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326 Public Reviews Given
326 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
WARNING: If I say "I'm going to be brutally honest" I'm not lying and you may or may not cry (it's happened before.)
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, Historical Fiction, Mythology
Least Favorite Genres
Nonfiction, Romance (although the occasional good one I'll review)
Favorite Item Types
Well, I suppose statics. I like crosswords, but those don't particularly need reviews. I read more short stories than poems.
Least Favorite Item Types
Uh, I probably won't read a script, because I would prefer to see them acted out.
Public Reviews
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Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a great story about the wonderful caringness of a boyfriend to her girlfriend's family. Great job! One grammar mistake, I think. Where it says "It can't be, Tom for sure." I think it's supposed to be "It can't be Tom, for sure." Possibly, I think either could work under the circumstance. But the other one makes more sense to me. Just my thought. Anyways, great job and Write On!
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Review of Crusader  
Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a nice poem. The style works well, the rhymes are clever, and the italicized words at special effects. Props to you for that! Only one grammar mistake that I see. In the first line, I believe it should be "If might makes right, why fight at all?" Just replace the period with a question mark. Good job otherwise!
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Review of All Hallow"s Eve  
Review by CJ Reddick
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Wow. This is an interesting story. Did the child's parents just leave him/her to die? Maybe a slight bit of background on how the child died would help clarify a little bit. Also, you should always captialize Daddy when using it as a name. With some slight editing, I think this will be a great story!
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Review of Blackberries  
Review by CJ Reddick
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This poem certainly makes me hungry for blackberries! You speak about blackberries like they were your comfort food. Were they? i also liked the Pi form. Very interesting. All-in-all, great job.
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Review of "Laura"  
Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hahaha! This story is absolutely hilarious. I do indeed wonder what stories feel like while editing. It was driving me crazy, trying to figure out why Laura was always italicized. At the end, not only does it make sense, but it is funny. I was thinking, "What kind of horrible surgery is she going to have done to her." I never even realized she was a book. Way to go and Write On!
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Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a great prologue. I really, really, hope you decide to continue on with it. And soon, of course. You are so good at writing stories about Egyptian mythology, please take my gentle urge to Write On! One thing I would say, though. At the end, when it says the world would go "topsy-truvy", that sort of took away from the seriousness of the whole thing. An Ancient Egyptian most likely would not have used that term, especially not in such a serious moment. Other than that, everything was great.
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Review of FOR KEL AND NANCY  
Review by CJ Reddick
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a wonderful poem about good friends. Good friends are hard to come by, believe me, I know. You are very lucky to have such good friends. Great job all-in-all!
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Review of Baby Love  
Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this story! I have read it three times and each time I pick up something I never noticed before. You really are quite a master of comedy. This gives a little background to Hathor and Khenti, why they are good friends. If you were trying to go along with myths, I would have a problem, since according to myth Hathor was never a baby, Ra, after capturing Sekhmet, altered her into Hathor's form. But you have already stated that you are not trying to follow the old myths at all, you are just trying to make your own. Great job!
My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Okay, this was a good Halloween poem. The only problem was, the prompt for this round was to write about something funny that happened on vacation. :( Sorry.
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Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this story. It's so funny. Things just go wrong! You can't really control it. I was in Yellowstone once and heard a man say that his father's trailer had been hit in a car accident and totaled! Great job and congratulations on winning the contest.
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Review of Two Ordinary Men  
Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was a great story. I have a sneaking suspicion that you are somehow related to these two men. I liked how you made one man's story blue and the other man's red. Then, at the end, when they met each other, you made the font purple. That was a great idea. One suggestion: Try double-spacing the words. It became kind of blurry as I read, but it would be a good idea anyways.
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Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Please note that this is just my opinion, and you, as the author, do not have to follow anything that I say.
This is a funny exchange. The one thing I would note is that when it says "If I say you are ugly, I'd soon be a have been." I would put it like this: "If I say you are ugly, I'd soon be a has been."
Other than that, good job.
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Review of Project  
Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was a good poem. You can almost feel the woman's sadness. Good work.
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Review of Kebehut  
Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was a wonderful story. It was truly great. It's so good, I am at a loss for words. All I can say is: Great Job.
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Review of Fades  
Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: E | (5.0)
First let me point out that this is my opinion, and you, as the author, do not have to listen to it at all.
This was an interesting take on the super-hero prompt.
The story was great. It kept me guessing. Now I wonder what will happen next. Will the gateway/portal be reestablished? Will the Fades make themselves known to the humans? Will the relationship of the two worlds change, or stay the same?
This was a great story.
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Review of Requiem  
Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First, let me point out that this is simply my review, and you, as the author, do not have to listen to anything I say.
I liked this story. It had a great plot.
The ending was a good way to end it. The hero learned a final lesson from his mentor, and probably the most important lesson a hero can learn.
There were a few grammar errors. For example, ""Well we can still catch 'em." Said Meteor." The correct way to put this would be "Well, we can still catch 'em," said Meteor.
Overall, this was a great story.
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Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This was a good story. I was completely taken by surpise in the end, although looking back, I should have seen it coming. There was a few gramatical errors, but nothing to obious. A good red all-in-all.
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Review of Another One Down  
Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this story as well. In my mind, some of the funniest things in life are reactions. I will continue to read through the rest of your stories. I hope they are all as good as the ones I have read.
C.R.
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Review by CJ Reddick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this story! The innocence and naivete of little Ihi is sweet. The reactions of the older gods is humorous and very entertaining. I especially liked the part where they all frantically went searching through the pond to see if the fish was still there. It is priceless!
All-in-all, a very good story with a nice touch of humor.
Keep up the good work!
C.R.
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