|Hi, I'm Sciwriter, and I thought I'd give your short story a quick review.
Firstly, I see you are quite new to WDC, so welcome to the site, I hope you find it helpful in your quest to improve your writing.
Okay, that said, on to your story...
First off, a little tip... ensure you format your story when posting. I'm sure in your eagerness to post, and possibly that the fact that you are new to the site, you may have overlooked formatting. However, checking the format to ensure paragraph spacing is correct will make for a much easier read, and will no doubt result in more reviews.
Overall, I found your story to be quite interesting, although it does come across as a tad, now how shall I put this, a tad clinical. I reads as if you are labouring to use as many words possible to get your point across, when in fact in this case “less is more” and will help with the flow of things.
For example your first paragraph...
(I believe people who say Tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all, have no idea what they’re talking about. I don’t believe anyone would say the same if the context was about taking drugs or harming oneself. Yet for some reason, it is perfectly acceptable to use to sentence in the context of love.
This brings me to my next dilemma… Love. A word used so often these days it seems to have lost most of the meaning behind the accursed word. Best Friends often say they love each other, people often say they love their pets or their belongings, it seems nowadays if you feel any sort of attraction to an object or person this feeling would be arrogantly mistaken for love. So it now stands to reason that if someone were to really love someone else then even saying the words “I love you” would now have such little meaning. At least that seemed to be the case in my situation.)
With the opening paragraph, it is extremely important to capture the reader as quickly as possible. You need to grab their attention and hook them into reading further. So rather than push them forward with lots of stuff, try keeping it simple yet gripping. Such as...
(Love. A confusing word to say the least, as most undoubtedly have no idea. There are many types of love, between friends, for a pet, or some belongings. But human love is basically kicked off by physical attraction, and then transforms into that meaningful relationship. However, my own love enthused meaningful relationship turned out to be something quite different; different in a way that led me to be disdainful of the word, love...)
I hope you can see by the above that it is somewhat shorter than yours, yet I feel basically covers what you were trying to get across. And the final part would probably get the reader to want to continue reading so they can find out why your love was different, and why you felt such disdain for love.
There are a few minor mistakes in the story such as capital letters when there shouldn't be, and as for grammar and spelling, well I won't comment because I do not know whether you are American or English. I myself am English and know although we share a common language, our grammar and spelling can be different.
Overall, it is a good solid story, with a somewhat unexpected ending, one I personally didn't see coming.
I hope this small review helps you in some way, but if you do decide not to take any notice, not to worry because that is your right as a creative.
If you do write any more stories, and I see them I will endeavour to offer my view if you wish. There are also numerous groups which you can join so you can learn the art of creative writing and get help along the way.
Happy writing, and enjoy the site,