Yes, time does take its toll on all of us and everything around us. I like the way you have time and fate sparring for victory, and in the end, it is relentless time that has the upper hand every time. There is no way to win, is there?
Keep right on writing and making us question the fickleness of fate and time...and even routine
Very good advice to all of us! Time is indeed a malleable element and we can either let it rule us, or we can come to terms with it and accept its steady tick tock as a necessary part of life that doesn't have to rush us around.
Keep right on writing and creating pieces that return us to memories of our more youthful days when time was as flexible as our muscles and other ligaments were!
This is a great poll, but my all time favorite feud has got to be between Tom and Jerry I used to love watching them go after one another on a regular basis since no one ever really got hurt in their battles...they just bounced right back to normal after being run over by trucks, hit in the face with frying pans, etc. Another good feud was between Krazy Kat and Ignatz Mouse...anyone else remember them???
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This is truly a fun contest to enter. It really makes me think about the horror fiction and films I have read and seen. I am having a good time trying to catch the questions that I can answer
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This is a really neat review forum! Sounds like you have gotten off to a good start with your reviewing. I love the images you have put up for us to peruse.
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Very interesting poll! I like the age categories you chose to use here, but with the last one, don't you need to have the person email you and tell you how old they are? I would think it might make a difference whether the person was 12 or 42 when giving that answer, no?
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I really like this story! You have the potential to turn it into a ghost story in which Paul comes back to the speaker in one way or another, or into a Cinderella tale in which the speaker takes on the challenges of the new family and wins them over...or not, or even into a tale of tragedy in which the speaker is killed in a similar accident as Paul died in and they live happily ever after in the quiet solitude of the cemetery.
I just really wanted to let you know that I'll be featuring this story in my Drama Newsletter this week
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Cool poll!! Of course I remember Gumby! I watched him and his friends on TV when I was a little kid, and now my little daughter has a set of Gumby figures that includes the blockheads, pokie, gumby and several more of his friends. I always wanted my pokie figure to move around like he did on the TV screen. Guess I was destined for disappointment, right? Oh well!
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Cool poll! You give lots of choices to the person taking the poll, and you have a broad range of character types to choose from. Are you planning on creating a fantasy story based upon your findings in this poll?
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Very interesting poem about the coming of death as a shadow in the night, masked by the darkness. I like the idea of death being an unseen shadow that only the dying may be aware of. Nicely written!
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I like this poem a lot since it can be seen in a couple of different ways. I can easily see a young child being lied to by a parent who is separated from the family and keeps promising to come around and be with the kid for holidays and such. Or, I can see a person wanting to believe that his/her spouse still cares and will finally prove to not be lying this time as the holidays roll around. I have found myself caught up in both cycles, and it really does feel as bad as your poem makes it sound.
Keep right on writing and striking a chord with those of us who have been there...done that.
This is a really wonderful sort of tricky tray raffle you have set up here in cyberspace! It is a great fund raiser and a fun raffle to enter. I am really impressed with the prizes that you have gotten donated this year!
Keep up the great work! We like to be surprised with special events like this one
This poem definitely brings back memories of the strong emotions I remember going through in my teenage years. I shudder at the memory! I often wondered if my ever shifting emotions and the pain that I went through in those years would ever end. Eventually it did, but not before marking me for life and helping to make me feel intimidated whenever a new relationship came my way. It took a long time to get over that.
You have done a great job of capturing the turmoil of a teen's emotions! Keep right on writing!!
Neat! A female Santa Claus! What a wonderful idea I like the magical spark that is exchanged between Santa and Roger that starts a romantic liaison between the two of them. Truly in keeping with the Christmas spirit.
I did put in two notes on the edit points for you to check out. You used "then" instead of "than" in both cases. "Then" tells a time order sequence, while "than" tells of a comparison.
Very clear descriptions of things seen, heard and felt on a dark winter night. Beautifully orchestrated images. You succeeded in making me feel cold and yet happy to be indoors through your poem. Congratulations on winning third place in the seasonal poetry contest!
Beautiful poem! I like the way you gently ask Jesus for His blessings upon those who may not even be known to you. This shows a pure unselfishness much like Jesus' own. Thank you for sharing this poem and allowing me to read it right on Christmas Day!
I think this poem starts out really well, but that the ending occurs way too quickly. You need to draw out the ending so that the reader doesn't feel cheated. I found myself wondering what was going to happen next...who would prevail? the speaker? the devil? what contest would decide?
Keep right on writing! I think this poem can be really great with an additional verse added to it showing the showdown's outcome...or at least a bit of its progress along the way.
This is really an adorable poem! I like the idea of Rudolph having a klutzy little son who makes a mistake and admits to it What a great idea
The scene you describe is clear and vividly visual. I could see everything as it was happening in my mind's eye. Nice use of details to share the experience with the reader
Keep right on writing and creating wonderfully refreshing poems like this one!
It sounds like this day of yours would be a very special one indeed. I like the simplicity of it all and the fact that all those diverse people could actually find it in their hearts to set aside their prejudices against one another and just simply co-exist for a time. Maybe someday it will happen...miracles have been known to happen
Keep right on writing and sharing your dreams for a more peaceful world.
Good telling of what happens after the ending of Peter Pan! You got the tone of voice right for Captain Hook, and I can see him and his men getting ready to go after Peter Pan and the lost boys yet again.
The only thing that slowed me down a bit was the shifting of the rhythm of the piece. Some lines flowed very smoothly from one to the other, while others seemed to halt in unnatural places. You may just want to do a read through of the piece and see what you think. A subtle word change here and there could get the rhythmic flow pulsing through this piece.
This is a wonderful memory to cherish and talk about at family gatherings. You may want to think about creating a little children's story about the incident to teach children in a subtle way that going to the country and studying countries are two different things. It could turn out to be quite adorable.
Keep right on jotting down those memories before they fade so that you will have them written down in a place where they can be savored over and over again from time to time.
Okay, this is a great beginning to a mystery story, but it is too incomplete to be considered finished. What happened to Chris? What will happen to the two boys who are searching for Chris? Do they ever find their friend?
Here are a few things that I noticed while reading your piece:
he was a new kid at theretheir school and he hadn't very many friends.
On theretheir way to Chris' they saw a mansion.
"Let's explore the grounds it's like a jungle" said Dave exitedly.
Very inspirational piece! I felt uplifted after reading it
Just one little thing:
In the second to last line, remove the word "will" since you already are praising Jesus to the hilt!
Keep right on writing and inspiring those of us who feel a little out of kilter with the knowledge that Jesus is there for us if we seek to praise Him.
Very lovely turn around of emotion in this poem from the profoundly bitter to the awe-inspired reverence of Christ's love. I like the way you depict this lonely, sick being isolated from the world at large with an illness that will not relent, and have him/her turn around and hear the chiming of the church bells as a life-changing experience. Beautiful!
Keep right on writing and inspiring us to seek out the little blessings in our day to day life.
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