob

PS: Check out my port on "Intelligent Design."

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Review of Back to Black  
Review by bob county
Rated: E | (5.0)


She truly will be missed.
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