My impression is that this fairy tale is similar to the original Brothers Grimm stories in the sense that both are violent and shocking. It is, however, also its own tale with its own style and features. It's funny, bureaucratic, and brief. Description in the story is strong and evocative. Eating the threatening person sounds like something a bear might do. This is a dark but interesting story. Thank you for sharing it. Would you please review one of the poems in my portfolio?
Impressive. If you had not explained that they were all one-syllable words, I would not have noticed. The story contains vivid and gripping imagery. It is exciting and interesting. The hero of the story is honourable and humane. The villain, if he can be called that, is a complex and nuanced character. The story is short enough that it isn't much trouble to read. It's fascinating that it is constructed out of one-syllable words. It seems to give the work a poetic quality. Thank you for sharing this worthwhile story. Would you please review one of the poems in my portfolio?
This short story is well written, with graceful description and sharp dialogue. The action scenes are exciting. I like the use in this story of what seems like supernatural occurrences, such as the slicing of a star and the use of "ki*." I imagine that you are Japanese, and it's interesting to think of this story as strongly influenced by Japanese culture. I am a Canadian, and such things are exotic to me. This story is also a love story, featuring a brave and romantic young man who is willing to do anything for his beautiful beloved. It is easy to like and sympathize with characters like that. This story was interesting and pleasant to read. Thank you for sharing it. Would you please review one of the poems on my portfolio?
This is a well written and fascinating story. As a fellow writer in the superhero genre, this short story provided rare and valuable experience for me. But perhaps the most interesting parts were the story's treatments of important elements of life in our society, such as sexuality, youth, and university. To be honest, the story's portrayal of these things differed from my own experiences with them, but different people can have different experiences and a story can be about whatever the writer wants. There were kind of a lot of typos in the story, but that doesn't really bother me. I wonder if you ever followed this story up with more about this protagonist, including more about the nature of his mysterious powers. I wouldn't mind learning more about the Defenders of the Right either. Overall, this was a strong and intriguing short story. Thank you for sharing it. Would you please review one of the poems on my portfolio?
I'm a fan of the Dark Tower series, and your writing style reminds me of Stephen King's in that series. The writing style in your story is very strong and depicts scenes vividly. I read a lot of the Dark Tower books but not the first one, the Gunslinger, so I don't know for sure how close this is to the story of the Dark Tower. But the fantasy world seems to be quite similar, in an interesting way. It was nice to go to a place like Stephen King's Dark Tower fantasy world. I wonder what the job Randy Flagg had in mind was. It didn't sound good. It seems like an amazing situation to be crippled and to get your legs back, however briefly, and those intense feelings were well conveyed. And then the potential for that is destroyed by a silly accident. That's life for you. Thank you for sharing this great story. Please review one of the poems on my portfolio if you get a chance.
This story is first and last a tale of morality, which is a worthy subject for a story. Even though some elements of this story seem familiar to me, I was not able to predict what would happen, so the story was pretty well told. I like the exotic, Middle Eastern location of this story. The story was very well written and easy and pleasant to get through. I love fantasy stories and, with the Ifrit, your story included some fantasy. I like the way this story was not too long and didn't take a long time to finish. Overall, I found this story interesting and strong. Thank you for sharing it. Would you please review one of my poems from my portfolio?
Good rhyming in this poem. My interpretation is that the individual under the tree is the child in the poem, perhaps even the child who is hearing the children's poem. I think children would find this idea interesting. It's simple and a child should be able to understand most of it, but it is also graceful. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Great rhyming in this poem. Your words capture a lot of the beauty and wonder of the stars. Good use of metaphors such as stars winking. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Your scene is well described, with pleasant choices of words and sentences. I love the picture, where did you get it from? This is a cheerful and fantastical poem. Thank you for sharing it.
I like the way this poem mixes the way things are sensed, for example by describing sounds as something seen, or describing light as heard. It has an interesting effect. Thank you for your excellent poem.
This poem is cool and clever. It brings to mind a combination of magical and city images in a way that is very unusual. It reminds me of Neil Gaiman. The writing style is graceful and pleasant. Thank you for sharing this poem.
I have never heard of Kacheeks, Shoryus, or Chias, but they are imaginative. The Fairie Xweetok is a hero. I guess you switched tenses from the present to the past tense in the second-to-last verse. Maybe you should just keep that at one tense. Your poem was evocative and pleasantly written. Thank you.
Your poem is imaginative and articulate. I guess many people, including myself, and perhaps you, long for a more magical reality, and this poem expresses that. Thank you.
Good to see another classical fantasy poet out there (I am one). I enjoyed your poem. The lines have an interesting tendency to almost rhyme but not quite, which I find pleasant and interesting. I guess there are a few minor technical issues, like using the word "than" in "And than if I shall" instead of the word "then," which seems like the correct word. But I thought it was a very good poem overall.
An abba quatrain poem huh? Very interesting. I guess it is a scary poem. The ending reminds me of a serial killer, although it seems like it's more of a supernatural shadow monster kind of thing. Am I right?
Your poem is pretty. I like the rhyming, which I think is a great literary device which is unfortunately out of fashion. What made you choose the phoenix as the object of the poem?
Thank you for your excellent poem.
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