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Review of Dunmoor Castle  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "There is no shelter from the suction of the maelstrom. I’ll have to dispense with my note-taking for the time being in order to hold my grip on this fence post."

Emotion: Beautiful emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This story was so creative! I really enjoyed the word usage and the content. Towards the end, I found myself wondering exactly how he died. It speaks of Professor Brewer disappearing, but it does not tell of how he disappears. I guess that is left up to the reader's imagination. *Smile* Nice work on this story overall!

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Morning comes, and brings with it the "hangover" and the realization that life trudges on, even when you feel you’ve been left behind…"

Emotion: Amazing emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This story was absolutely amazing! I loved it! I must admit, however, that it was one of the saddest and most depressing stories I have read in a while. I have to give this story a perfect 5 for the amazing imagery and content altogether! Nice work on this story overall! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: ""I remember you," she wispered, "I remember you, the fear of my past."
She swung up and down, and round and round.
"I was too young," she thought aloud, "you hurt me when I was too young."

Emotion: Beautiful emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was simply lovely, and yet so sad. The ending was the most depressing part of the poem. The only real glaring issues I could find were punctuation. One sentence which did not make much sense to me was this: "The string was torn like crinkled notes of money." I liked the imagery, but I do not understand the "notes of money." Maybe a different word instead of "notes" would clarify this line. Otherwise, nice work overall! *Smile*


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Review of Interactive Art  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " It was impossible to make eye contact through the tinted glass; he was only a shadow to them. The water was above his head now; it filled his ears, turning his world to cold silence. Soon, it filled his lungs."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this flash fiction! This was quite spooky. I tried my hand at writing a flash fiction too; it is very difficult to do. You did a nice job with a beginning, middle, and end. Nice work on this piece overall! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "You sit me down; turn me around,
and we begin to chat.
Laughter abounds as we lay down,
talking of this and that."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a beautiful poem! This poem did not feel like it was fully finished. It had a beautiful rhyming scheme until the last two lines. Have you considered extending this? Overall, this was a lovely poem! *Smile*

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Review of The Plain Truth  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Wide-eyed and flapping.
Some fictions are beyond creation.
It’s the plainest truth:
“Girl.”

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was such an interesting poem! One thing that kind of detracted from the poem, at least for me, was the dialogue strewn through it. I have seen poems with a line or two, but if there is excessive dialogue, it can start to detract from the words. Otherwise, I found the poem to be delightful, and full of surprise! Nice work overall! *Smile*

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Review of Longing  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " Love works circles, mysterious circles that can drive you insane. It can bring happiness, laughter, "and" bliss. It can also bring sadness, bitter words, and hell.

Love causes pain; it always has, "and" it always will."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was very true, and I found myself wishing to know more. The ending was quite sweet, and again, I agree. Love is so many things, and yet it is nothing. Overall, beautiful work on this piece! *Smile*

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Review of Love Poem  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Science tells us
the ocean is blue
because the sky is blue."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There was no punctuation used throughout this piece. Was this intentional? Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a lovely poem with beautiful sentiment and emotion behind it. I always find it interesting to see how men view love. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of It Looks Grim  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I hate it here; I really do. I'm "surrounded" by all these fruits day in and day out. Their petty problems are so insignificant to me. I'm the "only"one who sees the real issues here. Who else has to look so ridiculous as I?"

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was quite an interesting story! I have never really thought from a banana's perspective before. The ending paragraph was beautiful! I like the "silent goodbye," very gothic! Nice work on this! *Smile*

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Review of Without love  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Where my "heart" used to be;
I haven't forgiven you,
and I never will.
But remember this;
you left me behind,
and I know where your heart is."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed these poems! These were well-written and I really enjoyed the sentiment behind the second one. The first one was a little dark, and I liked that. I have added in some punctuation for you in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Yelling at my "boss" too much,
I quickly lost my job.
Jobless and "careless," I found a new way
to overextend my luck."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling:There were a couple grammatical errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! Even though this poem had no definite rhyme, it flowed so well! I thought this was very well-written! I very much enjoyed the humor in this poem as well! Excellent work on this! Overall, this was a great poem and I hope to see your entry in my contest someday! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "My thoughts of our moments;
our sweet memories,
now fall as tears from my eyes,
my mind "cries?"to "be"set free."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a lovely poem full of emotions and sentiment. I added a suggestion into the imagery category for you. You may take the suggestion if you wish. There was no punctuation used throughout this piece so I have added some in the imagery category for you. I very much enjoyed this poem. Nice work on this overall! *Smile*

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Review of He Has  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Through the clouds the three went
What a beautiful "sight"
As they ascended to heavenly heights
And they entered the gates
Of our Lord’s promised home
The man couldn’t believe the sites."

Emotion: Beautiful emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There was one grammatical error, and no punctuation used. I have fixed the error in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! First off let me say, I loved this poem! It made me truly feel blessed to read this. I adored the description, and I found the old man's memories to be so beautiful. I am giving this a perfect 5 for the beautiful sentiment! Nice work overall! *Smile*

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Review of New Idea  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "See, that is the power I have over you mindless puppets. I can pull your strings, and make you trust in anything I want. You have no admonition of what your future entails."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This sounds like it is off to a great start! I really like the word usage and the emotion in this piece! The ending was my favorite part! Nice work on this story overall! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The trials; the tears, the doubts,
and fears that plague us all
always seem to come and go."


Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a very beautiful and inspiring poem. There were some punctuation errors scattered throughout, but it did not obstruct the meaning and inspirational thoughts which ran through these words. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of Yours and Mine  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Two perfect portraits curved in Stone Mountain.
Like Egypt's ancient pyramids,we'll always remain.
The fleeting souls of two lovers intertwine.
Like feathers floating in the air, yours and mine."


Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was so beautiful! I found the sentiment to be so sophisticated and inspiring. The rhyming scheme was very consistent worked well throughout! I am giving this piece a perfect 5 for the emotion and imagery! Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of No Name  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Others claim they’ve seen its soul;
delicate, tender and faithful.
Forgiving those who hurt it most;
freely giving without counting the cost,
loving the real you."


Emotion: Nice work

Grammar and Spelling: There was no punctuation. I have fixed the imagery category for you. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a beautiful poem! I also enjoy the supernatural realm, and I enjoyed the fact you had an angel present in the ending of your poem. My favorite part of this poem would have to be the last stanza. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " I need "someone" to listen to my thoughts; hear my cry, and answer the questions that are flooding my soul. I need a friend who will always be right here for me; who will show me which direction is right and which is wrong."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This was quite moving! I have fixed some of the grammatical and punctuation errors for you. Also, in the imagery category, I took out the "at this moment." The sentence before had those same words so it was running on repititive. Otherwise, this was well-written and I really enjoyed the sentiment and emotion strewn in these words. Nice work on this piece! *Smile*

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Review of Mirror  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The heart sees;
the mind knows.
The image is clear;
well-known, the likeness is shown."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was quite a beautiful poem. Besides a few punctuation errors, this poem was very well-written. There was one line which I did not quite understand: "I heard my sense of self fall to the floor." This sentence does not make much sense to me. How can you hear your sense of self fall? Otherwise, this poem was well-written! Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*


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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "What did I do to deserve this?
I miss the sweet feeling of your tender kisses."


Emotion: Depressing and frustration...*Frown*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I am so sorry you have to endure this. Speaking on a personal level, being in an abusive relationship is not going to help you in the long run. If possible, you need to leave this relationship as soon as possible. If you ever need someone to talk too, I am here. This poem was well-written and I liked how you broke this poem into stanzas. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of What Should I do?  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I don't know why,
but I'm still alive.
I feel dead;
like I died and came back.

I don't get it;
of course I want to die.
I want it so bad,
but I had to be alive."

Emotion: Depression..*Frown*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was quite a sad and depressing poem. I hope you do not still feel like this. I have broken up some sentences in the imagery category for you to make it more readable for the reader. This was a very interesting poem, and it expresses a lot of pain, anger, and despression. If you ever need someone to talk to I am here. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of Paranoia  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Their eyes watch me
everywhere I go;
small and beady
like those of a crow."

Watching;
sinking,
feeling
so small.

Because they seem
to be waiting for me to
fall."


Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I have broken your poem into stanzas to make it a little more readable for the reader. I quite enjoyed the word usage and found the imagery to be well-done. Your rhyming scheme was spot on! I very much enjoy poems that rhyme. It takes talent and skill to rhyme well, and you have done a very good job! Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of Glass Shoes  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "For all the girls;
Cinders, the bride.
The virgin; the muse,
who can free their feet
from their broken glass shoes."

Emotion:
Beautiful emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a very beautiful and inspiring poem! I very much enjopyed this and even read through it a couple of times. It is good to remember women who have suffered or who are suffering as there are quite a lot. Such inspiration on a beautiful topic! I am giving this poem a perfect 5 for the emotion and the word usage! Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of Would You?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Would you trust God when "everything" is taken away, and you are left with no one but Christ? Would you still trust in Jesus after living in a concentration camp; treated like an animal, and having our beloved father and sister die there? Corrie Ten Boom did! What about you? Could you? Would you still love Christ and trust Him?"

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! It can be difficult at times to trust in Jesus Christ and the Lord if things in life weigh down and burden us. You did well in portraying a lot of fears that we have, and shedding light on true faith. Besides some punctuation and grammar errors, this was well-written and well-thought out. Nice work on this story overall! *Bigsmile*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Later on, during lunch, I told my co-workers what happened to me. They had a big laugh at my expense, but I didn't mind. All my hard work paid off; the boss liked my ideas, "and" that's all I cared about.

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This sounds like a very interesting and amusing story. If this is a true encounter then it is quite hilarious. There were some punctuation errors scattered throughout, but otherwise, it was well-written and told a very enjoyable tale. I especially liked the happy ending! Nice work on this story overall! *Smile*

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