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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "As I frayed "in" and out of consciousness, the pain began to dull. "Suddenly," I could no longer feel it. Although I was not paying enough attention to realize, my body lulled and I gave out that sterile blank stare."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was a very interesting tale! I liked how it was in a therapy session. The ending was a beautiful surprise, and I quite enjoyed reading this! There were some places where I felt that some words did not make much sense.

For example: "Just as the last pieces of my earth fell away from me, "a" searing light (erupted?) over me "and" I awoke." Erupted does not seem to fit in this context. Maybe a word such as: "a searing light engulfed me, and I awoke." This is just a suggestion. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

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Review of weapons of war  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Fierce" fire sets in the west,
a lake of tears the people invest.
Smokeless sleep fills the air,
death hangs looming
with a sinister stare."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed them in the imagery category. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I loved the word usage in this poem, it was very well done! You may wish to break this poem into stanzas. For example:

"Fierce" fire sets in the west,
a lake of tears the people invest.
"Smokeless" sleep fills the air,
death hangs looming
with a sinister stare.

"A" wave of fire;
a wall of heat.
"Ghostly" features;
charcoal meat."

Otherwise, this poem was very well-written! Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*


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Review of Lost Love  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "You've always been my best friend.
I swear it's not just a trend.
I hope were best friends till the end."


Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was so sad. I am sorry that you have gone through an experience such as this. However, there is still hope. Maybe you should show your "lost love" this poem, if possible. I really enjoyed the emotion in this poem; it was beautiful! Nice work on this piece! *Smile*

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions throughout the entire piece! *Smile*

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Yes, you who must leave everything that you cannot control.
It begins with your family, but soon it comes around to your soul.
Well, I've been where you're hanging; I think I can see how you're pinned.
When you're not feeling holy, your loneliness says that you've sinned."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were some punctuation errors. I have fixed the imagery category for you. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was so beautiful and I could feel the sentiment and emotions which flowed through each verse. I found the descriptions to be vivid, and full of imagery. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of The Ankh  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions throughout the entire piece! *Smile*

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Within moments of meditation, the Pharaoh became flesh again and Horus regained his power. Before the God of Deceit could apologize or escape, Horus catapulted Loki out of Egypt."

Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! You did an excellent job writing a story in 99 words. It had a beginning, a middle, and an end. It was almost like "seeing" a quick commerical in my head as I read this. Nice work on the descriptions and emotion! Nice work on this overall! *Smile*

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Review of A Sister Lost  
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions! I really enjoyed the concept of this poem; it was so inspiring! *Smile*

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Laden with unrestricted choices, you are
Oblivious to the pewter chalice you've knocked to the floor
Spilling my love, unnoticed, under the
Table of your life."

Emotion: Beautiful emotion!

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! There were no errors! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I have just recently started writing Acrostic poems, and you have inspired me to write more. This was one of the most beuatiful Acrostic poems I have ever read; it touched my heart to read this. The emotions and desciptions you have portrayed are simply beautiful! I am giving you a perfect 5 for the descriptions and detail! Nice work on this overall!

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Review of Human Hope  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Try, try, try, we must.

Why do we die, and why do we lust?

Forget the life you gave away,

what is the world, and what is today?


Heaven is darkness in which we attend,

religion is foolish in which we defend.

Remember your life before your birth,

be thankful and grateful your home was earth."


Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple punctuation errors. I have fixed the imagery category for you. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I really liked the rhyming scheme of this poem, and found that it held so much truth. Why do we die? and why did God make it so we lust? Very nice questions which we will never know the answers too. Nice work on this overall! *Smile*

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Review of What you left.  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Your life you had, "then" gave away,

a bottle of pills for your final day.

I was only a child "three" years old,

love me you did, or so i was told.


"Now I have a" son of my own,

"I" would never leave him in replace of a stone.

The anger has gone; "I" wish you had stayed,

but "I" shall never forgive that final day."


Emotion: Nice emotion! *Smile*

Grammar and Spelling: There were a couple grammatical and punctuation errors. I have fixed the imagery category for you. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was quite a sad and depressing poem. If this is based on personal experience, then I am truly sorry for your loss, and I wish you the very best. Nice work on this poem overall! *Smile*

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Review of Sharp  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "He extends his arm towards me, as if to put it around me in a fatherly embrace.

“Come take your axe, boy. And forget the two bucks. It was my pleasure.”

He hands me the axe, blade gleaming in the sunlight. He held to his promise; good as new. Even the handle is highly polished and warm, almost hot to the touch. I spin my weapon in my hand, feeling its heft and balance. I swing it overhead in an arc, bringing me a feeling of excitement, anticipation, determination, "and" power."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: There were some grammatical, incomplete sentences, and punctuation errors. Otherwise, nice work! *Smile*

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This story was quite fascinating and I found myself entranced in the beginning. I would have to say the ending was my favorite part. I have fixed the imagery category for you. You did an excellent job of using descriptive words. Nice work on this story overall! *Smile*

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Review of Trust  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I woke up to the beeping;
"I" turn and press snooze.
I "wish" "I" was "still" sleeping,
"but I" see you, and suddenly (am in a muse?)."

Emotion: Nice emotion!

Grammar and Spelling: There were some grammatical and punctuation errors. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a very creative poem. I have fixed up the imagery category for you. These are only suggestions, but please feel free to use them. It sounds like this was a very interesting encounter. I especially liked the end stanza. Your words such as "calming stranger" were well-written. Nice work on this poem overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " Do you fear death- or darkness?

No."

Emotion: Nice emotion! ^_^

Grammar and Spelling: There were no errors which I could see! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this conversation! In the sentences I have brought down in the imagery category, the "no" does not seem to fit with the question. Maybe something like: “Neither, only loneliness plagues me.” Again, this is just a suggestion, but this statement would tie in with the rest of the conversation. Otherwise, I found the concept to be quite interesting, and overall, it was very creative! Nice work! ^_^

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Review of Lurking Raven  
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The soul, becoming now a passenger,
So truly quiescent that none can hear,
Rides the stalwart wings of the messenger
In a twinkling to the eternal sphere,"

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling:
Nice work in this area! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! The rhyming scheme was seamless. I also enjoyed the word usage, again, it was sophisticated and intelligent, I liked the emotions which you poured into this poem! Nice work on this overall! ^_^

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Review of Incubus  
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Eventually, I was inspired to sit down at my writing desk and pen a missive to that unfortunate individual, even knowing he could not have survived, with the intention of releasing those pent-up emotions that resided within my psyche."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This story was so amazing! I really enjoyed the ending, and the beginning started the piece perfectly. I found the word usage to be both sophisticated and well-thought out. I also enjoyed how there were letters introduvced in this story. Nice work on this story overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "My own heartbeat accelerated, rattling in my ears like a violent drumbeat. A voice, like thunder, rumbled "throughout" the cave. "It was" so loud, it forced my eyes closed.

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: There were some punctuation errors. I have fixed the imagery category for you. Otherwise, nice work!

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! I found the descripions and word usage to be so eloquent and beautiful. I would have to say my favorite sentences were: "I felt power, coursing power, rushing through me. My own heartbeat accelerated, rattling in my ears like a violent drumbeat. A voice, like thunder, rumbled through out the cave, so loud it forced my eyes closed." I did, however, notice some dialogue that was not in seperate paragraphs. It was towards the middle and the end. You may wish to fix this error. Otherwise, nice work overall! ^_^



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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " Having to leave that place had been such a shock, but he got used to moving around after awhile. Hearing some of the stories from other kids made him comfortable with moving around, so long as he did not land at a horrible place, and be forced to stay there.

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: There were some run-on sentences as well as incomplete sentences. I have fixed the imagery category for you. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! Again, some of the wording seemed a little off in some places. I did however enjoy the concept of this story, and I like how it is progressing. The only big problem I see are run-on sentences and incomplete sentences. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "An hour ticked by as he ran through possibilities, but nothing made much sense and he lost interest in wondering....?"

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: The wording seemed off again. Some of the punctuation seemed a little off in places as well. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! These sentences: "An hour ticked by as he ran through possibilities, but nothing made much sense and he lost interest in wondering..." did not make much sense to me. You may wish to fix the wording. Maybe something like: "An hour passed as he contemplated his options. Nothing made much sense to him, and he was starting to lose interest." Just a suggestion. Nice work overall! ^_^



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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "(Kyle stared forward?) and led her across the street at the light. “I told him I didn’t like the guy.”

“He was tired and sugar deprived,” replied Misty, shaking her head.

“Talk to him again and he’ll be fine. And as for the adoption… are you sure you don’t want to give it a chance?”


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: I have fixed the imagery category for you. Some of the punctuation seemed a little off. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! There were a couple of sentences which seemed a little off to me. Here is one example: "Kyle stared forward and led her across the street at the light.." This sentence just reads a little strangely. You may wish to fix the wording in sentences such as this. Maybe somthing like: "Kyle gazed into her eyes as he walked her across the street." Leaving out "at the light" and "stared forward" would make this sentence flow better. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

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Review of Triad  
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "This temple I’ve built;
of playing cards and glass.
Shutters with truths (every pass?)
Toppling the temple I built.

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: I added in a couple of suggestions into the imagery category. There was no punctuation used. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I did not understand one sentence of this piece:Shutters with truths (every pass?). I did not quite understand what you meant by this line. Otherwise, I thought the poem was unique and eloquent. Nice work overall! ^_^


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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: “Yes,” Charlie answered gruffly, “Next to the wardrobe. Don’t worry. Go and get Margret.”

Emotion: Nice emotion!

Grammar and Spelling: I have added a comma in the imagery category for you. Some of the punctuation seemed a little off in a couple places. Otherwise, nice work overall! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! In this sentence: "Parking on the driveway, Margret got out, obviously impressed by the view." you may wish to replace "on" with "in." Usually, we park in the driveway. I do, however, like the imagery in this sentence: "Heels clicked on tiles as she strode rapidly through the house."

I could "see" Elaine's high heels clicking on the floor as she walked.
The imagery was well written in this story, as well as the concept of a house built in a cave. The one thing that was a little confusing was the ending, what was he looking for? Nice work on this story!



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Review of Dusk  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " Even though the light is almost gone, I can still clearly see the words on the gravestone and I begin to feel sick to my stomach. Again, I think about Mr. Howard’s words, “those terrible eyes,” and I dread seeing them for myself."

Emotion: Nice emotion!

Grammar and Spelling: A couple punctuation errors. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was quite a fascinating story. I found the beginning to be enticing, but what really got me was the end. The last paragraph was well-constructed and ended the story perfectly! I like the last sentence especially: "All I want is to run away from that grave; from these woods, even from this town, but I realize it’s too late. It’s now dusk, and I now know the truth because my scream is echoing through the woods and I can’t run fast enough." I have fixed up the punctuation for you in this sentence.
Nice overall work on this piece! ^_^

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Review of Our Moment  
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " Souls interlocked, destinies intertwined. We stare into each others' eyes. You place your hands behind my neck. Your warm hands feel so good. I never want to be without them. I look at you and mouth “thank you” in quiet. Several tears fall off your cheek."

Emotion:
Nice emotion!

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work!

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! I agree that love can be fickle. However, when you find someone who truly loves you, it is a blessing in disguise. Without love, I do not believe this world would keep turning. Love introduces feelings and emotions which can sometimes feel obsolete. Nice work on this story!

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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I inflict a beautiful pain
And drift off on a higher plane
High above the clouds of white
Into the dark...into the night."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! The imagery and descriptions were lovely, and I especially enjoyed the emotions and sentiment that was strewn into this piece. The ending was suspenseful and sad at the same time. Nice work on this poem! ^_^

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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery!

Emotion: Nice emotion..Thankfulness

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area!

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this letter! It was very sweet of you to write this letter. I am sure that the person who donated this gift to you is especially pleased with it. Nice work on this letter overall! ^_^

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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Send me back in time
To change the hearts
To reveal the love inside
To show the truth."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: No punctuation used. Otherwise, Nice work in this area! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was lovely. I especially liked the emotion and descriptions which you presented in the last stanza. "To change the hearts; to reveal the love inside. To show the truth; to change the paths." Beautiful lines! I have fixed up the punctuation for you. Nice work on this poem overall! ^_^


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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "But his quest was left unfinished that night. There were too many candidates and as every hummingbird knows, finding a flower is easy but accepting a flower as the One is a long and arduous process. But that was okay."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work in this area! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was a cute and adorable tale. I must know, what made you name the hummingbird Dave? I really enjoyed your imagery and descriptions, and liked the emotion which you presented. Nice work on this story overall! ^_^

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