Porthole

Nuts... maybe I should buy nuts.

35 degrees at 10 p.m. It's going to be a calm warming day.

I will probably go to the grocery store around noon. Sales start on Wednesday. There's no rush.

I've done a lot of blog reading and leaving comments. Maybe this group at 30dbc will finally embrace the concept of leaving comments. So far, so good.

-1c at 9 a.m. Glad I shut the window last night.

It's clear here but the mountain blocks the dawn. Sunshine finally streaming into my place. I need coffee.

"Blogging Circle of Friends "  Day 3028: March 3, 2021 Prompt: Use these words in your blog post: forgive, fortune, nuts, cradle, night, write, happy.

How to use these words? Not up for anything creative.

Maybe I'll splurge and buy cashews today. I love them but will eat them all at once. So much for nuts. I do like hazelnuts.

Fortune? I've saved up money sitting at home. What good is fortune if it doesn't bring happiness. What good is money if you can't spend it. I'm fine but can't say I'm particularly happy. I know what that feels like. Not feeling it.

I remember seeing cradles in Peja, Kosovo. We don't use them here and I can't remember any from my childhood. Maybe after coffee.

Write? What else do I do every day? Sleep, eat, drink...

Do I forgive? Am I forgiven? Forgetfulness isn't the same as forgiveness but it does help.

The night... what's that? Idiot lights guarding, securing ... nothing means that it's never truly dark here. They intrude. When I travel I'm lucky if it's dark.

Sunny and 50. That's not a typo.

A bit overdressed but I survived. I bought sugar. That's what I went for. I spent less than $20.

The walk is good for me; the stairs are not.

I have to read poems and choose one ...

"Invalid Item"   [] by A Guest Visitor A bit uneven and the poetics aren't very strong. The heartache though feels real. The original prompt words hold it back. Bromance/crush 3.8

         So now I stare into a photograph and pine,
         my heart suffering its own writing cramp.

"I Love You Father"   [E] by ꧁GERVICious👻Ghoul꧂ Rhyming, only a couple feel forced. Decent flow. Father/son theme is good. 4.2

         A hint of tiredness, a vision of dismay.
         His windows dimmed beneath his tousled gray.

"The Love We Have for Our Twins"   [E] by Sharmelling Blessings It doesn't flow right and the rhymes seem forced. The topic feels very personal but tells not shows and is a bit cliche. I get no sense of the twins themselves. Mother/children 3.0

         The Love We Have for Our Twins
         Was something very precious

"Invalid Item"   [] by A Guest Visitor The rhyming doesn't work and then it's abandoned. It reads like a story poem that would fit better into free verse. A tad too sentimental. Family/dog 3.3

         When I rescued you, little did I know, it was truly you who had rescued me.
         I never tried to own you because I never had to.

"There We Are"   [ASR] by Cubby Delightfully short or a bit thin? I'd switch lines 15 and 16. Married couple 4.2 I really do like the these three lines.

         full of dreams
         empty pockets
         rich with love

"Looking Back"   [ASR] by Wraiths Wheeling Widdershins Rhyming with good flow, not perfect, but good. An understated humor and a dash or three of reality. Married couple. 4.4

         A couple's love can warm a house,
         it's warmer yet with three.

All that reading and I was looking at the wrong poems! Argh.

1. "The Well of Loneliness"
"The Well of Loneliness"   [E] by Christopher Roy Denton
Seems to work. 4.4

2. "You Knew Me Completely"
"Invalid Item"   [] by A Guest Visitor
A bit too sentimental. Tells. 3.9

3. "Faith through Love!"
"Faith through Love!"   [E] by Happy to write
It starts as a prayer and then loses it. It's not very poetic and does not follow the form at all. 2.8

4."Dreams Do Come True"
"Invalid Item"   [] by A Guest Visitor
Beseeching, cliche. We've heard this before. 3.0

5. "Whispers of Love"
"Invalid Item"   [] by A Guest Visitor
Flows nicely as a love letter. 3.6

6. "The Clandestine Love"
"The Clandestine Love"   [E] by ꧁GERVICious👻Ghoul꧂
It doesn't work for some reason. The word choice puzzles me. 'trenchant blade'? I know some of the story so I 'get it' but it's uneven poetically. 3.9

7. "Only Love is Needed"
"Only Love is Needed"   [13+] by Lilli ☕
I like the volta between lines 8 and 9. 'blast' at the end unnerves me as it doesn't seem to fit. The theme is good though. 4.0

8. "Ascension of the Heart"
"Ascension of the Heart"   [E] by Warped Sanity
I loved the flow and alliteration. But that last word... 'bent'? It jars. 4.5

Well... at least I voted on time. I wasn't awed by any of the poems I read today. But it did clarify why I win sometimes. Apparently most folks aren't very poetic; others rely on tired words or images. Some can't read directions. And to emphasize: the entry is supposed to be a poem.

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