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Hello Sum1 , this is a review of "The Lonely Man Who Sat Alone" .

My first comment I want to make is that at the end of reading your poem, I had chills. That's not something that happens often for me. I loved your post and am so glad that you not only shared it with us, but that you entered it for the monthly Honoring our Veterans Contest.

The title of your piece at first glance could seem redundant, but instead it gives great insight in so few words. We can be surrounded by people and yet feel alone. For this main character, being alone is a part of who he has become because of what has experienced.

The way that you write about the woman he loves and loves him in return is so very poignant. I'm married to a veteran and I know firsthand how special that bond is and I cherish it every single day. I don't know that I have ever heard it expressed so accurately as you accomplished with this piece.

Thank you again for sharing this post, best wishes for the contest!

*EggG* *Rabbit* Maddie

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Review of Oklahoma  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Lori J , this is a review of "Oklahoma" .

Happy Writing.com Anniversary!

What a moving poem full of wonderful descriptions that illustrate both the landscape of the area you love and your pride for being from there! The details you included show that it takes a hardy individual to make it there: coyotes and biting winds. You mention the bare trees, which can leave the reader feeling bereft, but describe them as I have always thought of them - as sleeping. The reminder that spring is coming soon lifts our hearts again, as you end the poem with the reminder that it takes a brave soul to be an Oklahoman.

I felt this was a terrific tribute to where you are from. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Congratulations on three years here in this fantastic community!

*Gold* Maddie

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Review of The Hill  
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Hello Nikola-Pet Sitting LibraryLady , this is a review of "The Hill" .

I enjoyed your poem. There was the feeling of a quiet beginning building to a peak at the end. You did a great job with presenting the four topics in the first stanza that were then each detailed in the next three stanzas. The last tied everything together and leaves the reader expectant of that storm approaching. Your choice of descriptive words created a beautiful visual scene.

The only comment/suggestion I have that might lend to the flow would be to set up a recurring number of syllables for each line in the stanzas. As it is, the poem already has a good flow, so it would just build upon what is already there.

The last line is what resonated with me the most. It made me feel as though I was the one there on the hill, hearing what I may not yet be able to see.

Thank you for sharing this poem with us!

*CupidArrowR* *HeartG* Maddie

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Review of Natural 20  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Jeff , this is a review of "Natural 20" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

Overall: As a D&D player, I really enjoyed this short story! You started out with a good premise, kept the tension to the plot by involving the session being played, and then rounded it out with a wonderful last line. I liked the interplay between the two characters, especially their humor. How you handled putting the texts in the flow of the story was done well. It was easy to see what it was supposed to be, the colors identified who it was without labeling it, and you used the abbreviations where appropriate, but not too much.

Technical Issues: I didn't see any technical issues.

Favorite Part(s): My favorite part was your line 'I have a plan.' *Laugh* Oh, how spot on that phrase is for D&D sessions. Another favorite was when Oliver decides to sacrifice himself for the good of the party and then bestows all of the bonuses on none other than the girl whom he is trying to woo. It was a perfect set up for the rest of the story.

Your portfolio and participation in the community show how much you care about this place and the people here. When I needed to ask a question early on in my time here, you responded what seemed like instantly. Please know that everything you do is appreciated!

Thank you for sharing this piece with us. Congratulations on two decades here in this fantastic community!

*CupidArrowR* *HeartG* Maddie

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Review of Running from Feet  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello the Great Natsby , this is a review of "Running from Feet" .

Happy WdC Anniversary! Congratulations on two years here in this wonderful community!

Overall: This is a very moving draft that you created. It is tagged as coming from personal experience and I am sorry for any loss you have experienced. It seems as though you were on the road to expressing yourself through your writing and were doing a great job. Your perspective and focusing on his feet struck me immediately, pulling me into the piece and making it more relatable. How you end this portion fits that initial emotional pull and left me wanting to know more about what happens next.

Technical Issues: You have some grammatical issues that can be helped by running it through an editor. They don't take away from the overall feel of the piece. A suggestion for here is to use more spacing, if you can, because it makes it a little easier to read through in this format.

Lasting Impressions: This was an excellent snapshot of what could be a much larger piece of work. I hope to see more of it in the future. If you do get to do updates, please post them on your notebook or feel free to email me through here. I would love to read more.

All of your work that you posted was intriguing. I hope that life finds you well today and that you might be inspired to post more items.

*CupidArrowR* *HeartG* Maddie

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Sum1 , this is a review of "There But For The Grace Of God, Go I" .

I have always loved this phrase. I first heard it when I was young. My mom said it one day and I asked what it meant. After she explained, it was something that would pop into my head when times were tough for me or someone I knew.

Your poem was moving and inspirational. You did a wonderful job of capturing the spirit of how you have felt at each point in your life. For me, the recurring phrase was like the four corner pieces to a puzzle. The emotions and memories make up the bulk of your poem and the phrase punctuates each stanza, bringing it all together in a beautiful presentation.

I'm approaching that third stanza, myself. Now, when I hear this phrase in my mind, or say it to my kids, I will remember your poem, as well. Thank you for sharing this with us!

*CupidArrowR* Maddie

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Sumojo , this is a review of "Vexatious Valentine" .

Overall: Amongst some poems dripping with sentiment and flowery words, your poem comes across as clean, clear and true. The description said you are 'slamming the day of love', but I got the feeling it was twofold: the overdone retail aspect that pervades the day and also the focus on expressing such strong feelings on that particular day, instead of all the time.

Technical Issues: Not an error, just a comment. Your last two stanzas start with 'So'. I think it might make the flow smoother to remove the first 'So'.

Lasting Impression: I have to admit that I do love the poems that use flowery words, but I also love this one of yours as well. You expressed the way a lot of us feel about love and showing it to our special someone each day, not just saving it for a day or days each year.

Thank you for sharing it with us.

*Snow4* Maddie

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Review of Tangerine Skies  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Moonstone , this is a review of "Tangerine Skies" .

Welcome to Writing.com! It's great to see you jumping right into everything. *Smile*

Overall: I really enjoyed your short story! As I read, Russell and Lola came to life for me and were this sweet, young couple who are going through an argument. You conveyed the frustration they were both feeling, along with Russell's confusion and being unsure of how to interpret Lola's actions.

Technical Issues: I didn't find any issues.

Lasting Impression: You did a good job sticking to the first-person style. I only saw Russell's name mentioned twice. It was clearly all through his eyes. It was fast-paced with a lot of dialogue, which I always like. It's always something special when an author can show us a good bit through the character's dialogue what's going on, rather than telling us through descriptive text. You also kept the focus on the plot, which was their relationship and argument.

The takeaway that I got from the song and your story was that Russell was thinking of all the good times and wishing he and Lola could get back to those. No relationship is perfect and people do say stupid things sometimes. The ending was really good that they both apologized and worked it out.

Glad to have you hear at WdC! If you ever have any questions, please let me know and I'll do my best to help. Thank you for sharing your short story with us.

*Snow2* Maddie

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Review of JAKE  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello SSpark , this is a review of "JAKE" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

Overall: You are most definitely a writer - and a great one! Your memories flow from your mind to the words on the page, so for the reader it is like watching a film reel of your past. I love the emotions that are injected into the tale, from the pride and love for Jake to the exhaustion of your mother, to the impending doom of the spanking for Pete.

Technical Issues: Just one - at the very end there is a sentence that is missing punctuation. It is the second to last sentence.
Not issues, but compliments: I appreciate the increased font size and spacing. It makes it much easier to read. Your dialogue is also very well done.

Favorite Part(s): I love the flow of your work. It is such a natural style that is this relaxed jaunt through a story of your life. It felt like I was sitting down for a cup of coffee and getting to hear you chat about one of your favorite memories.

Congratulations on over a year here in this great community!

Thank you for sharing this story with us!

*Snow2* Maddie

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Review of The Escape  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello LilyMom , this is a review of "The Escape" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

Overall: I love finding short pieces of work that pack a whole untold story into those few words. You throw us into a story-in-progress. What happened to make little Eleanor run? Where is she trying to run to? Who is it that touches her shoulder at the end - friend or foe? I choose to believe that it is someone who is going to help her. After just that short time, I cared about Eleanor and T-Bear, wanting them to find a good ending. Great work!

Technical Issues: I only saw one error. In the second sentence, 'thing' should be 'think'.

The only other suggestion I can give is to possibly include a 'dropnote' with the details of the contest that you entered: prompt, date, and a link to the contest entered. For me at least, it is always neat to see what contest it was and what the requirements were. Plus, for my own stuff, it reminds me of what I was doing at that time.

Congratulations on sixteen years in this wonderful community!

Thank you for sharing your post with us!

*Snow2* Maddie

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Review of Making Friends  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Schnujo and wykedcrafty (I couldn't find this user), this is a review of "Making Friends" .

What an interesting and clever challenge to take on for both of you!

Overall: The poem had a pleasing flow, which you both contributed to well. You both stuck to the aabba rhyming pattern, using creative ways to achieve your goal. I enjoyed how you played off each other's previous scene, so that there was a conclusion that felt satisfying for both of you.

Technical Issues: No issues that I could see. One comment here is that if a pattern of syllables per line had been adhered to, I think it would have been even better. You both show great talent for imagery and rhyming, I think that would have put it over the top.

Lasting Impression: Currently, any poetry I write, I write it alone. It doesn't come as easy for me as writing stories. The concept of pairing up with another poet is an interesting one to consider. Perhaps having that combined effort might lead to a different type of inspiration.

Thank you to both of you for sharing this with us!

*Snow4* Maddie

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Review of By the Roadside  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Northern Lights , this is a review of "By the Roadside" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

What a gem of a poem to find while looking through your portfolio! I popped by to tell you happy anniversary and I always try to find a piece that hasn't been reviewed yet, which is not an easy (or possible) task at times. However, I did have the luck to come upon this one and I am so glad that I did.

Your only category chosen was 'emotional' and I believe that says it all. The subject is heart wrenching, to lose a child and have to keep going on with life. She has finally been able to go back to that horrible place and face the reality of what lies there. It seems she has visited the cemetery but did not feel the same. So, seeking solace? Connection? Just... something, she goes back to where he spent his last moments, knowing that she couldn't be there with him when it happened.

I loved how she found both the original items left and the newer ones. She sees that he has not been forgotten by his friends. He made an impact on her, but also on those others that still miss him and come here to visit as well. She grieves as one but is not alone in her grief. He is remembered and loved and will continue on in this world - even after she leaves it as well.

Your use of imagery with the sunlight, the temperature, the white cross as opposed to the cold granite memorial, all of these descriptions combine to put us in the moment with her. My favorite line was: 'His friends gathered here where his last breath still hung in the air.' That line rings with me. That his essence still lingers where he exhaled his last breath. He is still in this world, no matter the fact that we cannot see him.

And the best is saved for last, right? Your last line was perfect to end the poem, on that upbeat, the takeaway that despite this horrific tragedy that she can never change, she will go on and live the best life she can because he was a wonderful part of her. Living the best life and remembering him is the best way to honor his memory.

Thank you so much for sharing this poem!

Congratulations on sixteen years here in this wonderful community!

*Snow2* Maddie

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Dragonbane , this is a review of "Truthsayer Chapter One" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

Overall: The title you chose is both eye-catching and also indicative of what type of plot might lay within your novel. The focal point of the story is intriguing. A young woman who either possesses the power to tell falsehood from truth or perhaps owns an item that gives her this power. The story unfolds at a party, which is a great opportunity to showcase your main character(s). Through their interactions with others, we begin to ascertain what paths lie before our protagonists and identify possible antagonists.

Technical Issues: There are some grammatical and punctuation errors throughout, which can be caught on editing: missing commas with dialogue, run-on sentences, and only one misspelling that I saw. None of these take away from the overall storyline and are expected with draft versions.

Favorite Parts: The moment that lasts in my mind was at the end of the chapter when Relana speaks to the sorcerer. It is sharp contrast with how she behaves while dancing with Michael and captures the reader's attention. As is appropriate, her demeanor is down-played until this point. It gives us an idea of what's to come, which helps pull us further into the story.

Congratulations on seventeen years here in this wonderful community!

*Snow2* Maddie

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Peter Parker , this is a review of "still in mind out of sight" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

Overall: Creativity and emotion are woven through your poem through the descriptions and actions. It unfolds as gently as the main character is awoken, peaks with the torment they experience, and then gently exits with the realization that life does move on, as will their heart. It is poignant and lingers like the last strains of a ballad.

Technical Issues: I am not familiar with the criteria for poetry, so I can only give generalized input here. These are based on the flow and grammatical guidelines but are just suggestions.
Line 2 - Maybe add a comma here - 'slowly, opened'
Line 13 - Maybe add a comma here - 'away, you'
Line 21 - Maybe add a comma here - 'again, turn'

Favorite Parts: The title (and words contained within as well) is my favorite part of this piece. The play on words for the commonly known phrase 'out of sight, out of mind' was very fitting for your poem and a clever application of the modified phrase.

Congratulations on twenty-one years here in this great community!

*Snow2* Maddie

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Review of The Storm Within  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Igor Skoglund , this is a review of "The Storm Within" .

Overall: I enjoyed your piece of short contemporary fiction. It has distinct elements that set the scene and a conflict for the main character that is resolved by the end. There is a lesson for the reader to learn along the way, as well.

Technical Issues: Towards the end, there is a sentence that starts with 'Claire quickly assessed..." The verb 'take' isn't correctly used here. The sentence doesn't flow as well as the rest of your story. It is a run-on sentence and uses the word 'damage' twice close together.

Favorite Part(s): What I liked most was the description of how Claire felt uneasy right before the accident happened. We credit animals with having preternatural senses that can alert them to danger before it occurs, but humans can have the same feelings at times. Not always explainable but shouldn't be taken lightly.

Welcome to Writing.com! Thank you for sharing your post with us.

*Snow2* Maddie

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Review of Dating Apps  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello 💙 Carly , this is a review of "Dating Apps" .

Overall: I loved your short story! You have a great talent for making the reader feel as if they are inside the story. Your use of italics was perfect for the main character's inner thoughts. The flow of the descriptions and dialogue was smooth and mixed with clever, funny details that made me smile and laugh out loud at times.

Technical Issues: I didn't find any issues.

Favorite Part(s): I could relate to Mavis through her personality: nodding she understood when she really doesn't, trying to keep the laughter from bubbling up, and then forcing herself not to apologize. The phrase 'plastic on a stick' is going to be tucked into the back of my mind, too. Great description!

This was a terrific contest entry and I hope you win! Thanks for sharing it with us.

*Snow2* Maddie

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Espero , this is a review of "Nightly Campsite Visitors" .

Overall: I enjoyed your short story and can see why it won the Writer's Cramp for January 9th - congratulations! It has great visual descriptions that put the reader right there at the lake with the boys. The transition between scenes creates a smooth flow. The creatures are unique and startle the reader in this setting, but they also seem at home there, as well. It leads us to wonder about them, how they came to be and why they are there.

Technical Issues: I only saw one misspelling. The wolf 'barring' its teeth, should be 'baring'.

Favorite Part(s): You use a lot of action descriptions, which helps keep the story moving at a good pace and involves the reader in what is happening. I could relate to the part about how the boys used to chase the fireflies, but now just enjoy watching them. The teenagers sleeping through everything I can believe, too! I liked that the creatures were somewhat comical in their actions and didn't harm the boys.

Great story! Thank you for sharing it with us!

*Snow2* Madelyn

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Review of Be The Poem  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Thewriterwitch , this is a review of "Be The Poem" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

What an inspirational and lovely poem to come across today! It was an excellent entry for the Writer's Cramp. It is insightful to point out that our only true home is our own body. If more people thought this way, maybe they would treat it better and be more forgiving of the imperfections they might see.

I have always valued my own health and understood that I should be grateful for what I have had and have now because everything changes over time. However, your words brought even more clarity to that line of thought for me and in a gentle, light-hearted way.

It is truly difficult to choose any one line or line(s) as a favorite part of your piece because they all resonate so well together and with the overall message. I will endeavor to pick a couple! The dreams, kindness, and trust on the mantlepiece that lack dust because they are so often used was such a creative use of beautiful imagery. The last two lines culminate the flow of the poem. I honestly felt like it was a song, and I could hear the echo of notes fading away after finishing it.

You have a wonderful way of weaving words together with images that presents a scene for your reader. I will have to pop back by and read more of your work. Thank you for sharing this poem with us!

Congratulations on nine terrific years in this wonderful community! You are approaching a whole decade of sharing your craft with everyone, what a great accomplishment!

*Snow2* Madelyn

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Hello Adore ♥ , this is a review of "South Dakota girl!" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

Wow! This was a great word search! I have always been intrigued by South Dakota and hope to visit there one day, perhaps even move there, since we never know what life can bring us. I knew some of these details, but a lot of them had not occurred to me. It gives me a renewed sense of curiosity and desire to explore more about the state. I definitely need to see about manatees in SD! The puzzle was challenging and had enough details to keep me going without feeling overwhelmed. Your enthusiasm and love for where you live comes through in this fun activity. Thank you for sharing it with us!

Congratulations on nineteen wonderful years in this great community! You are knocking on the door of two whole decades of writing, reviewing, making friends and most of all - having fun!

*Snow4* Madelyn

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Hello ~Lifelessons~ , this is a review of "I Am Dreaming of a White Christmas" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

Overall: I loved your short story! It was touching with a good flow and build up to a heartwarming ending. The picture you chose compliments your writing. Though the beginning, rightfully so, felt melancholic, it also left me with the impression that she really did enjoy those years being out on her own in LA and the parties had once been satisfying. She now longs for a renewal of her past and reconnecting with her family. A true observation about achieving adulthood and working your way through the beginning years.

Technical Issues: I only saw one tiny issue. Where she talks about her apartment in the beginning, I think you may need to add an 'a' before the word 'tree'.

Lasting Impressions: The first-person style is perfect for this story. The reader becomes involved in this young woman's life without ever even knowing her name and, for me, that is telling of how moving the story is. My favorite line was about the camera being the mom's tomb of her existence. I wouldn't mind that being a description for me! I loved how at the end she is looking through the frosted window at the scene inside. It wrapped the story back to the camera reference and made it feel complete.

Congratulations on nine terrific years in this wonderful community! You are well on your way to a decade filled with writing, reviewing and sharing your experiences - what a fantastic accomplishment!

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for entry "Disasters" 
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello QPdoll Hoppin down bunny trail , this is a review of "Miscellaneous Writings" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

Your commentary on frightening tragedy happening in the world, how it makes you personally feel, and your observations of other's responses made for a good essay. Your easy flowing structure starts with the statement of how you would feel if something happened to you and your family, then moves on to give examples of tragedies and ends on a positive note with details of how many people help others during these times.

You mention wondering what would happen if your family weren't all together during a disaster and how would you contact one another if you lost your phones, or if they were destroyed. That is such a valid question these days that I hope the younger generations take into account. It was not something we would have considered when I was a kid.

You cover the troubling issue of mental illness, which is a complicated situation on all sides. One that I think we can only hope to keep working on and maintain our diligence in keeping alert and trying to protect one another.

You touch on Ferguson and how you personally knew someone living through that fearful situation. Your compassion for them comes through in your writing. I hope that their family made it through that time with everyone ok. The first thought to my mind is to move, but that isn't always a possibility or even a desire. For many whose entire lives are rooted in one area, it is unthinkable to leave, even when the circumstances are dire.

The ending of your piece completes the circle that you started and reminds yourself, and the reader, that while there are uncontrollable forces in this world that can devastate us and those around us, there is also a common force of goodness and wellbeing that exists in the world. Some say that life is about balance, and I do believe that to the case. I think your essay illustrates that idea.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us. I wish the best for you and yours in 2023.

Congratulations on two wonderful decades in this terrific community!

*Snow2* Madelyn

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Review of A Moment In Life  
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Hello ruwth , this is a review of "A Moment In Life" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

I enjoyed your description of washing dishes as time at the spa. *Smile* The details of the sounds, sight and touch brought a clear visual to mind of being in the moment experiencing the water and bubbles. The lesson of taking something that we can feel is a chore and turning it to our advantage is one that can benefit everyone. I find myself repeating often that it is all about perception.

My version of laundry and dishes comes down to creating order from chaos. There is the methodical sense of accomplishment for taking on those tasks that right our household and make it feel like home. It sets everyone more at ease and creates a happier living space. It also gives me time to daydream about writing topics!

Thank you for sharing this inspirational essay on a moment in life.

Congratulations on fourteen terrific years in this wonderful community!

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Review of Christmas Time  
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Hello Sunny , this is a review of "Christmas Time" .

Happy WdC Anniversary!

Overall: Your Christmas and New Year's wishes spread to all reflect your name! *Smile* In this coldest time of year, we all need some sunshine *Sun*, and you were sweet to provide it with your post! You covered all of the highlights about this season: we get to choose how to experience it, people are more friendly, we should celebrate one another and the Lord, and the season leads us right into the new year. I'll join you with wishing everyone a prosperous and joyful year, one where we remember to slow down and enjoy the good times and remember during the trying times that those too shall pass.

Technical Issues: I only saw one place where there might be a word missing. You mention 'spend some time with Him on his special too'. I think you might have meant to put 'special day too'. I could be wrong, and it took nothing away from the wonderful message.

Lasting Impressions: I will be carrying your warm wishes with me throughout the year and if there should be a day where the clouds seem too heavy to bear, I will think back to the sunshine that is waiting just beyond. Thank you again for your post!

Congratulations on nineteen wonderful years in this terrific community!

*Snow2* Madelyn

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Review of TV Tower  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Sumojo , this is a review of "TV Tower" .

Overall: An expressive poem that fits the criteria for the contest and also the feeling you experienced when watching the video. I felt that this could either be how you felt putting yourself into the individual's shoes that had to change the lightbulb, or it could reflect your actual feelings if you had been the one to do it. I happen to be an acrophobic, so just watching the video made my stomach feel bad!

Technical Issues: There are a couple of things I thought to mention: 'agrophobe' should be agorophobe. (Just for clarification, this is a fear of crowded or open spaces, not heights.) Acrophobia is a fear of heights. I felt that the one you used worked just as well for this situation because I am not sure you can get more 'open spaces' than being 1500 feet above flat ground with just fields around! Also, I am not sure, but I think that your dialogue may need to have the 'that' capitalized.

Lasting Impression(s): You did a great job with the poem for this video. There was a smooth flow and a build up to the end expression. The beginning stated this 'simple' job that had been given to the technician, but when taking everything into account, it's in no way simple! It was surreal to just watch it be done, let alone experience it. What a remarkable person who can do that for a living!

Terrific contest entry!

*Snow1* Madelyn

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Review of TWAS THE NIGHT  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Penelope Moonbeam , this is a review of "TWAS THE NIGHT" .

Congratulations on 1st place for the December 2022 Senior Contest!

I can definitely see why you won! This made me smile all the way through and laugh out loud quite a few times. It's descriptive and fun, the flow and rhyming work together, and the details painted the picture for me (one I won't soon forget about Santa and Sadie *Laugh*). My favorite parts were trying to find the glasses so I could finally see (boy, can I relate to that) and the pantyhose hung by the radiator vent - now there's a pair of stockings that Santa won't forget!

Previous to reading your poem, I had read quite a few more serious posts - all good ones - but I was thinking it might not have been a great idea to do right before bed. Like it was meant to be, your announcement about winning the contest popped up and here I am smiling now. Thank you for sharing this poem with us and for me, announcing it at just the right time, even if it was a coincidence!

*Snow2* Madelyn

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