I love the contrast of modern stars and beauty with the reference to the ancient gods. It ages the mirror into timelessness and hints at how celebrity is like a modern pantheon.
The line about the rearview made the mirror relatable as well. I felt that anyway, with the mirrors snark but to throw in that yearning was a great touch. Probably everyone feels some of that. But perhaps, particularly the artists and writers. We try to make ideas bigger with our words.
There's a strong sense of personality in the character of the mirror. A bit of tiredness at human folly and sadness and strength because of what it has seen but there's still hope there, to see better, a longing to experience true beauty. (A longing that the mirror may be trying to hide behind its attitude.) But in the end, trapped by the truth.
This is a really great twist on the story. I love how much he cared about getting the trinkets done for the children. And the sense of longing from both him and Mary. These things made the ending that much more impactful.
I was also very curious about Mary's life prior to the story. I love a story that leaves me wondering about the characters afterward. :)
This is really cool. I'd never heard of this type of poem before. You've done a really spot-on representation of the subject. Great word choices. I could see my own dog doing all of these things with a sense of glee radiating from her.
And then the last word. . . it halted all of that with a vision of her outside and turned away from me, sniffing the air, so apart in her experience.
This tricked me! I clicked on it thinking that it would be "The Three Little Pigs." And then it wasn't, but then it kind of was! Nicely done. Nothing went in the direction I expected and that's always a good experience to have while reading. Kudos on the line about the wolf grinning sheepishly.
The only thing I could see that might need altered is the line, "The wolf peaked out the window then." Peeked rather than peaked.
The imagery here is pretty great. I could see everything very clearly in my mind as I read this and I love the contrasting light and darkness between the surface of sea and flashes of light from the fish.