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Review Style
My review technique is extremely forthright and candid. If you want to have an honest review I will give it to you, I don't sugarcoat it. I am very truthful toward what I believe needs to be modified and what is good in the work.
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I am good at being honest, finding the good in the pieces and telling you what you need to work on.
Favorite Genres
Horror, Poetry
Least Favorite Genres
Romance,
Favorite Item Types
Poetry and Short Stories
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Public Reviews
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Review of Saturday  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (4.5)
{/indent}Let me begin by saying my perspective of the story, it is about a girl who realized that someone is missing a 'Jane Doe' and that she lost someone who she wanted in her life.
If I am wrong by all means-- feel free to correct me. (I probably am)

         Here is some advice for this paragraph: [] - Your choice to change or add.

[Think about connecting this paragraph to the previous] [However,]a noise which swiftly wafted through the air, meaning that Tyler had awoken]. Time to grab him and head for the grocery store while he was in happy mode. Lilly was at her friend’s rehearsing. Jeff, out with friends, she could pick them both up on the way home. If she planned a quick supper [they would be able to arrive at] the school by six-thirty for [the] dress rehearsal.

Other than that great job, keep up the great work!

Stars: (4.5/5.0)


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Review of Gone  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (5.0)
         I am going to guess on what this is based on what I read, it is a poem about depression which I would say is pretty dam good. Suffering from clinical depression as of the moment I find hope in the small things that I accomplish which is hard to do if you have this disease.
         You illustrated the symptoms of how normality and how change affects the mind when our hopes can be crushed with the snap of fingers. Every day you can be further away from your goal than you started off from-- from your significant other, from your sister or brother... every moment is a series of hope and skirmishes to stay sane during these years or months it is all about the writhing fear of it coming back.

{}I liked the poem, keep it up!


Rating: (5.0/5.0)



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Review of I Live There  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (4.5)
An empty theater has the ghosts of the past, ghosts of what the show could be or would be if only people would be alive enough to watch the show. (I am talking of living people, but their apathy towards the theater).

Every person has the ghost of their choices that they also wish to be or choices they wish they chose. But overall people have decisions every day that determines how they are going to 'act' or how they would stage-a-play, everyone has a weird side also in their own way.


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Review of Autumn Forecast  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (5.0)
I will begin to say that I like the way you compared humans to geese as we go inside as the geese have nowhere to go and we do. They huddle together as we huddle in front of a cackling fire that burns with a furiously with unkempt rage at the fact we have ignored the cries of the geese up on their mountain. As the geese have nor clothes or boots they huddle together like penguins that are teetering on the edge of warmth.

Bravo (5.0/5.0 stars)

Keep up the great work!


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Review of Small Steps  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (4.5)
The first step and every step after the first are the most important in life, even the steps backward. Happiness is found in every path you walk even the unbeaten path that has been walked by you alone or others before you.

I liked the poem, (4.5/5.0 stars).

Keep it up.


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Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have never had unrequited love but I have seen unrequited love, it is a beautiful thing. I loved the way you worded the poem to show your emotions for the reader, to synchronize the lines with your insides to describe that you know what they think about yourself (*I was going to say me but the poem isn't about me) but you know they think about you but not in the way you believe it.

CONGRATS GREAT POEM!!


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Review of Darkness  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (4.5)
We all have these items that we bury inside a shroud of fear that entitles us the creation of something hiding in the shadows. It is the way humans react to things they do not understand when we light that match we illuminate the fear and idea. I liked the way how it is written but there is a lot of grammar errors but other than that... I am going to give you 5.0 stars, as I really enjoyed reading it.


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Review of Elements of Life  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (5.0)
The personification of elements that we make use of creates this sense of the beauty of nature. We can relate the connection with our feelings to the dripping of water from a pipe sticking out of the wall in the city. Sorry about that I got a little off track. What I liked was the way you made the writing... congrats.

I really did not see anything wrong...

Keep up the great work and keep a positive attitude!


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Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (5.0)
Here is a great beginning of the installment. How we mold the notions that other people tell for our own idea and our own gain. It is like the Sophism where an individual believes that he is the only one in the universe and he is talking to people whom he has created for his own amusement. However, there are several types of alternate realities as there are three levels. Level III would be the choices that we make that lead to different outcomes in different realities.

I would propose clarifying or starting out while talking about that... if that is where your direction is leaned towards.

Other than that good work! Keep it up!


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Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (5.0)
This took me a while to think about and I was glad to have read the... poem, prose, sample? But it doesn't matter what it is as the story is a helluva one. The color of yellow is of the intricate design of the color is a vibrant and quaint description. Yellow is a texture that could be a fiendish color and a lovely design.

Congrats, I loved it and keep it up!


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Review of Scars to Heal  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is an amazing short story, I don't if I would ever triumph over the scars that would ensue after defeating cancer. It would be a constant reminder of what I have overcome but it would be a memory that would be a good one. The flow was good it was well written and it was a great theme. I am a guy so for me it would be a victory.

Nice work!!!


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Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (5.0)
This piece shows how lost our mind can get after experiences. I am currently with a battle with depression and I have been fighting on different fronts. I love this poem it shows the futility of our mind. It is a bipolar appendage that is our greatest weapon and our most dangerous weapon.
Great job! Keep it up.


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Review of Goodbye  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am going to begin by guessing that it did not work out with the two people in this piece. I can relate to that a lot of things not working out. There was a spark and there was so much love and then something happened. I know how you feel, it was an amazing piece.


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Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (3.5)
I would like to issue some tough love before I begin to review this, you might need to explain how you can relate to this by going into more detail in to find yourself. As this would be very helpful for the observant reader if you share a little bit about your struggle and how this had helped you it would be a very good article.

You said: [We have 5 significant senses. (What is it? Who knows.)]
It is not: What is it? Who knows.
It is: What are they and who knows?

But other than that everything is good


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Review of Choice  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (5.0)
The world is a dark place, tensions are rising with every political leader and party. We must make a choice that affects every other choice it is the will of our own. I was in jail trying to figure out where I had gone wrong... where I had missed a camera in the bank. Good job... The world is a screwed up place.


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Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is an amazing nonet, it reminds me of the military training where people you meet can become friends for life. It also reminds me of all of those I have lost in the fires of war. I am reminded day in and day out of my childhood always trying to explore.


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Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is very philosophical and very well created; it makes me think of things differently. It would really help if you explain what the truth is, that is if we need help understanding things also too. There are things that we can explain and cannot explain the mundane and bats*** crazy; however, there is always a go-between.

Good work, keep it up


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Review of Swan Lessons  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: E | (5.0)
I do not know what to think about this. This is an amazing poem it shows the light in the beginning and then has a downfall that shows the emotion really radiating the anger later in Life.


I really enjoyed the poem. Keep up the amazing work and never stop writing.


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Review of bedtime  
Review by A.S Kilosnikoft
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This reminds me of a time not too long ago when everything was exciting and interesting. It is true that parents do secret things at night when you fall asleep. It is amazing I hope you keep up the great work! Keep on writing...
Nothing needs to be changed.


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