It's very touching and it's positive at the end. I like the last part wherein " the opportunity to open another chapter of my life" and "the memories of my father are always with me." A loss is just like closing one's eyes; if you don't open them you wouldn't see the light ahead of you. Best regards!
It is such a different views about lighthouse as in the line "but it casts no light."The poem is quite abstract too and has depth.I hope you lengthen it.Just a suggestion.Write on!
It's a good story that can disseminate information about the life of scavengers and those living near the garbage dump.I've just noticed some characters or sentences not relevant to Joshua as in "Carlos was an ex-con..."I think this is another story.Just a suggestion.Write on!
Nobody is perfect anyway.Why hate yourself? Your story can be a lesson to everybody.It's good you write about it. However, the flow of the story is quite not presented effectively.Just a suggestion.Write on!
It's really kind of deep and somehow true.I like the line "but stolen from the tyrants of life" but i prefer the word "caught" than "stolen."Just a suggestion. I also like the line "and glory be still." It's positive at the end despite the mask he wore to hide his true feelings.It's good.Write on!
It's good to express your opinion into a poem.It is somehow true and it happens at times.You captured your theme well and it is a well wriiten poem too.I think you have talent in writing.Write on!
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I'm quite confused on the theme of the story.It's quite short.It's better if you make it longer. I've noticed that there is lack of unity of the sentences and lacking in punctuation too as in period and quotation marks. It's better to punctuate them so that the reader would understand your story.And there must be emphasis in your story too.Just a suggestion.Write on!
It's full of emotions. I've just noticed the line " Is so destructive and so harmless,"I think they are opposites and confuse me on what kind of love you are giving..and the line "I ask to be mine," should be "I ask you to be mine." A word to complete a line can make it more effective.Just a suggestion.Write on!
It's a good story turned into a poem.I've just noticed that the character in your poem is a witch that tells "go and give love everywhere you go." It's kind of good witch; I find it opposite of her character anyway I think the story is fiction too with a lesson.Write on!
It is creatively written with a good theme.You really captured the word "imagine."I like the last sentence, God said,"are you not precious more than gold."Keep on
writing and best regards!
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Your poem is very true and good.Write on!