What a powerful, moving, compelling story! The writer is a master of descriptive language and is excellent in plot building and climax! This story is tragic but is rich in content and is certainly reflective of addiction; reaction to loss; talent and hereditary issues. The writer captures the reader with the mastery and never lets go until the very end when sadness is the overwhelming outcome of all of it.
Yes they should be another chapter to this exciting story! The writer does an excellent job in deveoping and describing the flyers. The courage and determination that they have outweighs the fear. The writer reinforces the idea of bonding as the two of them bond together and care for each other even as they experience being stalked and being in pain because of the state of their wings. Loyalty is a theme here and even when they get caught; they seek out the other to see about the outcome.
This story is certainly about pleasure and body locking! The writer uses grahic language to paint a clear picture. The writer also describes the passion and the longing that both persons experience for each other. There appears to be a crescendo that builds up between the couple and it reaches its peak when they have physically consumated their desire and rest on each other savoring the deep feelings remaining.
This is a very moving piece! The writer gives an excellent portrayal of love gone awry and of the obstacles that can get in the way when basic rules are thrown aside and rules that are convenient for the moment are allowed to take precedent. The writer also shows how the child represents a way out for the female and how blind and caught up the man is. The desparation that the man demonstrates reinforces the fact that he seals his fate.
This is an interesting story! The writer is very descriptive in terms of using adjectives which are very colorful. I am not certain that I totally understand the plot but it was very entertaining reading and I liked thenway the writer used animals in the story.
This is an interesting story! The writer is artful with the writing and there is suspense and curiousity. The reader is captivated by the man's surprise and response to being in his surroundings. The added suspense comes when there is no response to his question and the clincher, for me, comes when the man bites into him. The ending says its all.
This is an interesting and captivating story! The writer uses very descriptive language and that makes a vivid picture in my mind's eye! The writer also conveys a shyness and gentleness as well as an innocence in Brier's character. There is also an anticipation of a surprise that is not really a surprise but is somewhat expected. Good writing!
This is a great story! The writer conveys the love that he has for his father and the errors and difficult pay that he traveled. The writer also spoke of the father's faithfulness which stamped itself on the son's heart. Although the writer speaks a lot of differences between the father and the son; he always manages to convey how important the father was to the son; even when the son was unable to put it in words. The last part is beautiful for certainly it is indeed the greatest tribute to have raised his children with the influence and love of his father.
This is an excellent story full of mystery and intrigue! The writer uses excellent language to describe the characters and pulls the reader in with suspense. The relationship between Athenias and her father appears to be an antagonistic one and it is implied by the writer that the father has damaged his daughter in some very deadly and harmful way which is probably the reason she has such distaste for him.
This is a very meaningful poem! The writer speaks directly to the issue of acceptance of persons without bias! How wonderful this would be if we could always do this but we do not! The writer also addresses a very important idea since it is said that they eyes are the windows of the soul; thereby signifying that to look into someone eyes means that you are being both courageous and honest.
This is a powerful poem that appears to speak to a grievous deed that was done. The writer seems to indicate that the deed is such that there is no escape although other things are done in an effort to change or at least forget the damage that has been done.
This is a moving story! The writer does an excellent job of describing the problems that take place. The writer also gives details on ways that the person attempts to cope; never giving up and at the same time
always thinking of those around them. The writer also tells the story in such a manner that one who has faith can certainly identify with it and one who is lacking in faith can appreciate the ability to continue to endure which is exemplified in this story. I was very touched by it!
This is an enjoyable story! The writer describes the friendship between the teens in an interesting and accurate way. The writer also speaks to the ways of teenagers who have crushes on boys or think that popular boys are to die for. The description of the way that the friend is pulled into her girlfrined's antics to get to the boy she has a crush on is also familiar.! Good job!
This poem speaks to moving on no matter what! The writer gives examples of things that can go wrong and how to deal with them. The writer appears to be urging people to identify what is wrong and then move on whether or not the problem is solved. Each verse speaks to a situation; stating a problem and then stating how one should move on; leaving the problem behind.
This poem appears to be about the feeling of anger. The writer speaks about tears flowing and rage. The writer also speaks about grief's return indicating that perhaps not enough time has passed for grief to be finished. The writer speaks about tears renewed and redoubled; which to me means the grieving process starts all over again. This poem addresses the intensity and power of anger.
This is a very insightful and interesting essay> I agreee with the writer about their not being a simple divide between good and evil. I believe that perspective is a determining factor in most if not all things. As a woman of faith, I do believe in the concept of the father; son and holy ghost. Therefore I am not interested in religion by man 's standards but rather I am interested in the Bible's teachings. As far as the majority rules; in this country that how it is and it is not neccessary for the good depending how you see it. One man's treasure can indeed be another man's hell. I believe that each person has the ability to do good to and for others as well as to do evil to and against others. The person's belief system plays a major role in their conclusion. For me the idea is not to come up with a fast or definite distinguished divide but rather to say that the inner part; spirit and mind decide what the human being will do.
This is an interesting story and sadly, it is true a lot of times. The writer does an excellent job of describing the conflict that voting poses for people and how all kinds of excuses are used to get out of voting and to do this without feeling that you are irresponsible. Raining is a good excuse for many things so why not for not voting?
This is a interesting story! The author uses descriptive language and also manages to capture mystery and intrigue. The enchantment that the one watching the play develops with all of the action involved and the curtain draws the reader in. The reader as the watcher is slowly drawn in and is not always aware of what is happening.
This is a powerful, sad, passionate poem! The writer speaks of innocence stolen! The writer also talks about onlookers who see the physical beauty; the flesh and even know of the father's abuse but do not come forth to rescue innocence. The result appears to be that the innocence is replaced by indifference and hardness. All of this because no one rescues the victim.
This is truly a love letter! The writer expresses a conflict and torn feelings which can be and often is a part of loving someone. The writer also speaks of a difference in the quality of the relationship from the beginning. There also seems to be a yearning to have the relationship return to what it was but at the same time there appears to be an understanding that the past is just that. The writer refers to building on the present and stresses the need for acceptance as things are which can allow new things to take place in the future.
The writer seeks to encourage someone who may be fearful and doubtful. The writer appears to be sharing the emotions with the person. There is also assurance that when the person is clear about their feelings; they will realize that the writer shares those feelings.
I read the last chapter which was full of excitement. This chapter seems to be less exciting but interesting and full of intrigue none the less. I am waiting to see what is going to happen to Missy. The writer is building more momentum with each description the events. Good job!
The writer speaks about dreams and the qualities and things that can happen to them. The writer also reports that the dream comes from the dreamer and in the end it is the dreamer who determines whether or not the dream will survive. The writer speaks of dreams crashing and this may refer to pursuits of dreams only not to have them fulfilled. In reference to flames; is is my belief that our dreams should burn fiercely and that the more obstacles appear; the more fierce the fire needs to burn.
This is a striking story! The writer speaks about the challenge of telling a story about something unpopular which is a bomb and the destruction that comes with its explosion. The writer also speaks to the goal of the journalist to capture with his camera the plight of what is going on. However, with the intensity of events; even the journalist got caught up and injured. In the end he had to be rescued which speaks to the human spirit that sometimes wishes to be noble but is overcome by the intensity of destruction.
This is going to be some story! The beginning is very exciting and has a great build up! the mystery and intrigue is really preparing one to read more and draws you in! There is surprise and twists in this story and one awaits with bated breath for the next turn!
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