Hi, wow, what an interesting way you write! I like your style very much. I am a rhymer, so to step out and see your work is really cool. I really like the flow of your writing and most assuredly, the words you use. Great imagery throughout. In the two times I read it, I found that, IMHO, your last two lines kind of took away from the poem. It seemed a much more powerful writing ending with - My befuddled mind begs...
Am I a bad person?
I have to say it had sooo much more impact when stopped there. Your use of wording there is great and, for me, final. As I said, it is just my most humble opinion. I so enjoyed this read, Thanks much for sharing it!
Hi, I really like your sentiments in your writing. I, too write about the horrors of war. I really like how you set your poem up. It reads well. I usually don't care for non-rhyming poems, but yours is well done from beginning to end. I pray people read it and take heed... Good write and good read. Thanks for sharing!
Hi, I just love your little rhyme. It is unique and cute and thoughtful all at the same time. I really like how you used so few words to give us the imagery. I only found one small stumbling block and that was in your second stanza, second line and it is your use of the word, become. IMHO, to read it in perfect beat, the emphasis of the syllable is on the be-and not the come and it throws the beat off a bit. Other than that, it's perfect. I really enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing!
Hi, I really like your story. It is very sweet. I think you need to work on your flow and beat a little. As far as the read goes, it's a little choppy because you have more beats in some lines than others. I really like your content. You have a great storyline - just polish it up a little. When you read it you should be able to hear it sing and flow... Good write though. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.
Hi, I like your content very much. You have lots of good imagery. I felt the plight of the firefighters as well as the plight of the land itself. I really like how you ended the poem. The way your worded it and set up the ending to to have the last two words on the last line was great. It somehow helps give the final breath to your writing. I really enjoyed reading your creation. Thanks!
Poetry is for the soul. Your emotions are well written in a tight yet large area. You used the word 'imagine' in such a unique way. I really like how you write. I'm so sorry for your loss, but you did with your sorrow just what you were supposed to... you wrote from the gut. Good job! I enjoyed the read.
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