"Out of the Frying Pan and Into the Fire" is an acrostic poem about a dying Earth, and the escape to somewhere else in the Milky Way. The acrostic, that it, the reading downward with the first letter of each line reads, "The Grass is Always Greener on the Other Side." A lengthy acrostic, deserving of credit. The poem itself examines the plight: "Escape is our only option in which to save the day." There is reference to "Yellow Suns" and "Red suns", and also a, "mad god" who is trying his worse. Optimism is mixed with pessimism, for even though the, "...forests are beautiful," still, "Human beings are disappearing. The question is, what will become of humanity? A fine line that stands out: "Searching, ever searching, for that ideal world."
There are a few glitches. Line (7): "Send them spiralling into the night;" it should be "spiraling." The line prior to that, talking about anchoring the ships "to heed Earths call," it should be "Earth's," showing possession. For line (13), "Wondering if they under a curse", you need, "are" after "they." Lastly, in the next to last stanza, "Others though begin to notice." Two commas would be apropos, as in, "Others, though, begin to notice." This is for clarity, of course, and helps the reader greatly.
This is a fine concept, with imagination as well as technical aplomb dealing with the acrostic and also the relevant message. I enjoyed this very much, and I thank you for its production and for sharing. Write on. |
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