|Inner-Dimensional Elementals is a free verse poem created by Intuey . I have decided to review it since the creator shared it in newsfeed, yet seemed unsure how it would be received... saying, it turned out "interesting." Challenge accepted.
I perceive no spelling nor grammatical errors. The poem flows nicely, and I found several statements caught my attention. Especially the heart of it, the actual center of the piece, where it states: "It all happens within your mind,
you give permission or deny." TRUTH. It has been categorized under the genres of Horror/Scary, Sci-Fi, and Supernatural. I did not find it fit either in Horror/Scary, nor Sci-Fi. Maybe that was related to the contest it is entered in, but that may be my bias as well. The ideas presented, in which outside energies may influence or change one's destiny, but mostly the power of thoughts creating your reality...well, I believe those things, so I do not find any of the ideas presented scary nor science fiction. But I get it -- categorization for practical or for entertainment purposes ...please, excuse my personal bias.
I would suggest an expansion of the character and actions of the beings inferred by the title if wanting to portray an intrusive creepiness. Or an interaction of opposed beings, or how the person being affected acts to resist or not.
It would also be interesting to present as a different shape (this seems to have a vertical waveform look right now); I'm thinking change the line placement to give it a more horizontal spread, like a woodland path, since that was the first image it created for me.
I like it enough to share with my daughter -- and the image with it is both sweet and spooky; part of why I think she'll approve.