|It amazes me how many people write poems about eating disorders. I think your's is the 2nd or 3rd that I've read this week.
One thing that I love about your poem is the amount of alliteration used throughout. ("soft-pink shine," "smell of shadows"). I feel that alliteration always makes words flow smoothly off the tongue. I can see in this poem, however, that there are some instances where you would want the lines to sound choppy, because we all know that vomiting isn't smooth.
I like how you repeat certain words to emphasize the action, like in "thrown up, thrown away, thrown in heaves," and "As I tried, tried, to make it go down."
In stanza 5, you relate your body to the earth, which is a great visual reference to the reader. The reader should have no trouble visualizing this poem, because the words you use make it impossible not to visualize it.
My only criticism is the last stanza. I understand what you're trying to say, in a sense, but I felt that it left me hanging. That's just my opinion, so if it makes perfect sense to you, you may disregard me. You're the poet, and only you know the best way to convey your emotions.
Great poem. Very well done. Thanks for sharing!