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Review of Hero's Goodbye  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences:

"The car pulls up to the front as everyone opens the doors"," and jets out into the building. Running through the halls, my heart "races" and blood "pumps" through my veins. We walk into the room"," dead silent"," and all of us are praying for "God" to help us. I take one look and drop to my knees, bursting out in tears with my head down to the floor. We said goodbye"," and left to go to bed and sleep a sleepless night."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was so sad, and I offer my condolences for your loss. I wish you and your family the very best, and I hope that you remember the good times you had with him. Nice work on this letter! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences:

"I may only be a thirteen year old. I may not fully know some of the horid things that have happened like others, but I know enough "to" know it needs to end. What will happen when the world ends? Will anyone realize it's "our" fault? Why has our world become this way? Why"?".... Again I say, it needs to end.
Someone who cares.-?


Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this letter! I agree with you on these points, although the last sentence I believe you meant to say, "Someone does care." Overall, nice work with this letter, and in truth, the world is in grave danger.

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences:

"“Why does she always go first? I also want to be understood.”- Take out the dashes.

“Go ahead, Jasper.”

“Well","I find it difficult to understand my wife. She-she wants to---to change me all the time. She always sees my rough edges and wants to polish them off. I don’t need to change!”- I do not understand the repitition in your sentences.

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this dialogue! This was well-written, but I did not understand why you had so many dashes and repitition in the dialogue. Maybe by diminishing the dashes used, and adding in some punctuation, it would assist in aiding the reader to be able to focus on the concept more. Nice work overall! *Smile*

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Review of Dear Me  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences:

"You need space to branch out with your papers, time to do a decent job with the story, and the comfort and quiet of home to do your work. Writing during lunch gives you a good start, but for a spectacular finish, you need to do the main body at home."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this letter! I am so sorry for your lay-off, and I wish you all the best in ther future. It seems like you have excellent goals set out for you, and I hope everything works out for you. Good luck in your writing endeavors! *Smile*

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Review of My Shadowy Friend  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences:

"Married and blissful"," and all great things"."
But all I have are memories of past flings"."

I travel with the company of a dark friend"."
The shadows I cast, with me to the end"."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! The rhyming in this scheme was so well-written. I found this to be so beautiful! Amazing work on this poem overall, nice work! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences:

"The only time I branched out into other genres is when I joined WDC. I read the material other authors have on their ports, and I thought to myself, why not write on different interest. So that is exactly what I have done. I love what WDC has done to expand my horizons, so to speak. I feel more involved with my writing, and I am happy with what I have accomplished so far."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was very interesting, and when I found WDC, my writing experience changed as well. I am so glad that you have found your true passion, and I wish you the very best on your writing endeavors. Nice work on this overall! *Smile*

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Review of To Be Pure Again  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences:

"I was just a child
full of dreams","

"but" one day my dreams
turned into nightmares.

I never thought I'd be stripped
of my dignity, but it happened."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this piece! I am terribly sorry to hear that this happened to you. If you ever need someone to speak too, I am here. This was very sad and I offer my condolences, but this did not seem like a poem to me. It felt more like a narrative. Nice work overall! *Smile*

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Review of Bogie and Spence  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I had always liked their house";" Bogie and Lauren’s I mean. It was big"; "manor style even, but somehow they managed to keep it small and quaint, like people actually lived there. You got the feeling that you were entering an actual home whenever you went there. ' You'd walk the hallways lined with family pictures";" hear the shuffling footsteps of the children, and according to Bogie’s policy, you were always greeted with a smile, a handshake or a hug, and above all else, a stiff drink.'- Run-on Sentence

"Finally, it was time to go. "It was" not that we had stayed too long, oh no, that would be impossible at Bogie and Lauren’s house. You had to try hard to leave"." "They would" quite happily have you live there if it was up to them"," "but" time waits for "no one".


Emotion: There was nice emotion in this piece. *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were some run-on sentences, grammar, and punctuation errors spread throughout the piece. I have fixed a couple of grammar and punctuation errors in the imagery category, and pointed out a run-on sentences to you. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! This story has great potential. Besides the erorrs I spoke of above, the story did not seem to have a twist or surprise ending. I do not know if this is intentional or not. I thought this story was a sweet story from beginning to end, and once the grmammar, punctuation, and run-on sentences are fixed up, it will be a beautiful story. Nice work on this story overall! *Smile*

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Review of My Lynnie  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Lucky is what I am to have you for a great niece!
Young is what I want you to stay forever!
Naturally patient with me!
Doing your homework with you is what I miss the most!
Always there to lend me a helping hand no matter what."

Emotion:
Beautiful emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was such a sweet poem to your niece. I am sorry that she has grown, but now you can have memorable times with her as a teenager or young adult. I wish you and your family the best in life. Nice work on this beautiful poem! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "If you were still with us now,
We'd celebrate the day somehow--
A gift, a card, a time of mirth
To commemorate the day of your birth."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I am sorry for your loss, and I offer my deepest condolences. This poem was well-written, and it truly is a tribute to your friend. I wish you the best in life. May God's blessings go with you. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of First Snow  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Rosy cheekbone, happy smile.
Remember how first snow is fragile.
Quickly come and gone,
but the magic is undone."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was so beautiful. And although I do not share your sentiment about the first snow, this poem makes me appreciate it. Nice work on the rhyming shceme, and the imagery was divine. Great job on this piece overall! *Smile*

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Review of Lady Of Mortality  
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "She lifts life's veil;

death embraces sorrow.

Flowers blanket stone memories

While grief weeps to an orchestra of pain."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! The imagery and descriptions in this poem was so beautiful! The sentences I highlighted in the imagery category were my favorite. You did very well in presenting a new perspective on life in this poem. Nice work on this piece overall! *Smile*

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Review of Room to breathe  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "His wit
failing him now,
as the room grows warmer,
filling with idle talk and smoke."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This style of poem looks very interesting, and it seems as if you have written a very interesting story from this form. The imagery is splendid, and the last two sentences were my favorite. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of Partner in Crime  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "So here we are, walking down the line.
Saying, "So long," leavin' old days behind.
But the things we did, yeah, they'll never die.
I'll see 'em every time in the spark in your eye."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this song! This was an interesting song, and it reminded me of a western song for some reason. Was this your intention? I like the chorus, and the stanzas were well spaced. Nice work on this song overall! *Smile*

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Review of Insomnia  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Hunger, thirst, they must be sated,
along with yearnings left unstated.
Impatient silence;
sleep's defiance,
denial's song won't end."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I loved the rhyming consistency in this poem! This was an absolutely amazing poem! As I was reading this, it flowed so smoothly! I cannot stress how well-written this poem was. Great job on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of Ghost  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Harken to my soul a call
Soft and true, a kiss so small
Cease the beating in my breast
Take flight unto eternal rest."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a beautiful poem, and the rhymes were so consistent. I enjoyed the imagery and the descriptions. The last stanza was my favorite. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile* Thank you for your entry in The Dark Euphoria, and we hope to see more entries from you! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Her weeping eyes mean nothing here.
Her soul anguished and hollowed throughout.
"Stand and fight for what?" she mutters.
A futile attempt, no doubt."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! The rhyming was beautiful in this poem! I liked the imagery and descriptions you presented, and I thought this poem was very well-written. I felt sorry for her when her Angel burned up before her eyes. Excellent work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of phoneix  
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Born of darkness, raised in light.
See my soul burn fiery bright..
Do you trust me? Then take my hand,
I will guide you, to a far away land.

So have no fears, don't shed no tears.
I will guard you "through" the lonely, cold years.
For I was raised in the "starry" light;
a creature of darkness born of night."


Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I liked how the rhyming stayed consistent, and I really enjoyed the imagery and the descriptions. I have fixed the punctuation and grammatical errors which were in the imagery category. Otherwise, this poem was well-written! Great job overall! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "An ailing father leaves his footprints by the sea's edge.
He smiles ruefully at his son who uses his smaller feet
to save them from the waves.

The boy succeeds for a while."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a beautiful poem, and I adored the imagery and descriptions! The sentiment and emotion you provided was so amazing, by the end, I could feel myself tearing. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I was
I were
I will ever be
Adrift on a wave
With the verb
To be."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! Simply amazing! I loved this piece! It reminded me of Shakespeare, of course, but also with a hint of modern time. I loved the creativity, and the uniqueness of your words! Once again, simply amazing! I am giving this piece a perfect 5 for the innovation and imagination that ran through this piece! Nice work overall! *Smile*

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Review of Eleventh Dress  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " She went over and picked up the dress to try it on. All of a sudden, the ground shook violently and the lights went out just a minute after she checked the time."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was an interesting story, although I was waiting for something amazing to happen, and when I got to the end it seemed like Viv just switched her dress.

One thing you may want to do is work on adding twists into your plots. This can entice the reader, and keep them on the edge of their seats! I really enjoyed the beginning though, and it was well-written. Nice work overall! *Smile*

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Review of Corrupt-A-Wish  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery!

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Does not apply

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this interactive! This was a creative and unique interactive. I found this interactive to be enjoyble and interesting. Nice work on this overall! *Smile*

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Review of An Ordinary Life  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Tracey Williams was "thirty"-five years old, "and" single. She had a nice life; ordinary, a little dull now and then, but she felt in control. "She was" content. Her mother, of course, was hoping she would get married and settle down."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was a very interesting story, and I really enjoyed the beginning paragraph. I could picture how Tracy Williams was; her ordinary life, and even sense the relationship between her mother. The ending was well-written as well. Nice work on this story overall! *Smile*

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Review of The Search  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Through musty dampness
of an alleyway,
soulful screams sail
from far away."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors; I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! The first sentence of this poem really drew me into the piece. I enjoyed the imagery immensely, and found the descriptions to be very well-written. The only thing I would suggest is to look back over the punctuation.

At this point, this poem kind of reads like a run-on sentence. With a couple of periods here and there, the emotion which is conveyed should be more complete. Overall, nice work on this piece! *Smile*

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Review of Ode to a Judge  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Ok, I feel better – I’m no longer a fretter
This catharsis has cleared out my head
I was ready to eschew my writing ‘cause of you
Now I won’t, so I’ll thank you instead."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I must admit I did not really understand the point of this poem. I did like the rhyming, but I do not understand the judge's role in this poem. Did she scorn the writer in some way? Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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