Please accept this review as a friendly gesture from one writer to another. Keep any suggestions you may find useful and discard any you don't!
I love the unique incorporation of children's books and how they shaped our individual love of reading and writing in our early years. I was a fan of many different types and styles and must admit that I was a bit advanced for my age. I was reading Judy Blume in 1st grade rather than waiting until the 4th. I went through The Emperor's New Clothes so many times that my book was void of both the front and back cover. The same with Black Beauty and Rebecca of Sunnybrook Farms.
Wow! Thank you for taking me back in time to the days of my innocent, untainted imagination!
Hey Numb Hands! My name is Kristi and I am helping Hannah ♫♥♫ with the judging of the Ins & Outs that have been created by our Paper Doll Gang Newbies!
Please take this review as a friendly gesture from one writer to another. Keep any suggestions you agree with and discard those you don't.
I love the question posed for this particular In & Out. I do wish that some of the members who offered their ideas would have followed your rules of keeping it appropriate for younger readers. But, this is not your fault.
I hope this proves to offer up some good advice that we can all pass on to our school children.
Thank you for sharing such a caring sentiment with us all and keep up the awesome work!
Hello kiyasama. After reading "The Thrill is Gone" , I would like to offer you your first review of five. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
What a well written tribute to the King of Pop! I enjoyed reading every word - not just the ones written in regards to Michael, but the very interesting details of how you came to know him, respect him, admire him. I was also fascinated to learn more about you. I had no idea you were raised in Africa! How cool is that!?!
MY FAVORITE PART
Dear, dear Michael, I never got to meet you in person, but you had such a tremendous impact in my life and for that I thank you. With your death, I hope you finally find the solace you could never find on earth. Those who love, and have always loved you, will keep you in their hearts forever.
Rest In Peace, and give those Angels, in heaven, as good a performance as you gave to us.
SUGGESTIONS
I have not one suggestion to offer that could improve this already perfect tribute!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am delighted to finally visit your port - something I should never have waited this long to do. I am very excited to read more of your masterpieces, if they are all as pleasant to read as this one was. Thank you for sharing your talent with us all!!
Hello Mark C ~ 9 years on WDC!. After reading "A Change In Perspective" , I would like to offer you your fourth review of seven. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
I have read some endearing pieces during my time here at WDC, as well as throughout my life - this one definitely ranks at the very top of all my favorites!
MY FAVORITE PART
Having a cuddle
I never feel small.
SUGGESTIONS
I am sorry, but I have no suggestion to offer!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
The sentiments throughout this tender piece held my attention and grabbed my heart. At one point, I had to stop so I could hug Freddi, my German Shepherd! By the end, I was ready to hug my neighbor, the mailman, and the convenient store clerk! But to keep from freaking them all out, I resorted to hugging myself! I love this piece and am so thankful you shared it with us all.
Hello Mark C ~ 9 years on WDC!. After reading "Performance Not Required" , I would like to offer you your third review of seven. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
Mark, thank you for sending this my way! The message begins with the spotlight on the actor - the one hiding behind a mask of, what I consider to be societal disillusion. The message then turns to the way we should live life. Real. No matter what real is. Just real. Just ourselves.
the ones who take mere friendship
and make of it a priceless treasure
expanding it with words and actions
straight from the heart,
forming lasting connections
between their souls and ours.
SUGGESTIONS
I have not one suggestion to offer this 5 star piece!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I think this is a beautiful expression of how we should all live our lives. The comparison of how we hide our true identities behind the mask just like a thespian is an old one, but it still reigns true - too true. I commend you for being confident enough with yourself to realize that the disillusioned self is no way to go through life! Very good piece that I shall recommend highly!
Wow! This is a really cool idea! I never knew it existed and am so very pleased to have been introduced to it by a good friend, Just call me Omni! I think this is an awesome addition to all the wonderful activities going on here at our home away from home!
OMG!!! Since my inception here at WDC, I have had only a couple of poems written about me. This one takes the cake!! I love you, my dearest friend in the whole wide world!! Your return has made me whole again and has put a never ending smile upon my face. I can't wait to one day hug your neck and kiss your cheek and hold your hand like we are six years old!!
Thank you, Stacy Lynn! You have made this already incredible year even more incredible! Please don't ever go away again. Or, if you do, make sure you take me with you!!!
This is an intimate and vividly descriptive write concerning the dramatic life of living with a person who suffers from Bipolar Disorder. I love the comparison with colors and how you tied it in with the action of sewing. Very well written. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the Maya Angelou Fan Package! The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters ! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor
Sherri, I never realized how difficult it would be to type with a body covered in goosebumps. I didn't just feel the love you have for your mother, I held the love. This is an extremely well written and heartfelt tribute to your mother, may she rest in pain free peace. All my heart and love go out to you. I thank you for sharing this personal piece of you with us all here at WDC.
MY FAVORITE PART
Cried a river of tears when cancer claimed you.
although I knew you were no longer in pain.
Grieved when you joined the angels too,
selfishly wanting you here with me again.
Thank you so much for enlightening us all on the Sticky that we all love so much. This partial autobiography was extremely well written and such a joy to read. I did not notice any technical errors whatsoever, which is what I would expect from such a "renowned" journalist and editor! I have a lot to learn from you and hope you don't mind teaching me. Again, thank you for sharing your story with us!!
What a brilliant, unique, and interesting way to offer us, your classmates, a brief introduction as to who you are and why you joined the class! This is awesome and I envy your imaginative talent. This was quite the joy to read and I thank you for helping me to broaden my own imagination.
Howdy, Robin:TheRhymeMaven and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "Mirrored Flashes of Time…" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
I have rated this piece a 5 because that is as high as the system will allow me to go. But in all honesty, this is a 10. Living not too far from the Gulf of Mexico, I remember the horror and the devastation as if it were yesterday. Normally, I am not one to watch TV, but the three months of that fateful time period would not allow my eyes, or my heart, to peel away from the set. I drove my boyfriend insane. I cried from my gut for three long and horrid months. Then, I couldn't watch any more. I couldn't listen any more. I couldn't think about it any more. It took me until the following Mardi Gras to be able to begin contemplating all the loss that occurred in so many ways. I remember the first time I got online and did a search for "Katrina destruction pictures" in early February of 2006. As soon as the results came up, my boyfriend cringed and walked to the bathroom and came back with two whole rolls of toilet paper. Without saying a word, he set them both right next to my mouse. This piece has captured my heart and my gut almost as if it were August 23, 2005 all over again. I sincerely hope that if this was written from an insider's perspective, all that can be has been restored.
SUGGESTIONS
None whatsoever.
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy, SonofDrogo and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "A Heart That's Clean" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
An exceptionally well written Shakespearean sonnet that goes full circle in describing an inner battle dealing with forgiving one who has brought about pain and grief. I love the questions leading up to the final outcome, which is one we should all ultimately arrive at when dealing with such an event.
SUGGESTIONS
There is not one suggestion that could serve any purpose for this already perfect piece!
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy, Devil Writer and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "Faceless Songs of Nothingness" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
WoW! I simply love the perfect flow of this well thought out and well written poem! The imagery is alarmingly real as it left the scene of transpiring death lingering in my mind. I am awed by your poetic talent. Thank you so much for sharing this; I will be marking it as one of my favorites.
SUGGESTIONS
NONE!! Why would I suggest any improvement for a piece that needs none? This, to me, is perfect as is.
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy, Xander Riley and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "Love Angel" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
Awwww... how honestly open and sweet! Any wife, or sweetheart for that matter, would fall to her knees to have a poem such as this written for her. This is a very endearing piece that touched me in such a gentle and loving manner. Through your awesome poetic words, I could see the light in your wife's eyes and completely understand why you would crave that brightness forever. Thank you so much for sharing this piece of you with us all!
SUGGESTIONS
Maybe find me a man to love me this much!! Okay, since you can't do that... don't do anything. This poem is perfect and I wouldn't change a thing!
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy, Xander Riley and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "The Stage of Life" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
An excellent rendition of life that briefly touches on some of the most important and often disregarded aspects that we all experience. I love how you have used the stage and a scene being played out as the metaphor. Every reader will be able to relate to this piece and be able to place him/herself right into the starring role! Great job!!
SUGGESTIONS
NONE!! I think this piece is perfect as is.
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy aralls! I am here to offer you a review of your item: "Master Charles Henry Davis" that you entered in "Invalid Item" ! Please note that my method of reviewing is based on honesty, how I like to be reviewed, and the overall feeling(s) that your piece invokes in me.
IN GENERAL
Thank you for providing me with such awesome reading material. Not only is it extremely well thought out and well written, it is eye-opening, informative, touching and inspiring. I am jealous of your impeccable style of writing; your ability to grab the reader's attention immediately and hold on to it until the very last word! I enjoyed reading this very much.
WHAT I LIKED BEST
Typically, I would say that the lesson was what I liked best, but in this case, I have to say that your writing style is what I enjoyed most. But, I would like to add that the style made the lesson that much more enjoyable to learn.
SUGGESTIONS
“I have my own pencil, ma’am.” I could be wrong, but I think "ma'am" should be capitalized since it is being used as the name.
I have a eight-year-old "a" should be "an".
Thank you for entering in this month's contest and for the opportunity to read, rate and review your piece! I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you again in the next round!!
Howdy warriormom! I am here to offer you a review of your item: "Danny ((still under construction))" that you entered in "Invalid Item" ! Please note that my method of reviewing is based on honesty, how I like to be reviewed, and the overall feeling(s) that your piece invokes in me.
IN GENERAL
A very well written and well styled short that narrates the difficulties and horrors of dealing with a childhood condition I am just now learning about. This piece is well thought out and informative.
WHAT I LIKED BEST
I liked having the opportunity to learn something new, namely that this Attachment Disorder is sometimes the basis for the mentality of serial killers and psychopaths.
SUGGESTIONS
Jeni was 7, adopted now for 2 years, Typically, the rules of writing numbers require that those under 10 are spelled out while 10 and above are written numerically. So, "7" and "2" should both be "seven" and "two".
or concern about seeing, his mother. The comma should be placed after "about" rather than after "seeing".
into the “system”, where he would The comma is not necessary.
For instance once they were awakened Place a comma after "instance".
Thank you for entering in this month's contest and for the opportunity to read, rate and review your piece! I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you again in the next round!!
Oh, MY!! Who cares about the rhyme, meter, flow, rhythm, or anything else! This is so sweet and I am more than extremely honored to be your friend! Thank you for the awesome sentiments throughout this poem! You are truly the best thing that has happened to me in a long time!! Lub you so much!
Howdy, Christina~Thanks StoryMaster and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "To YoU…" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
A very deep and emotional piece that had me suffering right along with the main character. At first, the random capitalized words were distracting, but then I realized that those specific words WERE, in fact, more powerful when capitalized. I also like the off-beat formatting that can be found in places throughout the poem.
SUGGESTIONS
I wanna scream ‘coz of the pain, For us older readers, "'coz" is a bit bothersome. I would consider changing it to "'cause".
Is something that puzzles me no end. Consider inserting "to" directly after "me".
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy, Clarified Chaos and thank you for participating in the "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "Van Helsing's Battle" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
A very descriptive, hair raising, and spine tingling rendition of an excerpt from Dracula. If you ask me, this poem belongs in the book!! The rhythm flows frighteningly well and the rhyme blends together smoothly. Great job!
SUGGESTIONS
Till morning came along with the sun, The use of "Till" always puts me in the mind of a garden. I have always recommended people use "'til" when using it as the shortened version of "until".
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
As part of your winnings, you are receiving the Hemingway Fan Package! The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor
And yet again, you have captured my full attention with your poetic story telling talent. Only this time, you incorporated a rhyming and rhythmic form.
MY FAVORITE PART
For what is lost to us. We are strangers once more, every ray
Of sunshine is agony, an implacable reminder of stupendous madness;
And thus the dimming of the night and the dawning of the day
Become a dreadful thing. With light comes clarity. The sadness
Stems from morning regrets; the matchless folly of fulfilled desires
Overwhelms last night's gladness. The sun awakes, the moon tires.
SUGGESTIONS
Sitting here in watchful silence, each in our own way grieving Since the rest of this piece contains punctuation, I would place a period after "grieving".
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am very glad to have found this piece! I am still sitting here in awe of your story telling abilities; how you manage to draw me in with your first word and still have my full attention long after I am finished reading. Again, I thank you for sharing your masterpiece with us all!
As part of your winnings, you are receiving the Hemingway Fan Package! The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor
A very well written poetic story that narrates a scene in the loathed marriage counselor's office.
MY FAVORITE PART
the lying bitch, her tears accompanied by heaving tits
in the hopes of stirring up his sympathy and my jealousy.
SUGGESTIONS
An maybe while he sits there leaning back in the chair I believe that "An" should be "And".
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am always impressed by your poetic story telling abilities. Not many people can tell a full story in so few words and poetically at that. I love the realness; the no holds barred attitude in your writings. I appreciate and respect how you are not afraid to use profanity when the story calls for it. You are very capable of drawing the reader in to the exact nature of your writings. Thank you for sharing this with us and please, keep up the great work!
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Review of
Magic of Love (E) A Spenserian sonnet in strict iambic pentameter-1st place in PDG Alumni Poetry Contest. #1591723 by Koyel~writing again
Wow!! A beautiful rendition of the bliss that is derived from overcoming a past love and finding a new, more meaningful one.
MY FAVORITE PART
The phantoms of her dreary past ensnare.
Her tender feelings, easy prey they find.
SUGGESTIONS
Till ample bleeding, Consider changing "Till" to "'Til" as "till" causes me to think of preparing a garden.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
After reading this poem, I am left with a feeling of contentment and satisfaction in knowing that true love will prevail over the darkness that false love creates. Very good job in painting a narrative picture for the reader. Thank you for sharing this piece with us all!
Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the Adopt-A-Newbie Fan Package! The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters ! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor
A very splendid and delicate ode to a blooming love in springtime!
MY FAVORITE PART
Minstrel like cuckoos
rain down melody, spreading
an aura of love.
Crimson roses bloom,
waiting to be touched and loved,
by my tender hands.
SUGGESTIONS
Minstrel like cuckoos Consider changing "minstrel like" to "minstrel-like".
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I love the sweet picture that this Haiku paints. It is very delicate in nature making that much more relished by the reader. Great job and thank you for sharing your artistic talent with us all!
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I love this piece and am so thankful you shared it with us all. 
! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor 
None whatsoever.
Okay, since you can't do that... don't do anything. This poem is perfect and I wouldn't change a thing!
“I have my own pencil, ma’am.” 
I could be wrong, but I think "ma'am" should be capitalized since it is being used as the name.
Since the rest of this piece contains punctuation, I would place a period after "grieving".
