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Adriana A to Z! (13+) Adriana A to Z is a brief look at my writing partner. Written for the Angel Buddy Contest. #1490094 by Mara ♣ McBain
What a unique dedication and tribute to the author's best friend! This is way too cool!!
MY FAVORITE PART
S ~ Snarky…and yes people it is a word. LOL Even good ol’ Merriam-Webster has finally recognized it. It should have a picture of Adriana.
1 : CROTCHETY , SNAPPISH
2 : sarcastic, impertinent, or irreverent in tone or manner <snarky lyrics>
— snark•i•ly \-kə-lē\ adverb
SUGGESTIONS
I can't think of one single thing to offer as a suggestion for improvement.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am genuinely jealous!! This is a brilliant and very creative way to pay tribute to a person who has touched your life in so many ways. This definitely puts an Acrostic to shame and I may have to "borrow" this idea from you and write my own tributes to a few friends. I thank you for giving us all the opportunity to get to know Adriana through your awesome, lettered descriptions! I bet she was thrilled and not at all snarky when she viewed it! This was a real pleasure to read. Thank you so much for sharing it with us all!!
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STATIC
Snow Angels (E) A mother remembers the joy of children playing~A sestina poem 12/09 Quotation Inspiration #1627458 by Mara ♣ McBain
Quite an impressive piece that depicts the fun that can be had in the wintery snow!
MY FAVORITE PART
The dog bounds in taking the youngest to the ground.
The laughter is cheerful and bright;
as the two roll in the snow
full of energy and play.
SUGGESTIONS
Had I observed any errors or breaks in flow, I would mention them here. But, since this piece is perfect, I have no suggestions to offer!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
Being a native Texan, I am not accustomed to such fun. However, you successfully took me right there, right to the action packed enjoyment of kids, dogs and even adults romping in the glistening snow. I have had the pleasure a few times of delighting in this type of wintery fun, however those times were few and far between and quite long ago. It has been many, many years since I have had an opportunity to create a snow angel. Thank you for allowing me to venture there in my fondest of memories. This is a beautiful piece that can be loved by many readers of all ages!
Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon. After reading "The Ouija" , I would like to offer you your first review of five for your win in the Forever Christmas Auction. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
This is a spectacular read for anyone in the United States who has fallen victim to the cruel and inhumane current state of the economy.
MY FAVORITE PART
Creaking noises from the market,
as prices sag like Spanish moss,
SUGGESTIONS
Again, no suggestion for improvement!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I love your style, your humor, your out of this world poetic talent. You have taken me on so many different journeys, from sad to comical, from enlightening to inspiring. I honestly don't know which poetic genre best suits your skill; you have mastered them all! Thank you so much for sharing this great twist on the Monsters of 2009! This is priceless and I will be sharing it with my mother who will love it as much as I do!
Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon. After reading "Allure" , I would like to offer you your second review of seven from your win in the Wishes Upon A Star Auction. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
Oh my goodness!! This is not what I was expecting as I was reading this sweet and seductive piece!
MY FAVORITE PART
The soft welcoming feel of your breasts,
as they find freedom from cloying restriction,
start the fires that will soon consume us
as we give in to pleasure's addiction.
SUGGESTIONS
I try so hard, but always in vain, to find some type of constructive criticism to offer you. As with every other review of your poetry, I have nothing to suggest for improvement!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
Well, you got me on this one! You had me all worked up, feeling the heat of lustful desire, just to... well, you know! I don't want to ruin the surprise for future readers! I am still sitting here with a silly looking grin on my face, totally shocked by the ending! Thank you for adding another chuckle to my day and for providing me with awesome reading material!
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Ingenuous (E) A poem: A name can potentially influence a child's development... #1570629 by George R. Lasher
Another hysterical piece that offered me an opportunity to add a new word to my vocabulary!
MY FAVORITE PART
When through with the boys,
I chased all the girls.
I yanked on their pigtails
and pulled on their curls.
SUGGESTIONS
A “gift” from my Mother, I would change "Mother" to lowercase since it is being used as a noun rather than a proper noun.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I absolutely love your sense of humor! And your ability to tell a story through a perfect rhythm and rhyme is incredible! I am a bit surprised that I have never heard the word "salacious", but am glad to have been introduced to it and in such a comical manner. I have thoroughly enjoyed visiting this particular folder and hope that you have many plans of adding more to it soon. I will be checking back often for new songs/poetry!
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This is way too funny! Especially "a big fat giraffe"!! How many fat giraffe's are out running loose? Way too funny!
MY FAVORITE PART
Gawk all you want, but be kind and don't laugh.
I can't help that I look like a big, fat giraffe.
SUGGESTIONS
I have not one suggestion to offer!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
This is a hysterical little "ditty" that still has me grinning from ear to ear! I love the cowboy/western theme it has; being a Native Texan, I have to appreciate that! I grinned all the way through, but was really impressed with the last line!! The rhythm and the rhyme are both spectacular throughout and I thank you for such an entertaining little read! Please do keep up the awesome work!
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A marvelous poetic story that reveals the magical entering of Heaven!
MY FAVORITE PART
The old man stepped over the threshold
Standing tall and bent no more;
He had received a new body
When he opened Heaven's front door.
SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions to offer this already perfect piece!!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I simply love the manner in which you delivered this message. When I first began reading, I envisioned a castle with a king being the master, but not the Heavenly castle that soon appeared before my eyes as I kept reading. I very much enjoyed the "surprise" when I realized the master in this story was the Heavenly Father! The imagery included within the words is illuminating and pleasant. Thank you for yet another very enjoyable read!!
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A splendid message that urges us all to eliminate the negative contraction "can't" from our vocabulary!!
MY FAVORITE PART
I'm tired of hearing can't
Day after endless day.
I want to try it out,
Tell can't to go away!
SUGGESTIONS
I fully realize the freedom a poet has in terms of grammar and punctuation in his/her piece of art. But, if I may, I would like to suggest changing the relevant capital letters on every first line. If the line continues from the previous one, I would make it lowercase. Please understand that this is just a particular "like" for me when reading poetry as it helps me with the smooth flow of the message being delivered.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
The message contained within this piece is brilliant. As a child growing up, my step-father used to always tell me, "Can't never could." Although I regretfully and ashamedly make use of the word, I would do so much better without it. I have tried to eliminate words of the same likeness; i.e. never, no, not, don't, won't, etc... It is a bit difficult, especially after using them for so long, but it IS possible and it DOES work in generating much more positive vibes, not only for the person speaking, but for all the people listening. Removing such words also enhances a person's vocabulary and encourages the brain to seek out much more appropriate terms. You rock for putting this out there for us!! Thank you so much for offering this work of art for all of our reading pleasure!!
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What a cute and precious rhyming short story from the perspective of a cat!
MY FAVORITE PART
I don't understand why she feels the need to screech like a wart-nosed, ugly, old witch. Most of the time they're already dead, although, once in a while they twitch.
SUGGESTIONS
She calls the tall human to take my trophies away. Although this line/sentence is necessary information for the reader, it has no line that rhymes with it. This threw me off a bit.
She's picked me up and placed on her lap. Consider inserting "me" directly after "placed".
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I can never get enough of poetry or stories that are written from the voice of an animal! Readers of all ages can certainly appreciate the lighthearted message that is delivered from a pet's point of view. Again, thank you for sharing your talent with us all!
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A clever piece that tells a short, poetic story about the character discovering serenity.
MY FAVORITE PART
The darkness of the woods was
Like the darkness of my wrath.
SUGGESTIONS
Consider selecting an appropriate "Item Genre" for this piece besides the default "Other". I believe it would attract more readers if it were to be listed as "Experience" or anything more relevant.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I have been on my own personal search for serenity for decades. I am finally closing in on it and couldn't be happier! We all have to discover that inner peace in our own way, whether it be from within the dense woods, on the city streets, or just in our heart. I appreciated the way that "Serenity" presented itself to the character after a brief run from the unknown. Thank you for sharing this talent of yours with us all!
Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon. After reading "Sky Flowers" , I would like to offer you your first review of seven on behalf of the "Invalid Item" . Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
A breathtaking piece that delivers the beauty and awe of a sky filled with colorful hot air balloons!
MY FAVORITE PART
in hues floating across the skies.
An amazing bouquet, in a new guise,
SUGGESTIONS
Well, of course, I have no suggestion for improvement!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am ALWAYS taken aback by your poetic talent! No matter the subject, you deliver a message in such poise and style. Any reader, of any taste, cannot deny your ability to entertain. I find it almost silly to encourage you to keep up with the great writing, for I doubt you will ever stop; it's in your bones to stay, thank goodness!!! Thank you so much for sharing this with us all!
Hello jaya. After reading "Crying because of you" , I would like to offer you your third review of nine on behalf of the "Invalid Item" . Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
A very powerful piece that tells all about "self inflicted misery" in regards to mistakes made in a relationship.
MY FAVORITE PART
There cannot be a darker power
than jealousy born of doubt.
Oh! Merciful God in Heaven,
on my knees I prithee, atone my sin.
SUGGESTIONS
Again, I have no suggestions to offer for this very well written poem!!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I want to take this opportunity to add that the verse above was only one of my favorites. The last one was actually my fave, but I did not want to "blast" it here and ruin it for future readers. It was powerful and unexpected, providing hope that the first part of the piece took away. Excellent job at invoking multiple emotions in me while I read!! Thank you for sharing this awesome piece.
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Chapter Three, in this sci fi series is more riveting than the first two! I love the ending of this particular chapter. It leaves the reader wanting to progress forward through the story immediately!
MY FAVORITE PART
sort of like trying to take salt off of mashed potatoes.
SUGGESTIONS
It wasn’t arrogance. It just had never happened before. Consider combining these two short sentences together by using a semicolon between them.
The thieves felt no guilt at their actions. I think this would read a tad better if you used "for" instead of "at" their actions.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
Here we are at Chapter Three and I am still intrigued by the plot. There is no telling where Chapter Four will take me. I really like the twist that was thrown in by the pandemic and how the citizens of San Francisco are going about handling their fear of the unknown. I am on my way to Chapter Four right now! Thank you for sharing this story with us all!!
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Chapter Two of The Memory Thieves: the plot is growing and has my interest peaked!
MY FAVORITE PART
Sadie sat down and scratched at something she couldn’t quite reach. That always seemed to be the case. Maybe she could get her boy, Bobby to do it for her. Her nose located him somewhere outside. She exited the house through the dog door and headed around to the backyard.
SUGGESTIONS
It drank deeply for it had been a long time between meals. Consider placing a comma after "deeply".
OVERALL IMPRESSION
Again, I can't wait to get to Chapter Three! I am enjoying the buildup of this story and may turn into a sci fi fan before I am finished reading! Great job in re-introducing me to a genre I have neglected for years!!
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A sci-fi short story built around two required prompts: Mention the season fall; something has to be born. Both were done perfectly, which gave rise to an interesting plot.
MY FAVORITE PART
Something strange rode across the universe. Its vessel was small and fast, riding on a beam of light. Massless and without form, it searched through the boundless playground of time, stars and gravity wells in search of one thing; to satisfy its curiosity.
SUGGESTIONS
in search of one thing; to satisfy its curiosity. I could be wrong, as I realize there are more uses for the semicolon than just one, but I think a colon is more justified in this case.
It knew not joy or fear. I think this would read better if it were to be: "It knew neither joy nor fear." Just a suggestion.
Now, it focused on a small planet In the paragraph that preceded this sentence, "it" was referred to as a proper noun, being capitalized each time. However, this time it is not.
There was to comet tail or splashdown. I think "to" is supposed to be "no".
nothing out of the ordinary for a early fall morning. Should be "an" early fall morning.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I must admit that I am not a huge fan of science fiction; however, I did always love how Ray Bradbury could take me on some fascinating journeys when I was younger with his short stories. I notice that this is Chapter One and am actually eager to continue reading about the explorations of the memory thieves. You have caused me to develop a different type of fear of mosquitoes than I previously had! Good job in bringing it to life for me, the reader. I will be back for more!!
Hello dejavu_BIG computerprobs. After reading "Pumpkins And Long Johns" , I would like to offer you your first of three reviews a week for three weeks that was gifted you by jaya on behalf of the "Invalid Item" . Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
A funny and delightful story of a couple who had been married for many years, bickering over silly things! This brought a huge smile to my face!!
MY FAVORITE PART
“I warned you I would if you refused to wear your glasses when you rode it,” Mary replied tartly.” I’m going to cook that pumpkin too.”
SUGGESTIONS
rosy cheeks and thick white hair, negated his imposing size. I am not 100% certain, but don't think the comma after "hair" is necessary.
I, being a Doctor of sublime conscientiousness to my work was determined to set their problems right. Consider changing "Doctor" to lower case since it is being used here as a noun rather than a proper noun. Also, I would insert a comma after "work".
“The Grandchildren love my baking ”She explained.”Dr.Fox, The end quotation mark needs to be backed up one space with a comma after "baking" and before the end quotation. Also, "She" should not be capitalized. There needs to be a space between the period after "explained" and the beginning quotation mark before "Dr." as well as a space after the period and before "Fox".
“Now Mary,” I spoke.” In my opinion Joe does not mean to disparage you in front of your Grandchildren.” There should be a comma after "Now". Another one should be placed after "opinion" and "Grandchildren" should be lowercase.
He’s the most obstinate "He's" should be lowercase.
but winnings not the only reason "winnings" should be "winning's" since it is being used as a contraction for "winning is"
I struggled to maintain my professional countenance There should be a period at the end of this sentence.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
Please don't be overwhelmed with the number of suggestions I have made. They are all tiny in nature, but will improve the readability of this piece tremendously. The plot of the story is great and the ending is phenomenal!! You have a great talent with the use of dialogue and I hope to have learned a bit from you in regards to it. I am terrible with dialogue in a story, which is strange since I am so talkative! Thank you for sharing this with us all and keep up the great, entertaining work!
Hi! My name is Kristi and I will be judging "Give & Take" for ~A BROKEN HEART POETRY CONTEST~
THE POEM
A poetic story that conveys a message of a broken relationship. I believe this piece follows the required prompt of "Pieces of Me" in a unique and obscure manner.
RHYTHM/RHYME
I enjoyed both the rhythm and the rhyme; each complements each other very nicely making for a pleasant reading experience.
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
I did not notice any errors in spelling or grammar! Great Job!
WHAT I LIKED
Well, I like the whole "give and take" aspect of this write. I think it was a nice twist to the normal tone in a piece speaking of a broken heart.
FAVORITE PART
You keep all yours,
but take all mine.
IMPROVEMENTS
I don't have any suggestions to offer for improvement.
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
Hi! My name is Kristi and I will be judging "Portray Me As I Am" for ~A BROKEN HEART POETRY CONTEST~
THE POEM
Quite an enjoyable read that depicts a broken heart and followed, in a hidden manner, the required prompt of "Pieces of Me" very nicely!
RHYTHM/RHYME
I simply LOVE the rhythm! Each line flowed into the next perfectly. The rhyme scheme of abcc worked great for me, the reader!
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
There were no errors in either spelling or grammar! BRAVO!!! That goes a long way with me!
WHAT I LIKED
I like the complexity of this piece; it is far from simplistic, which adds so much power to the message.
FAVORITE PART
Portray me when all is consumed—
By fire’s bright heat that enraptures, enchants, and enthralls
All the rage you wished I would conceive
All the mania you hoped you could achieve
IMPROVEMENTS
I have no suggestions for improvement of this written masterpiece!
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
Hi! My name is Kristi and I will be judging "Somber Succor" for ~A BROKEN HEART POETRY CONTEST~
THE POEM
This contest entry blew me away! I swear I was reading about myself. Although hidden in other words, this piece follows the required prompt of "Pieces of Me" perfectly. Great job!!
RHYTHM/RHYME
Both the rhythm and the rhyme worked together to make this a compelling melody to read!
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
The spelling was perfect, as was the grammar! No mistakes or typos noted whatsoever!! Bravo!!
WHAT I LIKED
I really liked reading about "me"! I know that may sound crazy, but I have tried so hard to put these exact thoughts to proper words many times and have always seemed to come up short.
FAVORITE PART
I will trade my happiness, that others may succeed.
I will go without, so that others may never need.
IMPROVEMENTS
I don't have one single suggestion for improvement. This is a fabulous piece that I would like to highlight on my web page (with proper permission first, of course)!
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
Hello kiyasama and congratulations on your recent nomination by stacylynn71.
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This is a very well written piece that describes in detail how you arrived at WDC and why. It also gives solid testimonies as to the person and writer you have become since you joined.
MY FAVORITE PART
If there’s anything that WDC has done, it’s been to make me a much more patient and thorough individual. I do not just read for the sake of it, I now read to truly understand the meaning behind the words. It’s taught me to peel back the layers and to see what lies beneath. It’s shown me the kindness of people and it’s made me want to be a better person both inside and out.
If at the end of the day, I am able to bring a smile to anyone’s ‘face’ in this community, then my dear writers, my work is done.
SUGGESTIONS
Had I noticed any spelling mistakes, typo's or grammatical errors, I would make mention of them here, but I observed none of the above! Great job!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
First, I wish to thank you for presenting us with such awesome reading material. Not only is the subject matter one that every single member here can relate to, it's written like a true, professional writer; one who cares about her work and takes pride in what she writes. That makes for such a pleasant reading experience! Second, thank you for allowing me, the reader, into your world. Every time I read something you have written, I feel like I know you so much better. I appreciate your eloquent style of writing and how you speak directly to the reader. Thank you for sharing this delightful read!
Hello Ben Langhinrichs. After reading "Hard Times in NYC" , I would like to offer you your fourth review of five. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
This is a very exciting and spell binding short story about a planned heist gone wrong in NYC!
MY FAVORITE PART
Slim's judgment was pretty suspect, maybe due to spending most of his thirty seven years behind bars for one "sure thing" or another.
SUGGESTIONS
and out walked Jessie, and a whole lot of sweet cash. Consider removing the comma after "Jessie".
There was a man who ran in my street every once in a while I would change "in my street..." to "on my street...".
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I loved reading this!! Not one time did I take my eyes away from the screen, indulging in every well written sentence! I think, and this is just my opinion of course, that you should turn this into a "series of events" as you mention as a note at the bottom. I would be very interested in reading them! Great work! Thank you for sharing.
Hello SHERRI GIBSON. After reading "Follow Your Heart" , I would like to offer you your final review of five. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not. I hope you have enjoyed these reviews as much as I have enjoyed being in your port full of awesomely intriguing and inspiring poetry!
Every word in this brilliant piece is so heart warming and uplifting. The message contained within is my favorite message of all time!
MY FAVORITE PART
Open your eyes, and play it smart,
accept every individual for their worth.
You do this by following your heart,
cherishing everything on our precious Earth.
SUGGESTIONS
The only suggestion I have is to keep writing masterpieces like this!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
As I previously mentioned, the message you deliver in this particular piece is one that I could read all day, every day! I agree with every word on every line and I thank you for doing your part in spreading love and blessings! This is a fabulous piece!!!
Hello SHERRI GIBSON. After reading "LITTLE TO NOTHING" , I would like to offer you your fourth review of five. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
A sad piece that touches on so many facets and emotions of being Bi-polar or suffering with Alzheimer's.
MY FAVORITE PART
Rescue me, rescue me.
Why won't the voices stop haunting me?
Want out, want out.
This isn't what life is all about.
SUGGESTIONS
I really don't know what suggestion I could offer to improve this already spectacular write!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I used to experience a very strong fear of Alzheimer's, both for myself and even people I didn't know. I just can't imagine not being able to live with a brain functioning normally, for whatever normal is to me. Thank you for such a terrific piece to read and ponder on. I love the sing along rhythm this piece has and the rhyming is perfect!! Keep up the great and inspirational work!
Hello SHERRI GIBSON. After reading "ENCHANTRESS" , I would like to offer you your third review of five. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
Another uplifting and magical piece that did my heart even more good than the last magical piece!!!
MY FAVORITE PART
Let her into your life and she’ll alleviate your pain.
In her loving wings all misery is cast aside.
Her sparkling blue eyes shine like diamonds
as she wraps you into her arms to ease the heartache.
SUGGESTIONS
She flashes you a smile before departure. Consider placing "her" directly before "departure" just to ensure the reader realizes that it is the departure of the "Enchantress" herself.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I really didn't think it could get better than "Butterfly Wings", but this spectacular piece proves me wrong! I hope that you continue to write more just like this. Just imagine how at peace this world would be if everyone were to delight themselves in reading material such as this!! You did a fantastic job in taking me to another world, even if briefly. Thank you for this!!!
Hello SHERRI GIBSON. After reading "BUTTERFLY WINGS" , I would like to offer you your second review of five. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
This is a beautiful and magical piece filled with hopeful wishes and dreams for a more peaceful world!
MY FAVORITE PART
The fairy sprinkles shimmering dust
on those whose hearts are hate-filled.
She instills peace to the brokenhearted;
love to a world filled with despair.
SUGGESTIONS
I just love it when I have no corrections to note or suggestions to make!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
This is the most satisfying piece I have read all day, and I have done a lot of reading! My heart feels good and is filled with peaceful hope after reading this delightful and magical message! I want to fly on those same butterfly wings with you!! Thank you so much for putting a spark of love and light in my day!!
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I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor 
I can't think of one single thing to offer as a suggestion for improvement.
This is a brilliant and very creative way to pay tribute to a person who has touched your life in so many ways. This definitely puts an Acrostic to shame and I may have to "borrow" this idea from you and write my own tributes to a few friends. I thank you for giving us all the opportunity to get to know Adriana through your awesome, lettered descriptions! I bet she was thrilled and not at all snarky when she viewed it! This was a real pleasure to read. Thank you so much for sharing it with us all!! 
Consider inserting "me" directly after "placed".
In the paragraph that preceded this sentence, "it" was referred to as a proper noun, being capitalized each time. However, this time it is not. 
