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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, I love your subject matter. It's great to see someone writing the deep truths of life. I write on the subject myself, so it's quite refreshing. You have great imagery in your words. I really like your use of the English language. The only thing I see throughout your piece is that, IMHO, you need to use a bit more punctuation to help separate your strong statements, so they can stand out to their full potential....
I enjoyed the read, thanks for sharing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, wow, what an interesting way you write! I like your style very much. I am a rhymer, so to step out and see your work is really cool. I really like the flow of your writing and most assuredly, the words you use. Great imagery throughout. In the two times I read it, I found that, IMHO, your last two lines kind of took away from the poem. It seemed a much more powerful writing ending with - My befuddled mind begs...
Am I a bad person?
I have to say it had sooo much more impact when stopped there. Your use of wording there is great and, for me, final. As I said, it is just my most humble opinion. I so enjoyed this read, Thanks much for sharing it!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, I really like your sentiments in your writing. I, too write about the horrors of war. I really like how you set your poem up. It reads well. I usually don't care for non-rhyming poems, but yours is well done from beginning to end. I pray people read it and take heed... Good write and good read. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of New Life  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, I just love your little rhyme. It is unique and cute and thoughtful all at the same time. I really like how you used so few words to give us the imagery. I only found one small stumbling block and that was in your second stanza, second line and it is your use of the word, become. IMHO, to read it in perfect beat, the emphasis of the syllable is on the be-and not the come and it throws the beat off a bit. Other than that, it's perfect. I really enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of "White Wolf"  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, I really like your story. It is very sweet. I think you need to work on your flow and beat a little. As far as the read goes, it's a little choppy because you have more beats in some lines than others. I really like your content. You have a great storyline - just polish it up a little. When you read it you should be able to hear it sing and flow... Good write though. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Wildfires  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, I like your content very much. You have lots of good imagery. I felt the plight of the firefighters as well as the plight of the land itself. I really like how you ended the poem. The way your worded it and set up the ending to to have the last two words on the last line was great. It somehow helps give the final breath to your writing. I really enjoyed reading your creation. Thanks!
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Review of Imagine  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Poetry is for the soul. Your emotions are well written in a tight yet large area. You used the word 'imagine' in such a unique way. I really like how you write. I'm so sorry for your loss, but you did with your sorrow just what you were supposed to... you wrote from the gut. Good job! I enjoyed the read.
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Review of My Favorite Pet  
Rated: GC | (4.0)
What an interesting and different way to go nuts! I really like that you called the 'disease' howler. That creeped me out. Your beginning is a bit cliché. His life before this began seems like every bums story that came out of Vegas. You might want to put a different spin on it, just to capture the readers attention right away... I liked your entry line just fine. You gave a physical number, $25,682, as far as the exact amount of money that he won. I thought that was a bit strange. Just hearing that he had won 25 grand would have been fine and gotten your point across. Rosco killed the whore and ripped and ate at her... yet your story has nothing of the remains being found or the police being involved in some investigation... but it seems that if guts were found on the sidewalk, and the man and the dog were out killing and sucking blood leaving 'nasties' behind - the police would be involved somehow. I loved the direction you went in the story describing howlers. It kept me both riveted and entertained. I'd like to know what became of Rosco and what Vegas thought of the murders at the clinic... Your title - my favorite pet really threw me... The Howlers would have grabbed my attention much more, but I'm really glad I came in for a read. It was an enjoyable time. Good work! I look forward to seeing more. Thanks for the read!
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