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Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is a profound exploration of faith, compassion, and the human condition. It is rich in its use of language and imagery, and it presents a thoughtful reflection on the role of kindness and divine judgment in our lives.

The poem opens with a metaphorical journey, "A stroll along a prodigious length," which could be interpreted as the journey of life or a spiritual journey. The "encounter of surveilled consequence" suggests a moment of significant impact, perhaps a moment of divine intervention or a personal epiphany.

The poem then moves to a depiction of an act of kindness, "An individual lends / Prescriptive aid to the less fortunate / At a meaningful time." This act is presented as a protective force, a beacon of hope, and a guide, which aligns with many religious teachings about the importance of charity and compassion.

The poem's religious themes become more explicit in the second half, with references to "the Lord’s mercy," "His judgment," and "the Almighty’s eternal virtue." These lines suggest a deep reverence for divine authority and a belief in the transformative power of faith.

The final lines of the poem, "A soul constructed from awestruck diligence, / Evoking the sweetest privilege, / And voicing the inherent, / Worthwhile beauty of the Lord," beautifully encapsulate the speaker's awe and devotion. The phrase "awestruck diligence" is particularly striking, suggesting a sense of wonder combined with a commitment to spiritual practice.

The poem's language is dense and richly textured, which can make it somewhat challenging to parse. However, this complexity also adds depth to the poem, inviting readers to engage with it on multiple levels and to find their own interpretations.

Overall, this poem is a powerful meditation on faith, compassion, and the divine. It is a testament to the power of language to explore complex spiritual and ethical themes.


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Review by WriterRick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is an engaging and well-written story that draws the reader into a richly detailed world. The narrative is filled with vivid descriptions that paint a clear picture of the setting and characters, making it easy for the reader to immerse themselves in the story. The protagonist, Kael, is a compelling character with a complex internal struggle that adds depth to the narrative.

The pacing of the story is well-balanced, with a good mix of action, dialogue, and introspection. The author does a great job of building tension and suspense, particularly in the scenes where Kael is trying to control his powers. The relationship between Kael and Jace is also well-developed, adding an emotional layer to the story.

The author's use of language is impressive, with a rich vocabulary and varied sentence structures that make the narrative engaging and enjoyable to read. The descriptions are evocative and detailed, bringing the world of Nova Zora and the Senke Era to life.

The story ends on a tragic note, with the death of Jace, which adds a sense of urgency and stakes to Kael's quest to control his powers. This event is likely to have a significant impact on Kael's character development and the direction of the story moving forward.

One area that could be improved is the clarity of the action scenes. At times, it's a bit difficult to follow what's happening, particularly in the final scene where Kael is fighting the shadowy entity. Providing more specific details about the action and the characters' movements could help make these scenes clearer and more engaging.

Overall, this is a captivating story with a compelling protagonist, a richly detailed world, and a well-paced narrative. It leaves the reader eager to find out what happens next in Kael's journey.
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Review of Journal/Blog  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your blog entries are a delightful read, offering a glimpse into your daily life, thoughts, and experiences. The conversational tone and personal anecdotes make it feel like a friendly chat over a cup of coffee. Here's a brief review of the elements that stand out:

Authenticity: Your posts are genuine and relatable, which makes them engaging. You share your personal experiences, thoughts, and feelings, which helps to establish a connection with the reader.

Variety of Topics: You cover a wide range of topics, from health and fitness to hobbies like photography and ham radio. This diversity keeps the content fresh and interesting.

Narrative Flow: Your posts have a good narrative flow, making them easy to read. You transition smoothly from one topic to another, which maintains reader interest.

Humor: Your writing has a light-hearted and humorous undertone, which makes it enjoyable to read. For instance, your comment about putting "keys to screen" instead of "pen to paper" is a fun nod to the digital age.

Reflection: Your posts often include reflections on your experiences, which adds depth to your writing. It shows that you're not just recounting events, but also thinking about what they mean.

A few suggestions for improvement:

Structure: While your conversational style is engaging, adding more structure to your posts could make them even more readable. Consider using subheadings or bullet points to break up longer posts.

Engagement: To encourage reader interaction, consider ending your posts with a question or a call to action. This could be as simple as asking readers to share their own experiences or thoughts on the topic you've discussed.

Proofreading: While your writing is generally clear and easy to understand, there are a few minor typos and grammatical errors. Proofreading more carefully or using a tool like Grammarly could help catch these.

Overall, your blog is a pleasure to read. Keep up the good work!


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Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Strength for Megan" is an emotionally-charged, poignant narrative that delves into themes of hope, faith, suffering, and redemption. From the start, the story is exceptionally descriptive and unflinchingly honest in its portrayal of Megan's struggle with cancer, as it creates a heartrending image of her pain and suffering. The writing is vivid and detailed, evoking a sense of empathy and sadness in the reader, yet simultaneously holding onto an undercurrent of quiet resilience.

The introduction of the mysterious card by Penny Boatwright serves as a catalyst, sparking a change in Megan and infusing the narrative with a new hope. The psalm quoted has a significant impact on Megan, serving as a beacon of spiritual solace and a symbol of faith in her seemingly endless sea of pain. This element of the narrative is handled deftly, and the reader can palpably sense Megan's emotional transformation as she latches onto the card's message.

Throughout the story, the character development of Megan is beautifully rendered. We get a clear sense of her frailty and her pain, but also her determination and strength. The shift in her physical and emotional state after receiving the card is subtle yet noticeable, which adds to the story's emotional depth.

The story concludes in a poignant and thought-provoking manner. Megan's passing is portrayed as peaceful and spiritual, hinting at the story's theme of faith and redemption. The symbolism of the penny, which initially seems random, is revealed as representing new beginnings and a new chapter, thus tying back to the story's religious undertones and Megan's spiritual journey.

"Strength for Megan" is a touching narrative that leaves a profound impact, illuminating the power of faith and hope in the face of adversity. The evocative descriptions and emotional depth make this a memorable piece. The story, though deeply moving, never succumbs to the maudlin or melodramatic. Instead, it retains a sense of dignity and grace throughout, much like its protagonist, Megan. It's a narrative that gently encourages its readers to appreciate the strength within themselves, even when faced with insurmountable odds.


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Review of Everyday LOve  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Everyday I Live and Try" is a heartwarming exploration of deep affection and gratitude. The author deftly expresses raw, emotive sentiments with a compelling simplicity that pulls at the heartstrings, bringing a sense of unity and interconnectedness to the forefront of the reader's consciousness.

The repeated use of "I thank the stars" illustrates a profound appreciation for the relationship that unfolds in the poem, with the celestial metaphor imbuing the piece with a sense of grandeur and inevitability. This adds a mystical, almost ethereal element to the love being described, suggesting it's a force as significant and constant as the stars themselves.

The language used throughout the poem is unpretentious and heartfelt, allowing the reader to be swept up in the author's emotional current. The phrase "All I have is you" is particularly striking in its directness and honesty. It succinctly encapsulates the overwhelming sense of connection the author feels toward the object of their affection, acting as a potent emotional climax to the work.

However, the poem might benefit from some elaboration or varied imagery to further flesh out its themes and emotional landscape. While the raw and direct language does lend a certain power to the poem, the exploration of these emotions could be expanded. A bit more descriptive or metaphorical language could add an additional layer of richness and complexity to the poem.

In conclusion, "Everyday I Live and Try" is an intimate, sentimental piece that beautifully communicates a sense of profound gratitude and love. It's a passionate testament to a deep, unwavering connection that will resonate with many readers.


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Review of How To Make Gold  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
n the whimsical poem "Young Sam is a clever inventor," we are introduced to a wizard named Sam, who possesses an exceptional talent for creating anything his heart desires. The verse skillfully highlights his inventiveness, the vast collection of ideas he constantly generates, and his agile hands that are always at work. Sam's ingenuity is portrayed as boundless, and his brain, an incessant generator of concepts, is said to be capable of making one dizzy.

The plot takes an intriguing turn when Sam stumbles upon a secret - the ability to create gold. The poem cleverly hints at alchemical pursuits, a quest that has fascinated many throughout history. However, Sam faces a moral dilemma - whether to share this newfound ability with the world or keep it to himself.

Seeking counsel, Sam turns to his mother, who serves as a wise and guiding figure. Her advice is simple but profound - to share his discovery with everyone because hoarding wealth can lead to spiritual emptiness. Sam's mother instills in him the value of generosity and the importance of contributing to the welfare of others.

As time passes, Sam achieves immense prosperity, thanks to his ingenuity and the wise guidance of his mother. He remembers her words and becomes a model of philanthropy, generously sharing his wealth with others. This positive character development shows the reader the transformation of Young Sam from a gifted inventor into a compassionate and altruistic individual.

The poem's language and rhythm are enjoyable, making it a delightful read. The rhyming scheme adds to the whimsical feel of the narrative. It explores themes of creativity, moral choices, and the importance of kindness and generosity.

However, the poem's brevity leaves some areas underdeveloped. For instance, more details about Sam's inventive creations, his struggles, or his encounters with others attempting to obtain the secret of turning lead into gold could have enriched the story.

In conclusion, "Young Sam is a clever inventor" is an endearing poem that captures the essence of creativity and benevolence. The tale of Young Sam's inventive prowess and his ultimate act of sharing his wealth like beans leaves the reader with a heartwarming message about the value of selflessness and the pursuit of meaningful contributions to society. It's a delightful piece of poetry that imparts a valuable life lesson in a playful and imaginative manner.


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Review of Not sure  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (4.0)
"Help Me to Forget You" is a heartfelt and emotionally charged poem that delves into the struggles of moving on from a past love. The author skillfully conveys a sense of heartbreak and vulnerability throughout the verses.

The poem revolves around the theme of memories, dreams, and the constant battle to let go. The repetition of the line "Help me to forget you" emphasizes the poet's desperation to escape the grip of their memories and emotions. The use of contrasting phrases such as "Lovely hugs and kisses" versus "injured and broken" showcases the conflicted feelings the poet experiences when reminiscing about the past relationship.

The poet employs vivid imagery to illustrate the internal struggle: "Dreams and memorize / Threaten me to remember you." This imagery effectively captures the haunting nature of lingering memories and their impact on the poet's attempts to move forward.

The poem also touches on the difficulty of forgiveness, highlighting the pain caused by the former partner's actions. The line "How can I forgive you" portrays the inner turmoil of dealing with the hurt caused by the relationship's end.

The use of repetition and strong emotions throughout the poem creates a sense of urgency, pulling the reader into the poet's emotional journey. The plea for distance with "Don't let me near you" reflects the need for space and detachment in the process of healing.

However, the poem might benefit from further exploration of the poet's personal growth and resilience. Providing glimpses of hope or realization amidst the pain could offer a more balanced perspective on the healing process.

In conclusion, "Help Me to Forget You" is a poignant portrayal of heartbreak and the struggle to let go of a past love. The poet's raw emotions and evocative imagery make this a relatable and moving piece for anyone who has experienced the pain of a lost relationship.


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Review of Why can't i sleep  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Why Can't I Sleep" presents a poignant exploration of insomnia. The author manages to capture the despairing cycle of sleeplessness and the subsequent emotional toll it takes on an individual in a beautifully raw and expressive manner.

The writer excels at vividly portraying the protagonist's turmoil. The repetition of the phrase "But when I'm awake," illustrates the relentless, unending cycle of sleeplessness, and the desperation felt by the protagonist. This powerful use of repetition is a testament to the author's mastery of language and emotion.

The imagery used is also highly effective. The verse "My mind takes me places / That I tried to hide in different spaces" eloquently symbolizes the intrusive thoughts that often accompany insomnia, providing a poignant look at the mental struggle experienced by the protagonist.

In addition, the metaphor of "dark circles" is a striking visual emblem of the physical toll of sleep deprivation. It not only underscores the protagonist's despair but also provides the reader with a tangible indicator of the protagonist's suffering.

The poem's rhythm and flow are consistent, making it easy to read and creating an enveloping mood that carries the reader along. The last two lines, "But maybe if I count sheep / I can find the feeling in my sleep," stand out as a hopeful, albeit melancholic, conclusion, leaving the reader with a sense of longing and an understanding of the protagonist's desperate yearning for sleep.

On a slight note of critique, the poem might benefit from some additional structural experimentation to reflect the chaotic and fragmented nature of the protagonist's sleep-deprived mind.

In summary, "Why Can't I Sleep" is a powerful and evocative poem that deeply explores the mental and physical toll of insomnia. Its raw emotionality and striking imagery make it an emotionally resonant and memorable piece. The author's understanding of the human struggle and their ability to encapsulate it into words is commendable. It's a poem that will undoubtedly resonate with many readers.


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Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Review Title: "Factual Inaccuracies and Bias Mar Virginian-Pilot's Editorial on Gun Rights"

In the most recent editorial piece from the Virginian-Pilot's editorial board, the handling of the contentious issue of gun rights is notably flawed. It's concerning to witness such a bias in their narrative, given the readership that they reach. A discerning eye will immediately perceive that the viewpoint presented is neither nuanced nor factually accurate, which results in an unfairly skewed perspective.

The editorial seems to blatantly disregard the peaceful and legal demonstration of the VCDL members at City Hall in Norfolk. Contrary to the board's insinuation that these members were a cause of disruption, they were exercising their right to free speech in a non-threatening manner. This was a lawful assembly, fully abiding by the law of the land, not an intimidating display of weapons. This mischaracterization not only misleads readers, but also unnecessarily stokes fear.

The editorial board's suggestion that the VCDL has no right to come from Northern Virginia to Norfolk undermines the understanding of civil rights movements. Geography should not be a barrier to expressing views on statewide issues or participating in peaceful demonstrations, especially when said issues impact citizens across the state. The double standard the board applies here, compared to their stance on other protests involving "outsiders", is concerning and points to a clear bias.

A particularly alarming claim in the editorial is the need for rights to be controlled, more specifically, the gun rights of private citizens. It's vital to remember that rights are not something to be constrained based on the whims of officials. The board's insistence that officials should have the power to decide how and when a right is exercised is a misguided interpretation of the purpose of rights and law enforcement's role in society.

The most significant oversight of the board, however, lies in their failure to address the racial dimension of this issue. The harassment of a legally armed black man amidst a crowd of legally armed white people is the kind of racial profiling that deserves scrutiny. This glaring omission in the board's narrative weakens their credibility and exposes a serious lack of comprehensive understanding of the societal dynamics at play.

The clear bias present in the editorial is a major disappointment from the Virginian-Pilot Editorial Board. Rather than facilitating a balanced discussion on gun rights, the board has let their personal prejudices cloud their judgment. As readers, we deserve better - a more insightful, unbiased, and factual approach to addressing these complex issues.


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Review of April Fool  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
"April Fool" is a playful, engaging short narrative that utilizes the comedic potential of April Fool's Day to evolve into a surprising romantic confession. The protagonist's apprehension about the pranks typically associated with the holiday and their irritation with the constant antics at the workplace are humorously conveyed, making it relatable for those who have had similar experiences.

The story is smartly structured, building anticipation about the pranks Frank, the office joker, could spring on the protagonist. However, the narrative quickly turns into a surprising and heartwarming twist when Frank uses this playful occasion to reveal his romantic feelings, ending the prank war on a warm, tender note.

Characterization is subtle yet impactful. Frank's character, initially presented as a relentless prankster, is revealed to be much more, effectively introducing depth and humanizing him through his unexpected gesture. The protagonist, initially a reluctant participant in the pranks, also grows over the course of the narrative, providing a satisfying character arc.

One possible area of improvement could be the addition of more descriptive language or dialogue to further immerse readers in the characters' world and their feelings. This could help to build more of an emotional connection with the characters and their situation.

In conclusion, "April Fool" is an amusing and sweet story about pranks, surprises, and love found in the unlikeliest of circumstances. Its light-heartedness and charming twist make for a delightful read, suitable for a quick break or a cozy evening. The unexpected turn of events reminds readers that sometimes, things may not be as they initially seem, and humor can be an excellent gateway to more profound connections.
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Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
The poet captures the spirit of a tranquil fishing day by a beautiful lake with exquisite, evocative imagery and details that transport readers to the scene. The use of phrases such as "plumbing the depths" and "taste-tempting fish" elevate the simple act of fishing into something profound and meaningful.

The narrator's admiration for the uncle is evident, painting him as a dedicated and patient fisherman who is ever-hopeful despite the often "unresponsive" fish. The author shows a keen understanding of the art of fishing, highlighting that it's not just about the catch, but also the serene connection with nature and the patience it entails.

The poem also depicts the surrounding atmosphere in vivid details: the 'lively music', 'windy, clear day', and the gnats and mosquitoes 'swirling about the pier'. The inclusion of other people enjoying the lake - the boaters and the excited children with their parents - provides a rich tapestry of lake life that is heartwarming to read.

The poem speaks to the communal spirit and the shared anticipation of the catch, while also pointing out the universal human nature of optimism - always saying, "Maybe next time!", despite repeated disappointments.

In terms of rhythm and structure, the poem flows smoothly with an easy-to-follow, conversational tone. The poet's language is straightforward yet impactful, without overly complex metaphors or dense symbolism. The line lengths vary, but this gives the poem a natural, authentic feel. The absence of a rigid structure allows the narrative to unfold organically, as if the reader is present in the unfolding scenario.

In conclusion, "A Day by the Lake" successfully encapsulates a quintessential fishing day, interweaving elements of nature, human anticipation, disappointment, and enduring optimism. It's a poem that doesn't merely tell, but shows - it invites the reader into the scene, allowing them to taste the experience in all its highs and lows. The poetic voice is contemplative and peaceful, a perfect companion for the lakeside setting the poem paints. It’s a poem that leaves the reader with a gentle sigh, a sense of shared disappointment, but also the quiet satisfaction of a day well spent.


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Review by WriterRick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Your writing beautifully personifies the experience of drinking coffee by using vivid and passionate language. The imagery and metaphors you employ compare the act of consuming coffee to an intimate encounter with a loved one. The lines "your dark espresso skin against mine" and "your body is the cup I wrap my hands around" cleverly blur the lines between the physical sensation of coffee and the sensation of touch.

The comparison of the coffee aroma to chicory, a flavorful herb, adds a unique and exotic dimension to the description. Equating the person in the poem to a king and their tongue to caffeine further deepens the metaphorical connection between coffee and intimacy. The idea of refilling the cup again and again represents a desire for repeated experiences and moments of pleasure, much like the wish to be with a loved one continuously.

Overall, the poem uses sensuous language to draw a captivating parallel between the narrator's love for coffee and their affection for someone special in their life. The blending of emotions and the ritual of coffee drinking create a striking and heartfelt portrayal of a coffee addiction. Well done!


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Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (4.0)
In an era where pandemic-related literature saturates the arts, this piece manages to stand out with its evocative language and stirring sentiments. It delves into the grim yet hopeful realities of our times, capturing both the anguish of suffering and the heroic endeavors of healthcare professionals.

The language used in "A Deviance Masks the Volatility" is simultaneously nuanced and direct. There's an intriguing element of ambiguity to the title, hinting at the unpredictable nature of the pandemic and the societal shift it has induced.

The poem opens with a powerful phrase, "The deathly turmoil / Invades our pleasing shores", which invokes a striking image of an unseen enemy infiltrating peaceful territories. This metaphor effectively encapsulates the global shock and sense of violation experienced at the onset of the pandemic.

Moving forward, the poet's depiction of the relentless efforts by physicians and nurses, who offer "immediate help / To suffering communities / All over the world," adds a much-needed counterbalance to the initially somber tone. This shift in the narrative invites the reader to honor and appreciate the often overlooked sacrifices of healthcare workers, and it does so without resorting to clichés.

The phrase "A wondrous blessing / For these stubborn individuals" adds a layer of complexity, acknowledging the tenacity of the healthcare community. Their perseverance and stubborn defiance in the face of an overwhelming adversary are effectively highlighted. However, a note of ambiguity here leaves readers to interpret who these "stubborn individuals" might be: healthcare workers, patients, or perhaps even humanity as a whole?

"Promising the most authoritative shifts / For their patients" implies not just the tireless pursuit of healing for individual patients, but also the massive transformations that the healthcare industry has undergone.

Finally, the poem ends on a note of optimism, with the medical community "arriving at inspiring solutions / To the baleful, / Horrible pandemic." This suggests the hopeful light at the end of a dark tunnel and the potential for triumph over the devastating crisis.

In terms of criticism, the poem could perhaps delve deeper into the individual experiences of patients and healthcare workers for a more personal touch. This would further humanize the narrative and increase its emotional impact.

Overall, "A Deviance Masks the Volatility" is a commendable exploration of our tumultuous times. It deftly combines the tangible reality of the pandemic with the emotional undercurrents of those battling it, thereby providing a moving and memorable read.


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Review of A Mother's Love  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
This heartfelt poem beautifully captures the essence of a mother's love and the lasting impact a son's thoughtful gesture can have. The poet vividly illustrates the relationship between a mother and her child, highlighting the significance of a simple act of kindness.

The opening lines set the tone by emphasizing the lasting impression a baby boy leaves on his mother from the first moment she sees him. The poem then transitions to the present, where the son goes out of his way to do something beautiful and right, symbolizing his love and gratitude for his mother.

The imagery of the spring sun and blue skies creates a serene backdrop for the son's gesture of bringing flowers to his mother. The choice of dandelions and lilacs, as well as the mix of lavender and yellow in an antique blued mason jar, exhibits the care and thoughtfulness the son puts into the gift. The image of finding the jar without a mar and cleaning it in the brook out back adds an endearing touch, portraying the simplicity and sincerity of the gesture.

The poet eloquently expresses how the mother's praise of the flower bouquet is a significant moment for the son, one that he fondly remembers. It becomes a source of pride for him, reflecting the profound impact of a mother's appreciation and encouragement.

The repetition of the line "A mother's love is made this way" at the end of each stanza serves as a powerful refrain, emphasizing the poem's central theme and reinforcing the idea that a mother's love is shaped and nurtured through meaningful actions and expressions of love.

Overall, "A Mother's Love" is a touching and relatable poem that captures the essence of the deep bond between a mother and her child. It reminds readers of the power of simple gestures and the lasting impact they can have on the ones we hold dear. The poem's structure and language are well-crafted, creating an emotional resonance that lingers with the reader.


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Review of Change  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Change" is a captivating story that follows Bo, a wolf who played a pivotal role in altering the fate of his pack. The narrative is centered around the challenges faced by the wolves as human encroachment threatened their traditional valley home. Bo's transformation from a passive observer to a proactive leader marks the turning point in their struggle for survival.

The story is well-paced and emotionally engaging. The author effectively weaves elements of fear, curiosity, and determination, drawing readers into Bo's world. The description of the mountains as dangerous and full of predators builds suspense, making the readers wonder what lies beyond and whether the wolves will find sanctuary there.

The characterization is well-developed, especially with Bo. His evolution from a young wolf hearing elders' tales to a mature, responsible leader is portrayed with authenticity. The emotional bond between Bo and his mate, Cara, adds depth to the narrative, making the readers care about their family's well-being.

The underlying theme of adapting to change and embracing the unknown is beautifully explored. The elders' resistance to change and Bo's eventual success in persuading them to move reflect the struggle of individuals and societies facing transformation. The story subtly suggests that change can lead to positive outcomes, despite the initial fears and doubts.

The portrayal of humans as a source of danger creates an intriguing contrast. The discovery of their ability to kill using sticks adds a layer of complexity to the story. This newfound knowledge acts as a catalyst for the wolves to seek a safer haven in the mountains.

The vivid imagery of the rocky and wild landscape paints a picturesque backdrop, immersing readers in the wolves' environment. The gentle portrayal of bears as not being a threat to wolves humanizes these creatures often depicted as fierce adversaries.

However, the story could benefit from a deeper exploration of the human-wolf conflict. Exploring the humans' perspective and motivations could add more complexity and depth to the narrative, making it even more thought-provoking.

In conclusion, "Change" is a captivating tale of resilience, adaptation, and the courage to embrace the unknown. Bo's journey from being a witness to change to becoming a catalyst for it is inspiring. The story successfully delivers its message while evoking empathy for the characters and painting a rich and vibrant world for readers to explore.


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Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lottery enthusiasts are shifting their focus to the swelling Super Millions jackpot following the sale of a Powerball ticket worth over $1 billion. A look at how this drawing measures up to other jackpots and why these winnings have skyrocketed gives us a glimpse into the thrilling world of lottery games.

HOW DOES THIS LATEST SUPER MILLIONS JACKPOT STACK UP?

The current jackpot for the Super Millions drawing has escalated to an estimated $720 million, securing its place as the fifth highest in the game's history. It is yet to make it into the top ten highest lottery jackpots in U.S. history.

If a player manages to choose all five numbers plus the gold Super Ball, they can opt for annual increments paid over 29 years or a lump sum of $369.6 million before taxes. The last time a Super Millions player bagged the top prize was on April 18th. The jackpot will continue to grow until there's a winner.

POWERBALL WINNING TICKET

Prior to this week, most of the focus had been on the Powerball until a winning ticket was drawn. Sold at a quaint neighborhood store in downtown Los Angeles, the ticket is worth an estimated $1.08 billion, making it the sixth largest in U.S. history and the third largest in the history of the game. The winning numbers for Wednesday evening's drawing were white balls 7, 10, 11, 13, 24 and red Powerball 24.

WHY ARE LOTTERY JACKPOTS SO HUGE NOWADAYS?

It's not an accident - it's by design. The immense jackpots are due to math and increasingly difficult odds. In 2015, Powerball extended the odds of winning from 1 in 175.2 million to 1 in 292.2 million. Super Millions followed suit two years later by increasing the odds of winning the top prize from 1 in 258.9 million to 1 in 302.6 million. The largest lottery jackpots in the U.S. have occurred since these changes were implemented.

WHAT ARE THE LARGEST JACKPOTS EVER WON IN AMERICA?

The largest jackpot ever - an astounding $2.04 billion - was a Powerball prize won on November 8, 2022, with the winning ticket sold in California. The second largest was also a Powerball prize of $1.586 billion on January 13, 2016, which was split between three winning tickets sold in California, Florida, and Tennessee. The third, fourth, and fifth largest were all Super Millions prizes, with single winners in South Carolina, Maine, and Illinois.

WHERE CAN SUPER MILLIONS BE PLAYED?

Super Millions can be played in 45 states, as well as Washington, D.C., and the U.S. Virgin Islands.

In summary, the swelling Super Millions jackpot is garnering attention from lottery enthusiasts following the sale of a billion-dollar Powerball ticket. The thrill of the game continues as more participants throw their hats in the ring, hopeful for a slice of the enormous prize pool.


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Review of Clink  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
The rhythmic quality of "Clink" is instantly appealing, forming a compelling pattern that structures the poem, unifying its different elements. The repeated use of 'Clink' operates as a refrain, lending a sense of continuity and harmony to the poem. This motif is not just a sound, but a symbol; it suggests the fragility of glass or perhaps even the hollow echo of loneliness or despair.

"Clink and clink / Clink and drink / Clink and think" - these lines use the sounds to express a process or progression. It is interesting how the poet seems to invite the readers into a shared ritual, asking them to clink, drink, and then move into a contemplative phase. The author effectively uses this repetition to guide us through a sequence of actions and emotions, creating a shared experience between the text and the reader.

The lines "Clink this heart / Clink and listen / Clink, it is fragile" give the poem its emotional depth, subtly shifting the meaning of 'Clink' from an auditory symbol to a metaphor for vulnerability. The heart, generally viewed as the emblem of emotions, is portrayed as fragile – an image that most readers can empathize with.

The stanza "Clink and laugh / Clink, O merciless / Clink the hopeless" moves the narrative into a darker realm, weaving together themes of cruelty and despair with the ongoing rhythm of 'clink'. There's an interesting ambiguity here, it's not clear whether the merciless one is the speaker or another character.

"Clink and shake / Clink and take / The heart, and core" - the poem ends on a somber note, drawing us back to the original metaphor of the heart. The "shake" and "take" may suggest an upheaval or a loss, while "The heart, and core" makes a powerful statement about the emotional crux of the piece.

The strength of "Clink" lies in its use of a single, simple word to create a varied landscape of sound, emotion, and meaning. However, the repeated use of the same structure might be a point of critique as some may find it monotonous. It would have been interesting to see the poet breaking the pattern, or introducing a new element to surprise the reader.

Overall, "Clink" is a strikingly rhythmic and emotionally resonant poem that uses its key motif to great effect, creating a rich tapestry of sound and sentiment. This piece is an exemplary demonstration of how poetry can evoke complex emotions through minimalist language and thoughtful repetition.


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Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is a delightful exploration of the enchantment found in ordinary natural phenomena. The playful juxtaposition of the familiar and the fantastical makes it a joy to read. It's a mix of fantasy and realism, infused with a sense of mystery and wonder.

The first two lines set up a beautiful contrast. "There is magic hidden in moonbeams. Not like dancing pixie dust in sunlight," conveys the subtlety of nighttime magic, unlike the flamboyant, visible magic of the day. The metaphors used here—dancing pixie dust and hidden magic—are both powerful and delicate, creating vivid images in the reader's mind.

The reference to the Sandman, the folklore character known for bringing dreams, is well-incorporated, connecting the poem's moonlit magic to the world of sleep and dreams. The personification of "Sand" and "Jack Frost" effectively creates a magical world within the poem, one that resonates with age-old myths and stories.

The rhythm and meter of the poem are consistent, contributing to a soothing, lullaby-like quality. It's easy to read aloud and has a soft, lyrical quality to it, which fits the theme well.

The final couplet "Remember when the sun's light is lost, hidden in moonbeams, magic is there." leaves the reader with a sense of wonder and appreciation for the hidden magic in our world, the unobservable beauty that we might miss if we don't take a moment to look.

One possible suggestion for improvement would be to clarify the connection between the Sandman and his "merry band". The phrase could be expanded upon to give the reader a better understanding of who these characters are and how they contribute to the nighttime magic.

Overall, the poem successfully paints a picture of a magical nighttime world, encouraging readers to take a closer look at the beauty in the ordinary. It is rich with imagery and blends folklore with reality in an engaging and enchanting manner. The poem's rhythm and rhyme scheme make it soothing to read, and it leaves a lasting impression of mystery and wonder.


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Review of Rob's Rescue  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Rescue and Redemption: A Story of Hope" is a heartwarming, relatable tale that tells the story of a mother and son who rescue a fallen baby bird, nurse it back to health, and eventually release it back into the wild. The prose is simple, making the story accessible for readers of all ages, and the narrative is pleasantly linear, following the journey of the bird they name Rob from his fall to his return to the skies.

The story's strengths lie in its metaphoric exploration of the human condition through the struggles and triumph of a baby bird. The depiction of the bird's growth parallels the young boy's spiritual growth and understanding of compassion, life's hardships, and divine love. The ending beautifully illustrates this parallelism, where the boy’s realization forms a spiritual allegory: humans, like the rescued bird, may fall, but they are never forgotten and always have a chance for redemption and second chances.

The text cleverly uses the bible verse from Matthew 10:29-31, tying the story back to the biblical concept of God's care for even the smallest creatures, emphasizing the inherent value of all beings. This biblical integration adds depth to the story, making it appealing to readers who appreciate faith-based narratives.

While the dialogue is somewhat simplistic and occasionally borders on didactic, it serves its purpose within the story by delivering a clear message about God's love and care. The characters, though not deeply fleshed out, are warm and kind, making them likable protagonists for this short narrative.

In terms of improvement, the story could potentially delve deeper into the characters' emotions and reactions to make them more multidimensional and engaging. Additionally, some descriptive language could be used to make the setting and the characters more vivid, adding another layer to the tale.

Overall, "Rescue and Redemption: A Story of Hope" is a sweet, comforting read that delivers a poignant message about faith, compassion, resilience, and the love that binds all creatures, big or small. This story would be particularly appealing to those who enjoy faith-based narratives, tales of animal rescue, or stories that touch on life's fundamental truths in a simple yet profound way.


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Review of Poor Jimmy  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (4.0)
"Poor Jimmy" is an engaging short story that masterfully employs the concept of magical realism. The narrative centers around Jimmy, his little sister Stella, and Bibo, an unseen entity that only Stella can interact with. The main plot revolves around a chaotic event at their home and the subsequent blame game that follows, leading to a series of heartwarming and thought-provoking incidents.

The characterization in the story is impressive. Jimmy is the typical older sibling, often blamed for Stella's mischief. The reader can identify with his frustration, making him a relatable character. Stella, on the other hand, is a classic representation of innocent and imaginative childhood. Bibo, the invisible character, is cleverly portrayed and offers an element of fantasy that sparks the reader's curiosity.

The story’s primary themes revolve around childhood innocence, imagination, and the dynamics of sibling relationships. The author does an excellent job of highlighting these aspects in a believable and engaging manner. The interaction between Stella and Bibo shows the power and purity of a child's imagination, while Jimmy's transformation subtly indicates the profound impact that these experiences can have on sibling dynamics.

One of the standout features of "Poor Jimmy" is its underlying suspense. The reader is constantly left wondering about Bibo's true identity and the mystery surrounding the rearrangement of the furniture. This intrigue keeps the reader engaged and propels the narrative forward.

However, the story does have some areas of improvement. The resolution seems rushed, leaving several questions unanswered. The relationship between Bibo and the siblings could have been explored in more depth. Additionally, the character of the mother remains mostly unexplored, reducing her to a background figure who serves primarily as an instigator of events.

"Poor Jimmy" offers a unique take on family dynamics and the magic of childhood imagination. It keeps readers on their toes with elements of mystery and fantasy while making them empathize with the characters and their experiences. Despite some minor shortcomings, it is an enchanting tale that strikes a chord with readers of all ages. Overall, it's a promising work, deserving a 3.5 out of 5 stars.


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Review of Ten Again  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Ten Again" takes readers on a profound and imaginative journey that traverses time, space, and the human experience. The poem skillfully weaves themes of transformation, youth, and the intertwining of contrasting concepts like anarchy and divine union. This brief but impactful piece manages to provoke thought and evoke emotions with its evocative language and vivid imagery.

The opening lines immediately captivate with the powerful metaphor of a "black hole invading my brain." This sets the stage for a metamorphic experience as the speaker's body transforms into that of a child's. The use of "molecules of hearing in red" creates a striking visual and auditory image, painting a surreal landscape of the paraterranean—an abstract realm that stretches the boundaries of the reader's imagination.

The concept of becoming young again is a timeless theme that resonates with readers of all ages. It taps into the universal desire to recapture the innocence and boundless potential of childhood. The idea of "open potentials" reinforces this notion, suggesting a newfound sense of opportunity and freedom.

The poem then introduces a fascinating juxtaposition with the "soundtrack of politics." Here, the poet cleverly intertwines the personal transformation with the larger socio-political landscape, subtly suggesting that youth and idealism may hold the keys to a harmonious society. The inclusion of "anarchy, a perfect solution" adds an intriguing layer of complexity, challenging conventional thinking and calling for a reconsideration of societal structures.

The final line, "Young and old meld in Divine union," offers a thought-provoking conclusion. It hints at a harmonious blending of contrasting elements—youth and age, chaos and order—through some form of divine or spiritual connection. This enigmatic statement leaves room for interpretation and reflection, allowing each reader to find their meaning within the poem's framework.

While the brevity of the poem adds to its allure, expanding on certain ideas could enhance the overall impact. Elaborating on the sensations and emotions experienced during the transformation into a child-like state could strengthen the connection between the speaker and the reader, making the experience more immersive.

In conclusion, "Ten Again" is a captivating and thought-provoking piece of poetry that masterfully explores themes of transformation, youth, and the interplay of contrasting concepts. The use of rich imagery and clever phrasing leaves a lasting impression on the reader's mind, encouraging contemplation of life's complexities and the pursuit of balance and harmony.


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Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)

"BIRTHDAY THOUGHTS: a sonnet" is a poignant reflection on the complexity of aging and the contemplation of mortality. It diverges from the typical celebratory approach to birthdays, offering an introspective and raw perspective. The poem also underscores the inherent fear and uneasiness associated with dependency and solitude in the later years of life.

The sonnet adheres strictly to the traditional structure, featuring fourteen lines and an ABAB rhyme scheme throughout the quatrains. This adherence creates a nice rhythm and flow that supports the reflective nature of the poem. The rhymes are not forced but feel natural, allowing the themes to be at the forefront.

The poet presents a contemplative tone with phrases such as "I cannot with any certainty say," which beautifully capture the uncertainty and fear associated with growing older. The language used is simple yet profound, highlighting the poet's ability to tackle existential questions with a lucid, relatable voice.

The theme of old age's challenges is introduced effectively in the early verses and skillfully developed throughout the sonnet. The poet explores the fear of loneliness, dependency, and the potential hardship of long life, especially if marked by disease or pain.

The concluding couplet is particularly striking: "For old men death is too often welcome / When they have lived a life that is fulsome." It illustrates the duality of accepting the end of life after a long and fulfilling journey, while also expressing a desire for release from pain and suffering.

However, the poem, while exploring important themes, does lean toward a somber and somewhat pessimistic view of old age. A little more exploration of the wisdom and possible peace that may accompany old age could have offered a more balanced perspective.

Overall, "BIRTHDAY THOUGHTS: a sonnet" is a moving and introspective piece that effectively uses the sonnet form to explore the complexities of aging. It's a powerful poem that will resonate with readers of all ages, reminding them of the inevitable passage of time and the value of a life well lived.


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Review of THE LAST NIGHT  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
"The Last Night" is a poignant narrative poem that delves into the haunting intricacies of a personal loss and the endurance of love beyond the physical realm. The story is narrated by a husband who is a doctor, reliving the last night he spent with his wife in a hospital, also a doctor. The poem explores the emotional turmoil faced by the protagonist as he grapples with his wife's imminent death.

The narrative follows a rhythmical pattern that adds a sense of continuity to the heartbreaking account. The relatively straightforward rhyme scheme doesn't detract from the power and emotional weight of the narrative but instead lends it an accessibility that broadens its appeal.

One of the poem's strengths is its honesty. The narrator doesn't shy away from the grueling details of his wife's illness, painting a raw picture of a reality that many people face but few articulate. The poem's exploration of mortality is both intimate and profound, confronting the inevitability of death while underscoring the beauty of shared moments and understanding.

The profound sense of communication between the husband and his dying wife forms the core of the poem. Despite her inability to speak, she hears and understands him, evidenced by her reaction to his vow not to dye his hair after her death. This poignant moment heightens the emotional impact of the poem and encapsulates the deep connection they shared.

The poem also subtly explores the concept of belief and hope in an afterlife, hinting at the solace that this belief provides to the bereaved. The protagonist's assurance of meeting his wife in the next life brings a glimmer of comfort in the midst of his grief, which adds an additional layer to the narrative's emotional complexity.

The final lines evoke a deep sense of loss and yearning. The protagonist, though bereft, continues to find comfort in the vivid memories of his wife. The poem thus not only narrates a tale of loss but also showcases the enduring power of love and memory.

Overall, "The Last Night" is a deeply moving exploration of love, loss, and the lingering echoes of shared lives. It brings the reader face-to-face with the raw, often harsh reality of mortality, while emphasizing the enduring bond between two people in the face of such an immutable truth. The poem leaves a lasting impression, challenging us to consider our own lives, our relationships, and the transience of our existence. It's an emotional, stark, and beautifully crafted piece of poetry.


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Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
This piece is a beautifully written, evocative depiction of a family's fraught journey on Christmas Eve through a snowstorm. It seamlessly blends elements of travel narrative and Christmas tale, offering readers a unique, visceral journey into both the physical landscape and emotional territory of a family in transit during the festive season.

The description of the blizzard is poetic and vivid, drawing the reader into the scene with its rich detail. It wonderfully captures the atmosphere of a winter's night, with the squealing windshield wipers, swirling snowflakes, and muted headlights creating an eerie, ethereal setting. The description of the whiteout conditions - the obscured guard rails, the silent, ghost-like semi-truck, and the almost mystical, red-suited figure at the gas station - give the story a dream-like quality that is both unsettling and captivating.

The piece also does an excellent job of portraying the emotional struggles and tensions within the family. The anticipation and impatience of the children, the mother's determination to keep her family's spirits high, and the son's growing concern about their predicament, are all rendered in a way that is believable and relatable.

Furthermore, the writer excels at pacing. The slow, methodical progression of the journey contrasts effectively with the frenetic energy of the children and the high stakes of their trip to their grandmother's house. This creates a tension that keeps readers engaged until the very end.

The incorporation of holiday symbolism is particularly effective. Santa working at a gas station and the Tim Hortons semi-truck taking on the role of a guiding reindeer, add layers of resonance to the tale, subtly alluding to modern commercialization of Christmas while also reaffirming the magic and wonder of the holiday.

Overall, the story is a powerful blend of the mundane and the magical, the real and the surreal, the stressful and the joyful. It captures the essence of a Christmas journey, not just in terms of its physical hardships, but also in its emotional trials and joys. It reminds us that the journey itself can be as significant and meaningful as the destination, a sentiment that fits perfectly with the holiday spirit. A truly remarkable read.


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Review of LGBTQ+  
Review by WriterRick
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Love Who You Love" is a thought-provoking and empowering message that encourages the celebration of love and acceptance of diverse sexual orientations and gender identities. This powerful statement acknowledges the rights and freedoms of individuals to love whomever they choose, regardless of their sexual orientation or gender identity. It emphasizes that being gay is not a negative trait but merely a different way of expressing love and connection.

The statement also touches upon the bisexual orientation, reminding readers that it is not a phase or a state of confusion but a legitimate sexual orientation deserving of respect and understanding. By dispelling common misconceptions and stereotypes about bisexuality, the message fosters an atmosphere of inclusivity and empathy.

Furthermore, the affirmation that transgender people are still normal challenges preconceived notions and societal stigmas surrounding gender identity. It reinforces the importance of treating transgender individuals with the same respect and dignity afforded to cisgender individuals. It is a crucial reminder that everyone deserves acceptance and understanding in their journey to self-discovery and self-acceptance.

"Queer isn't a sin" is a bold statement that challenges deeply ingrained prejudices and religious dogmas. It advocates for a more progressive and compassionate understanding of queer identities, urging society to reject discrimination based on sexual orientation and embrace love in all its forms.

The recognition that other sexualities are accepted, though sometimes, acknowledges the progress made towards LGBTQ+ acceptance but also highlights that there is still work to be done. It serves as a call to action for continued advocacy and support for marginalized communities, encouraging readers to be allies in the ongoing fight for equality and human rights.

Overall, "Love Who You Love" is an inspiring and necessary message that promotes love, understanding, and acceptance for all individuals, irrespective of their sexual orientation or gender identity. By fostering an environment of love and inclusion, we can collectively build a society that celebrates diversity and empowers everyone to embrace their true selves without fear or judgment. It's a rallying cry for love, tolerance, and unity, and a reminder that when we embrace each other's differences, we build a stronger and more compassionate world.


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