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Review by MW1000
Rated: E | (3.0)
The story itself has a good plot and there is something to write about, if you know what I mean.
The introduction itself wasn't very impressing. You could have started with describing Tom and Christina. The story has lack of dialouge and very few details. Also you have a basic spelling mistakes: 'Several months had PAST but he couldn't find a way to tell her how he felt about her.' i think that must have been 'passed'

You might think I am rude at criticizing like this. I have been criticized too, here on Writing.com. I think being shown where you have went wrong helps you learn from your own mistakes.
If I were you, I would revise the story and see how I would make it sound better.
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Review by MW1000
Rated: E | (5.0)
Today I went to the cup. It stank in there like a mouse. Then I cutthe machine. It felt really good to write the machine so i did it again. I was quickly. So i yell all the way home. When i got to my hat. I hit my table. I ate myself. So i decided to go and run around outside until the cabbage was ready. The End

What a day!!!!!
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Review by MW1000
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi! I congratulate you for writing such an amazing story. I wish you success when you publish your book! I wouldn't mind reading it again!
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Review by MW1000
Rated: E | (5.0)
"One of the most infamous pirate crews is that of smellybeard The Terrible."
My faveorite part of the story! The result of the madlib was extremlet hilarious and I enjoyed both filling in the blanks and reading the end result!
Keep Writing!
rainbow 85
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Review by MW1000
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good story! Pity the main character of the story, in my case Jack, finished up killed in that cave!
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Review by MW1000
Rated: E | (5.0)
AMAZING!!! This was awsome - the best part of a madlib is when you enter in random words not knowing whaat might come up. The result is always satisfying!!!!!
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Review by MW1000
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good work! My madlib was really funny! Thanks for taking the time to write it!
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Review by MW1000
Rated: E | (5.0)
Madlibs are a good way to create a hilarious piece of writing! Good work and keep writing!
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Review by MW1000
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very sad poem conserning the death of your sister. I must congratulate you on the way you used your words and I can say I feel inspired. Keep writing!!!!
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