I review a fair share of poems, Do not make the mistake of looking with a jaundiced eye at the number of the rating I assign.
I gave you a 3,0 which is dead center average.
One must remember that thiis same scale applies to English professors, professional poets, and fifth grade students in East
Los Angles Schools. It is almost impossible to stretch this scale to apply with precision to all poems. Therefore a reviewer
must, of necessity, fall back on some subjective qualities. I am perhaps a little more opinionated than some others
with my interpretation of what poetry is supposed to be.
Read other poetry, including classical poetry and you will develop a gut feeling which will serve you well as you write your own.
I recommend reading I hope this will shed some light for you on how to improve your writing. I especially stress
that all writers, especially poets, are limited only by their vocabulary and their imagination.
All writing including poetry (which is posted) should have one thing in common, it is supposed to communicate with the readers. If not then
why would one even bother to post it? I have written things which were just to blow off steam, but I remember the readers and do them
the kindness of using that magic delete button.
Now while articles communicate facts and opinions based of events and facts, poetry is a total other thing. Poetry is the language
of thoughts and feelings. Poetry is multisensory, in that it is to be read aloud. The ear as well as the eye takes in so much more
than the eye alone. One of the tests that I apply to poetry is reading it aloud, and testing for a smooth flow of words that communicate
feelings. The words and thoughts should flow like Tupelo Honey off your tongue.
I personally like sensory words, like silk that you can feel on your skin, like the smell of fresh cinnamon rolls that tease your
brain with the anticipation of taste.
Reading poetry is like sitting outside, you can smell the flowers, hear the leaves chatter to each other
in the breeze, and feel the cold, or warmth of the wind.
One thing which all writers of poetry fall into at times is "Empathy turned inward." It blinds them to the feelings of their reader and the feelings
of people around them. This tends to be a sharp sword with which many poets impale themselves. Readers want to see something
behind the blood, and tears.
A poem can be free verse, or structured with meter, and or rhyme. A poet needs to settle on a type for their poem, and stick with it till
the end of their piece.
A very good investment for a want to be poet, is the rhyming dictionary. They are available now for 97cents and shipping from Amazon.com.
Your poem reflects the fact that you have deep feelings about your subject. Unfortunately you did not do the best job of transmitting them to
your readers.
The single best way to improve is to write every day, Get a friend or companion who will not play mind games and will be willing to read
your work back to you, and will listen while you read to them.
You have an opportunity here, to have writers of all skill levels, review your work. They all can provide insights which if applied to your work will help you get better rapidly.
Good luck and keep writing.
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