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*Writing* Billy Wigglestick's *Writing*
*Leaf1**Leaf2* Sonnet Contest Review! *Leaf2**Leaf1*

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Schemed Quatrains *Bullet* Iambic Beats *Bullet* Rhyming Couplet


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*Check3* Billy Likes:
*Bulletg*Creativity: Using the state of a secret garden in nature was a wonderfully creative metaphor for the state of a young woman. Women, to me, are most beautiful when they are forest pools of self-sustaining serenity.
*Bulletg*Use of Form: The peripeteia was evident and well executed.
*Bulletg*Word Choice:
*Bulletg*Overall Impression:

*Checkr* Billy Hates:
*Bulletr*Stumbling Points: You have a few lines of 11 beats and a one of 9 beats, this can cause the reader to stumble a bit even though there is nothing but longer/shorter syllable lines getting in the way.
*Bulletr*Lack of a Peripeteia:
*Bulletr*Poor Flow: My darling girl. Though this poem does flow well, it is not in scansion to a traditional english sonnet. A sonnet is typically in iambic pentameter - which are five pairs of soft strong beats. In here we see the fluid ups and downs of a flowing poem - but one that is not iambic pentameter. I wish to differentiate because this is not a criticism on the piece, but on the way the piece applies to form. On it's own, it flows beautifully, but it doesn't match the scansion of a sonnet. Does that make sense?
*Bulletr*Forced Rhymes:

Thank you for joining me on this wacky ride through sonnet land. I hope to see you again, keep an eye out for the round ending email.


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