PROS: Evocative
CONS: Could have been effectively composed poetically, to greater effect.
A prose work of self-definition within the unity of love.
Hello Dreamin1,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.
From reading it, I can see that:
-> It is a well refined work, with no grammar errors.
-> Your sentences flow smoothly with a touch of rhythm.
-> There is also hintings of rhyme in certain centences.
Appealing things about your work:
-> The inspirational nature of the prose which evokes comfort and meaning.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> None.
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#X197WDC55
A poem of confidence, where the assertion is being creative and witty.
PROS: Creative
CONS: No Flow
Hello Shonnie,
Thank you for your review. It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.
From reading it, I can see that:
-> It is a creative poem, best perceived by the author.
-> There is a playful quality to it which adds benefit, but it's hampered by lack of good flow throughout due to its loose nature.
-> A personal work, perhaps of best appeal to those immediately connected to it.
-> It's free of grammar errors.
Appealing things about your work:
-> The playful almost childish nature of the poem.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Though this is obviously an inspired poem, I don't believe it will bear much appeal beyond your creative circle because the style of composition hampers poetic flow. It is however written well for self inspiration.
XPRESScore: 4.0
Keep up the good work and good luck! :D
Xean
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#X192WDC50
Hello Jaiam,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.
From reading it, I can see that:
-> It is a well written poem, inspired and neatly composed.
-> It flows well overall, though it's not specially eloquent.
-> Is free of grammar errors.
Appealing things about your work:
-> The evocative nature of the piece is the strongest point, especially in the second stanza, though it is hampered by manner of description later on.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Add more feeling. When the line says "To me, this parting is nothing", it implys carelessness, not particularly matching with a romantic theme.
XPRESScore: 4.5
Keep up the good work and good luck! :D
Xean
Do any reviewing? Not a member of any Review Group? Are you a team player? If your answer is yes, being part of the proposed XTERNITY Review Team may be for you. We are looking for stable and persevering writers and reviewers, willing to create a new WDC Reviewing Group. If interested, e-mail Xean via portfolio contact for more information. We look forward to having you on our Team! :D
**:)XPRESSIONS): logo, XPRESSIONS and XPRESScore are reserved trademarks of Xean enterprises. Review is only an individual opinion. All opinions expressed in reviews should be carefully considered by the author before taking further action. If you find my review helpful in any way, you are welcome to share your thoughts and rating on my own works, accessed by going to my portfolio. Thank you.
#X190WDC48
Hello Tom,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.
From reading it, I can see that:
-> You've written a very meaningful and powerful story, expertly thought of and executed.
-> Your story touches many aspects, from technology to romance and is told with humanity.
-> Your work is free of grammar errors.
Appealing things about your work:
-> Everything. The style, clarity, and emotion coupled with your human approach to the story combine to form a powerful and riveting tale.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> None
XPRESScore: 5.0
Keep up the good work and good luck! :D
Xean
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**:)XPRESSIONS): logo, XPRESSIONS and XPRESScore are reserved trademarks of Xean enterprises. Review is only an individual opinion. All opinions expressed in reviews should be carefully considered by the author before taking further action. If you find my review helpful in any way, you are welcome to share your thoughts and rating on my own works, accessed by going to my portfolio. Thank you.
#X187WDC45
Hello Nay,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.
From reading it, I can see that:
-> Though you have an appealing idea, it only functions as poetry for the first 4 stanzas.
-> Beginning from the fourth paragraph and evidenced further in the fifth, the narrative begins to take on less poetic quality and more story form.
Appealing things about your work:
-> The idea is catchy and the first three paragraphs function well as poetry.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Even if you use the beginning part as a poetry beginning, You ought tranform the latter part into a full story if you can, rather than leave it in suspense.
XPRESScore: 3.5
Keep up the good work and good luck! :D
Xean
Do any reviewing? Not a member of any Review Group? Are you a team player? If your answer is yes, being part of the proposed XTERNITY Review Team may be for you. We are looking for stable and persevering writers and reviewers, willing to create a new WDC Reviewing Group. If interested, e-mail Xean via portfolio contact for more information. We look forward to having you on our Team! :D
**:)XPRESSIONS): logo, XPRESSIONS and XPRESScore are reserved trademarks of Xean enterprises. Review is only an individual opinion. All opinions expressed in reviews should be carefully considered by the author before taking further action. If you find my review helpful in any way, you are welcome to share your thoughts and rating on my own works, accessed by going to my portfolio. Thank you.
#X177WDC35
Hello Kevin,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.
From reading it, I can see that:
-> It is a well crafted poem, where reasoning is more important than rhyme.
-> Shows to be free of grammar inconsistency.
Appealing things about your work:
-> The special effect of blending the visceral scene of Heart Attack with that of Heartbreak. The added terrifying atmosphere after the first few sentences pulls the reader in.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> None, though I have to say, the visceral nature may actually deter some readers unaccustomed to it.
XPRESScore: 4.5
Keep up the good work and good luck! :D
Xean
Do any reviewing? Not a member of any Review Group? Are you a team player? If your answer is yes, being part of the proposed XTERNITY Review Team may be for you. We are looking for stable and persevering writers and reviewers, willing to create a new WDC Reviewing Group. If interested, e-mail Xean via portfolio contact for more information. We look forward to having you on our Team! :D
**:)XPRESSIONS): logo, XPRESSIONS and XPRESScore are reserved trademarks of Xean enterprises. Review is only an individual opinion. All opinions expressed in reviews should be carefully considered by the author before taking further action. If you find my review helpful in any way, you are welcome to share your thoughts and rating on my own works, accessed by going to my portfolio. Thank you.
#X171WDC29
Hello Elle,
It's my pleasure to have your story for review today.
From reading it, I can see that:
-> Yours is a dual nature story, offering sad conclusion to a funny story.
-> It is fluently written for the most part.
-> It contains numerous spelling errors that can be easily corrected.
Appealing things about your work:
-> Comedic nature is the greatest strength in your story.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Vary storytelling style, correct context. Immediate repetitons are not appealing, eg "He held his laugh. He bursted out of the room." The latter sentence which is in improper context.
-> Correct numerous spelling errors, eg Prostitute, Curiosity, Intense
-> Review for appropriate word spacing eg "If you find it hard following my instructions,(space)you may visit..."
XPRESScore: 4.0
Keep up the good work and good luck! :D
Xean
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#X161WDC19
Hello Taryn,
Thank you for your kind review. It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.
From reading it, I can see that:
-> It is a inpired poem, well crafted.
-> Emotionally evocative it's a poignant piece, but not too strongly.
Appealing things about your work:
-> Free of grammar errors.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> You might have improved it by rhyming more, but any changes at this point would only degrade an excellent work.
XPRESScore: 4.5
Keep up the good work and good luck! :D
Xean
Do any reviewing? Not a member of any Review Group? Are you a team player? If your answer is yes, being part of the proposed XTERNITY Review Team may be for you. We are looking for stable and persevering writers and reviewers, willing to create a new WDC Reviewing Group. If interested, e-mail Xean via portfolio contact for more information. We look forward to having you on our Team! :D
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#X160WDC18
Hello evildawg,
My sincere thanks for the community recognition award! How ironic I would be recognized here first for my attempts to help others than for my literary work ha ha. I'm glad to see you too write science fiction. Well, you are welcome to browse my portfolio anytime, I have a science fiction story of sorts up as well. In gratitude, I offer you this humble review.
From reading your story, I can see that:
-> It is a unique, intriguing riddle story. What better than to face an unsurmountable problem with an unsurmountable question.
-> It's title is fitting, optimally describing the story for what it is.
Appealing things about your work:
-> It is clearly crafted, free of grammer error.
-> It's unresolvable quality is unique. We hear stories being funny, sad, angry, but hardly is any ever described to invoke Agony. I can hardly think of anything more agonizing than not being able to resolve a situation when life hangs in the balance.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> None.
XPRESScore: 5.0
Keep up the good work and good luck! :D
Xean
Do any reviewing? Not a member of any Review Group? Are you a team player? If your answer is yes, being part of the proposed XTERNITY Review Team may be for you. We are looking for stable and persevering writers and reviewers, willing to create a new WDC Reviewing Group. If interested, e-mail Xean via portfolio contact for more information. We look forward to having you on our Team! :D
**:)XPRESSIONS): logo, XPRESSIONS and XPRESScore are reserved trademarks of Xean enterprises. Review is only an individual opinion. All opinions expressed in reviews should be carefully considered by the author before taking further action.
#X158WDC16
Hello dnadream,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.
From reading it, I can see that:
-> You strived well and achieved a good romantic piece.
-> You could have perhaps improved upon it a bit more earlier, but any changes made now I don't believe would make any difference for optimum.
Appealing things about your work:
-> The descriptive nature is your poem's forte, building upon the querying foundation.
Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Add congruent sentence capitals.
-> It is not suggestible at this stage, but were it earlier during formation, you could have made certain sentences flow better with the overall, but I won't describe further because changing at this stage may worsen the quality, rather than improve it.
XPRESScore: 4.5
Keep up the good work and good luck! :D
Xean
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#X154WDC12
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