Hello,
That is how i feel some nights when i write. night is the best time for those that have deep thought. the world sleeps while we think and create worlds from beyond. keep on writing.
this sounds like a story that happens to everyone in this world. maybe one day the smile will be real and the struggle will be a nightmare. maybe.. for now, smile and never give up. keep on writing.
I can feel the lust in those lips. Not something I ever experienced. My first kiss was robbed. it is what it is but am happy to hear that other can experience it with someone they care. maybe one day i can be close to this feeling. keep on writing.
This is another poem about a player that doesn't know what he does to you, whenever they are around. here is the kicker, yes they do. they know exactly how you feel and they like it. At least that is what i got from this. keep on writing.
I like your poem. Love is everything. It is what one person makes of it. Love is an emotion and only the intent will decide if it is good or bad. Very good. Happy writing.
interesting story. Had me saying out loud: "And then?" But there was no "and then". it just ended abrutly and bleak. which can be fine but this one felt as though it was just done but with no conclusion. if that makes sense. good beginning, wishing for me. Hope it continues. keep on writing.
it sounds like someone who is in love and hate, all at the same time. you want them but then they drive you literally insane. but in the end no matter what you want them. whether they are good or bad for you. i've felt this way only once, but never again. that feeling can be dangerous and i wont do it any longer. not for anyone. anyhow, keep on writing.
Such a sad and cryptic story. I liked it. You write with words that described the situation w/o adding more then needed. but i still don't understand what it was that she told him that day. I reread the part but still do not understand. can you explain? thank you, keep on writing.
nice way of writing a story with what you are given. i do advise to re-read the story, as there are some errors. for an example: “How’s the new job was working out.”
i am assuming you meant "how's the new job working out?"
i liked this alot. very beautiful with the words. the fear that a mother goes through thinking that something might have happened. and then realize that the baby is safe, showing you all the love in the world. beautiful! keep on writing.
I liked this poem. I could envision the scene and it sounded very intriguing. if only it was true. that is the heart breaking thing about this. keep on writing.
This is a vampire with a name I am familiar with. I heard it in the Castlevania video game. We learn things about a vampires gifts and the fact that he is old and bored. Which, I would think, is all vampires. The writing is smooth and interesting enough. However, there really is nothing that is new. So I wonder if there more to alcurd that will be introduced in the future. I am only assuming that he will interact with a human that will intrigue him enough to expose him into the light. Keep on writing.
I have done this before. And it feels so real. but when you wake up, you feel as though you have a second chance to make things right. thanks for the memory! keep on writing.
This brought memories of my first "love." while i was being strucked down by his words and hits, I found a way to get back up. I know how hard it is. I cannot tell you to just leave because those are just words. It is not true, you are wanted and that is something that evil person is trying to do, is to make you think that you are not wanted. because he knows that if you realize this you will leave and he will be alone. I do hope things get better.
Interesting story. It caught my interest and ended with, what she do now? But I am assuming that will be known in the future. Good way of finishing the chapter. Like a hook with a worm - I being the worm.
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