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Review of Demon Baby  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Phantom_Writer,

Hmmm . . . very descriptive, scary and image-laden.

No technical errors that I could find, no misspellings, solid paragraphing plus an incredibly dark subject matter. *Shock*

You seem to be comfortable with a genre that many are squeamish with reading, let alone writing. *Smile*

I'm gonna' poke 'round your port a tad to see what else I might discover.

SM
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Budroe -


The nighttime was more to his benefit, yet it still hindered his ability to recconnoiter.

Spelling: " reconnoiter "

He was pleased to see the tree nearest him was a very large Oak.

I've noticed you cap words that do not require capitalization. Why is that?
should be " oak ".

All that superb architecture created for the closing line of ;

"Don't move, Runner. Don't you move a muscle."

Uh, . . . the ending does not do the body of this piece any justice. Such fast-paced beginning and building and PFFFTTT - flatline . . .

Would you consider ending this fantastic beginning another way? As it stands, you haven't given the majority of this piece the dues it should have coming.

Were you in a hurry? Time constraints? Word limitations?

In my opinion, the closing does not give your reader much satisfaction after the above-average beginning, or for the most parts! *Smile*

Should I be missing something that would give me an "Aha! moment" please explain and I'll gladly wipe the egg from my face. *Bigsmile*

SM
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Review of First Apples  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Budroe -

One early summer’s day, I was walking down the road to get whatever the Postman had fashioned for our box, when I came upon a sight I will not soon forget.

No need to cap " postman "

We would swing in that tire out from the edge of the riverbank, and dive into the River during the heat of mid-summer.

No need to cap " river "

I knew today would be special, and Granpa Combs and I were about to share one of his amazing secrets.

Spelling: " Grandpa " - all other spellings of this character is Grandpa, so we should be consistent. *Smile*

But, when I pulled that sack of apples from behind my back, grinnin’ like a possum with a coon treed,

LOVE THIS REFERENCE - What a hoot, my folks talked like that and they were from Virginny, by crackie! *Laugh*

Short sweet amble down Nostalgia Road - thanks for the trip.

SM
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Kenzie -

I can't believe that I failed to rate and review this informative, entertaining and God-blessed blog. *Bigsmile*

You have the gift of explaining whatever it is that day, with clarity, confidence and conviction, your viewpoints and beliefs. I can name on one hand how many people I know that have that same quality.

You also exude the peacemaker's policies of taking a subject and (sometimes you even research it first) building the blocks that will in the end either support or refute your own personal opinion. That, my friend, is C O N F I D E N C E !

You are a keeper! *Heart*

BTW - This goes to the Public Reviews so other members can get re-acquainted with you again.
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Review of Every Single Day  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Stormcloud -

Are you Native? None of my business, but my curiosity is aroused.

Another way above-average poem about Our Father, Jesus and the Holy Ghost.
This could be a hymn, sung in churches and blessing people as they sing.

Why not consider Christian lyricist employment? You should DO SOMETHING with these in this folder!

So what are you waiting on? *Bigsmile*

SM
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Storm -

Are you published anywhere? These poems of yours remind me of Helen Steiner Rice, do you know that poet?

Your message is clear and sweet as it marches to its own drummer of pious thought. Tells a short story, if you will and I find that highly appealing.

On to more of God's poetry through His servant. *Heart*

SM
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Storm -

Another celestial beauty - you have hit upon all the shortcomings we humans possess.

The rhyming is also perfect, the meter is stuck to like gorilla-glue! *Laugh* You are a highly disciplined poet and a Christian one at that.

I see that I have more to choose from your port and here I go again for thirds. I must learn when to cut back! *Wink*

SM
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Rated: E | (5.0)
stormcloud -

your meter flows evenly and smoothly. Reminds me of the gait of a Tennessee Walking horse. Perfect, smooth, pleasurable ride.

So were these two entries. I guess my favorite one in this folder is:

 Still My Little Boy  (ASR)
Darkness enters YOUR kids in God's sight.Grab 'em quik, hold 'em tight and love 'em hard.
#981661 by TexansBeatTheMiamiDolphinsBy3



I plan to read others as soon as leaving this room of your port.

SM
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
MEG

HOW BEAUTIFUL AND TOUCHING!

Just a simply sweet, heart-warming piece that could not be better.

As you watch me now from up above,
And a tear rolls from my eye,
Forgive me, love, for you told me then,
"It's okay, my dear, to cry".

You have your readers poised here to be close to a tear themselves.

The repeating last line in each stanza is the focal point here and it's driven home to our hearts in the last stanza. *Heart*

Pulls at our heartstrings. Mission accomplished.

SM
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Kenzie -

What a wonderfully structured commandment complimenting the one God gave us.*Delight*

#8. Thou shalt not steal.


I cannot refute or rebut one thing you have cataloged in this piece. When I read it the first time, I was surprised to know "the truth" about Forwards and here I read it again as I was guilty of sending a few to someone to cheer them up.

Even with that rationalization, it doesn't change the fact, does it? And I remember sending some to you as well, (**Brain Check, knock off rust and Resume**) knowing you would appreciate their content. Bad SM, bad, bad. *Blush*

So the importance of the guilty parties to SEE THIS KENZIE ITEM is major.

Could we start a forward Kenzie? JUST THIS ONE TIME? *Idea* It would educate a mass of humanity and change people's actions.

This goes to the Public Reviews Kenzie, so at least the membership here can have a chance to educate themselves by clicking right here:

Whose Work Are You Stealing?  (E)
Anonymous is such a great writer. Must be. He/she writes some wonderful e-mail forwards.
#507260 by Kenzie


This was penned a while ago, but the ethic is timeless. It will has graced her port seven years this August 28th, 2009.

Plus it has . . . you go SEE *Exclaim*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Rix -

What a beaut! A double haiku? Never saw that before! Wow, that's what I came here for, to learn *Smile*

You seem to recognize what constitutes a haiku.

I've had too many disagreements with teenagers who tell me things that prove they are at least confused and some think syllables do not matter. *Laugh*

I'm glad my mind is still open to learning at 57 and theirs stops at 16.

This goes to Public Reviews so all the site



can see what a H A I K U Really is *Exclaim*

and it's my PLEASURE *Exclaim*


SM
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Review of Trained Dog  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Debi -

What a HOOT! HILARIOUS! *Laugh* and *Laugh* and *Laugh* You should send this one in for *Dollar* that the tabloids are always offering.

The rest of WDC should see this one too!

SM
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Review of Piercings  
Rated: E | (5.0)

*Star* * *Star* * *Star*


W O W *Exclaim* Was this a foreigner in our country or were you in their country? *Shock*


Did you ask how many piercings they had? Male or female, I cannot tell honestly. Or did they even speak English?

I have to wonder if they have any regrets.

SM

p.s. This has to go to the Public Reviewing Page just for the shock value if nothing else. *Bigsmile*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Debi -

The Three Muskateers! Yes sirree, or The Stooges, only you know for sure!

I'm playin' so please don't be offended.

It's nice to see another pic of Tor, don't know the guy on the right. Is he a member also?

Must be pretty cool there, for husky men to be wearing jackets it has to be chilly.

Are you the photog?

SM
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Review of He is Risen  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Debi -

A nice size, love the streams of light shining down and through the image.

The Easter lilies, a natural along with the representation of the Holy Spirit, the snow white dove.

The Crown of Thorns no longer wounding His precious head and the robe of royalty left behind.

It's beautiful, reverent and gives a sense of peace and confidence that there is no grave to visit, for He lives and is on the Father's right side.

You use this often? Is it for sale? If this was a gift, I withdraw the question for you surely would not be interested in selling it. *Smile*

This has to go to the Public Reviews so others can see it.

SM
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Review of Nothing's Too Big  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Stormcloud -

This is a tour de force of Christian poetry. You have captured the essence with apparent ease and the reading is easy and beautiful to internalize.

You have been gone awhile, will you be coming back soon?

You seem to have the subject matter well in your spirit and it shows with confidence in Him.

Glory to Our God!

SM
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Stormcloud -

This is a strong fight in poetry form for the salvation of your child.

You have passionately wrote of your son, your love for him, the troubles you are having and the salvation you are fighting for.

There's no doubt that the love you have for him is great and temporarily tragic due to the defiance he's demonstrating.

And it came to pass . . .

SM
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Radio Shea -

The cutest feline concept I've ever read. To be honest, I thought well, I'll start this and probably never finish it because it's a book. I don't have the patience for a book, HOWEVER those seven chapters went by so fast because I have two B&W, male and female, Max & Mollie and I adore the feline personality.

You have captured the nuances of the cat so well, their lounging habits, rubbing, talking etc. You are an excellent student of observation which makes these 7 chapters so delightful.

I dare say that people who never considered a cat just MIGHT after reading this catnip*Exclaim*

Pure escapism for cat lovers - I find the FPT part a little far-fetched and a tad confusing but maybe that blends in and out in the succeeding chapters.

The relationship between Mom and Misty is precious - cat fanciers will melt all over your pages *Bigsmile*

Darn it, I'll have to read the WHOLE thing NOW! *Rolleyes*

I noticed a bloop at this point: But then he appeared to change his mind as he took two steps away from the water’s rim.

"he" was omitted

*Bigsmile* SM
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Review of Passover  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Ridinghhood -

What a glorious time of year for Jews and Christians. As I write this to you we are still in the first day of Passover, 9th.

Full moon in Scorpio
Sacred Passover night.
A vision of Mother Mary
in the diffused silvery light,
she is Semitic, Iraqui, I believe that spelling is, Iraqi
ancient and eternal.

All who are hungry come enter and eat,
opening Seder prayer
We pray for those who are hungry in body
and in spirit.
We cry for universal human equity.
We plead that we may treat each other
tenderly, and not rupture our connections.

By far my favorite portion above.

We seek generational blessings. really feeling this part

Saltwater for life's tears.
I light a single candle.
Dayenu -it is enough for me.

Please tell me what "Dayenu" means.*Confused*


At your convenience of course.

SM
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Honestly, how could you improve upon this How-to piece?

As a new member I am reading many articles about reviewing, how to handle a bad review, reviewing for rewards, etc.

I seem to have run into a buzz saw already about what I thought to be an encouraging, thoughtful review regarding emotionalism as opposed to merit.

I am a quick study, so it won't be long before I have a better intuition about it all and reading this piece really helps me do just that.

Thanks,

SM
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Storymistress -

I'm so relieved that I found this item to educate me on what I might encounter.

Unfortunately, it's happened already and I haven't been here a week.

It appears that some authors don't really want honest critiquing.
Emotionalism runs deep and wide, so I'll have to become more savvy about getting my point across without wounding egos.

This piece IS very helpful for new members and I'm glad I found it.
Thankx for anticipating the needs of new folkz.

SM
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Kraken -

This game is right down my alley. I'll have to place this on My Favorites, so I can't miss anything. *Smile*

I'm a newby, so I'm lookin' and lookin' and lookin' at this oasis of literary FUN.

I'll be back with an entry in this brain-ticklin' contest.

SM
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Review of UNANSWERABLE  
Rated: E | (2.5)
mr/ms Taylor,

It "sounds to me as if your focus is on rhyming more than projecting a thought or scene.

This obsession with the rhyme factor has minimized your rounding out the original intention; which is, (correct me if I'm wrong) the shock and after-shocks of losing someone you love.

This gives your piece a choppiness that we all aspire to avoid, unless we consider our work on some avante-guarde-level genre.

I'm confident that if you rethink it, you'll re-work it and re-present it for an adjusted rating. That would give me great pleasure.

Newbie opinions are just that, I have yet to Create an Item, but when I get it done, please feel free to visit my port and express yourself freely!

SM
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