| Hello Drifty! Welcome to Writing Dot Com!
It is my pleasure to review for your item: Rainstorm
This is simply an expression of how your writing touched me individually. Please do not take my review personally as each person has a different and unique perspective on your work. The important thing is that you are writing and sharing your ideas! How wonderful to do just that!
1. Overall Impression: A sad and moving account of the present, past and future...and interesting perception on what is, and what could be, and yet what will not be.
2. Strong Points: This is an excellent idea! A great story full of emotion and depth, your perception here is very realistic and appeals to a wide audience. You should continue to work with this piece and I believe something grand can become of it.
3. Points of Improvement: Some of the grammar and punctuation could use a little work. You have gotten the ideas out there, now is a good time to revisit the technical parts. For instance, when you state: "Of her little home of almost fifty years that she shared with her husband and how her grandkids should be there now and she should be there spoiling them."
*This is like a broken sentence. There is so much emotion packed in, but it is weakened by the way you state it. You could transition the sentence by not starting it with the word 'Of'. Work with it by restructuring, and you will see what I mean.
Overall Rating: 4.0
Thanks for a wonderful read! Keep writing!