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Review of Yesterday  
Review by ErinLynn
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nicely said. I agree that we cannot live in yesterday, nor can we live in the future. We can only live in the present and appreciate what we have and anticipate the beauty that is possible tomorrow.


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Review of We Make It So  
Review by ErinLynn
Rated: E | (5.0)
You say:
"To be of our self
We watch the sun conquer the night each dawn"

For me, this is the struggle of life. To consistently drive out the darkness in my heart that would envelop me.

You say:
"To be of our own will.
Gifted, as though we ever owned anything before we are caged in the earth,
As a celebration for our life.
In a sealed box,
So we can be protected.
As though returning to the earth is a violation.
As though we own this body.
We, and only we, see this as respect.
We make it so."

Are we to be separated forever from that which we are? You are observant to note that only we see this as respect.

You say:
"The delusion used to lay in such a visceral state
So deep within what I believed to be me.
I made that so.
I no longer wish to make anything
So much so that I am willing to give up everything
To enjoy what the author writes
And the musician sings
And the gusts blow
God makes this so."

This is very beautiful and insightful writing. It has given me much to consider about the life that we strive to live instead of just being the life that we are.

Thank you and keep writing.


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Review by ErinLynn
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review by ErinLynn for the HSP Final Exam Contest.
Sorry this is late but I made an error posting this.

This is a beautifully written story. I especially like the attention to detail such as incorporating the lingo of the time. The story flows smoothly and transports the reader back to a time of optimism and courage. I could feel the strength and determination of both Rob and Flo to make the best of a difficult situation. This is a true romance in that it focuses more on the emotions and feelings of the characters. We are allowed to use our imaginations to feel the love developing between them.

Sensual Elements:

Very good use of sensuality such as Rob stealing a kiss to her forehead and Flo laying her head on his shoulder.

Descriptive Elements:

Your description of the hospital and the room where they danced puts me right there with them.

Characterizations:

Flo seems to be a very gentle and caring spirit. Rob is determined and upbeat despite his circumstances.

There are very few typos and not any that take away from the development of the story. It held my attention from beginning to end and the ending was full of hope and promise which is what we expect from any good romance. Overall, an excellent effort.
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Review by ErinLynn
Rated: E | (4.0)
A beautiful sentiment offering hope as well as sound advice.


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Review by ErinLynn
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for your beautiful sentiment. It has touched me and I feel inspired to continue my faith journey despite the obstacles that distract me often. Thank you for reminding me that God's love is so much bigger than any difficulty I may be facing. I am who I am because he specifically and deliberately created me to be in this world in this exact place and time and I believe, it is not an accident that I came across your writing. Again, thank you and may God bless you tremendously.


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Review by ErinLynn
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Thank you for reminding me that God is truly good all of the time. I too can think of many times that God has intervened in my life for my benefit. Often, I complain about my situation or feel depressed about some issue or another, forgetting that He is always good to me regardless of what I am going through. Your essay has inspired me to remember to praise God for everything that happens in my life, good or bad, because everything that happens has a purpose. Praise God!


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Review by ErinLynn
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a very touching story. It reminds me that what may be junk to some is actually a great treasure to others. It also reminds me that we should treat everyone with worth and dignity because we do not know what has happened in a person's life that makes them who they are. God loves and values all of us and so we should value each other because blessings can come from the most unlikely of places.


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Review of A Heart's Dream  
Review by ErinLynn
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a beautiful sentiment of the hope that a heart always has in the future. I have never heard of a quatrain before but I especially like its use here. It builds the emotional commitment necessary for hope to thrive. No matter how a heart is broken, it can always heal with the hope of love in better days to come. Nicely done.


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Review by ErinLynn
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a sweet story. It gets to the core of what we really need from love as opposed to the solitary moments of fascination we sometimes experience when meeting someone new. I like how you used the prompts. They blended nicely into the story and didn't seem too ridiculous. You made it clear what you wanted to say about love and your point is well taken. Perhaps there is a follow up to this story that explores the peace and comfort of a marriage saved from divorce and the thrill of a marriage that is new. Happy writing!


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Review by ErinLynn
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Your poetry is honest and powerful. It goes right to the heart of the matter and uncovers raw emotion and wounded feelings. Your courage in expressing your hurt is appreciated. Touching the heart of the reader is what writing is all about. Best wishes to you as you continue your journey.


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Review by ErinLynn
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
This story seems like it will be interesting. The world of acting and auditions is foreign to me so I'm looking forward to learning something new. There is also a good amount of conflict to keep the story moving. Good luck developing the story.


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Review by ErinLynn
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like the conflict that is building in this story. Already, I can tell there will be tension between Tony and Mary's families. This makes it interesting to see how their budding love for each other will or will not overcome the obvious obstacles. I like love stories that have some tension and conflict in them. It makes the triumph in the end that much sweeter. At least I'm hoping this story will have a happy ending. I'll look forward to following Tony and Mary as their attraction grows.


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Review by ErinLynn
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
This tale gave me chills after reading it but it also gave me much to think about. Can we love someone too much making them too dependent on us and angry if we don't give them what they think we should? This story could apply to many different types of relationships. It is true that sometimes we have to let go of relationships that we have outgrown or can't contribute to anymore, painful as that may be.

The story was brief but to the point. The sentences flowed well and led up to the dramatic ending. A very good read.


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Review of Over A Cup of Tea  
Review by ErinLynn
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The description and imagery in this story is excellent. I especially enjoyed the simple pleasure of loving someone in the everyday moments of life. This simple pleasure is inspiring and what make love worthwhile. Nicely done.
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