This is a good poem. The flow is good and the meaning well "most of us can relate". Be careful with your punctuation, there are a few corrections that needs attention. Thanks for sharing.
Great poem. I can relate to your feelings on this one. Very well written. I lost my mom in 1997. I never stop thinking about her. And I still sometimes feel her presence. Great poem. God bless you.
The flow of the poem is very good until the second line of the last verse "spies have been and gone" you might want to change have been to had come and gone. I think it will flow better. Try deleting one of the "my" in the third verse last line. But overall the poem is good. Thanks for sharing.
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